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Old 12-13-2007, 03:31 PM   #1
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Antithesis by Watermage - K+

Title: Antithesis
Author: Watermage
Rating: K+
Genre: Drama
DLP category: I think it could go under Romance
Pairing: Harry/Ginny at first
Words: 6,788
Published: December 13, 2007

Status: Complete
Summary: Nineteen years later, life was going great for Harry Potter. He had everything he had ever wanted. Friends, a wife, children. It was perfect. Then he opened his eyes...

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3943025/1/Antithesis

I just read this and I have to say Watermage has made an incredible comeback to fanfiction, I think you guys will really enjoy this, and dont be thrown off by the pairing, it turns out very well


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Old 12-13-2007, 03:52 PM   #2
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Krogan, I must give praise where it is due.

The story is great, with an interesting potential, although I was getting annoyed at it in the beginning.

The only problem I am seeing is that the author has marked it as complete. It is only a oneshot, although with a properly developed plot and clear objective in my mind, and a mass assassination of the litter of kids could turn into a fairly good story. If you know the author maybe you could drop the hint.
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Old 12-13-2007, 03:55 PM   #3
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I dont know him personally but I do know he has an account here
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Old 12-13-2007, 03:57 PM   #4
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Hahaha... Just Epic!
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Old 12-13-2007, 04:34 PM   #5
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Great find Krogan, and great job on Watermage's part. I loved the irony of Harry casting the Full Body Bind on Ginny at the end.
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Old 12-13-2007, 07:15 PM   #6
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Ahh that was pretty good. Nice to see Watermage back in business.

Though, I agree. Its a pity its a oneshot. >_>
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Old 12-13-2007, 08:38 PM   #7
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Beautiful. A nice build up of tension to a perfect climax. I was expecting a bit of torture, but I thought Harry actually staying within the law and sending her to Azkaban was a nice touch.

5/5
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Old 12-13-2007, 08:52 PM   #8
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A brilliant one-shot that really should turn into a novel-length.

Could potentially turn into the best Post-DH out there.

5/5.
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Old 12-13-2007, 10:04 PM   #9
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Awesome.

Utterly awesome.

5/5
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Old 12-13-2007, 11:49 PM   #10
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5/5.

Very well written, with one or two grammars errors that I caught. The whole bit with Luna FUCKING Lovegood caught me off guard. Was certain she was going to say Cho.

Novel lenght? No, with this story it would not work and would simply become nonsensical and boring.
Three part One-Shots, something like the Object Lesson Trilogy would be the best way to go with this story for sequels IMO.
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Old 12-13-2007, 11:51 PM   #11
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I just had to write this story after I was skimming through HBP last night and saw how really random that Ginny/Harry fiasco was. The monster in the chest needed to be explained. He never felt it around Cho after all and he crushed on that chick for 2 years.
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Old 12-14-2007, 12:51 AM   #12
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Water Mage...Well done. Truly; that was spectacular. Great flow, the quotes felt inspired, and the characterization was top notch. Yes, there were some minor grammatical errors, but they were easy to look over. I probably wouldn't have even noticed them if I didn't focus so much attention into language and structure.

Overall, 4.5/5. Keep up the good work...and if you ever feel the inspiration, add to this; the fact that you ended it where you did is the only thing keeping this from being a solid 5/5.
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Old 12-14-2007, 01:01 AM   #13
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I admit that I was skeptical, I usually am of anything that gets rated a 5 around here, it seems to unlikely... I am pleasently shocked however to find that I rather enjoyed this fic. Enough to admit that it probably deserves it's rating, bravo ^.^
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Old 12-14-2007, 02:03 AM   #14
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A good idea that was executed well enough. It had quite a few rough patches, but that can be explained by the long absence of writing from the author, nothing a beta couldn't have fixed with a once-over.

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Old 12-14-2007, 07:21 AM   #15
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Excellent, a fic that show that this epilogue of DH can be of use after all, you just have to destroy all that is written in it.
I found it well written and really good and love this accurate definition of Ginny.
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Old 12-14-2007, 02:55 PM   #16
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I read this one. Not sure why you all would want to see this continued. It works well as a one-shot.

By no means is this an original idea, but it's handled quite well.

An excellent exercise and refresher for the author to get back into writing fanfic. But with nothing new, no real surprises here, and lacking any significant premise or plot, it left me feeling kind of... meh.

Excellent for Water Mage's purpose but I've no interest in seeing this continued or furthered in any way.

4/5 for being nearly perfect in its execution, yet lacking anything new or interesting.
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Old 12-14-2007, 02:59 PM   #17
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I think that this is a refreshing take on a well used idea. I agree with nonjon in that it does all that it needs to do as a one shot. For turning a fairly overused story idea into something very readable 4/5.
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Old 12-14-2007, 03:22 PM   #18
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I have to agree with nonjon that for what it is, it is written perfectly.

However with, "nothing new, no real surprises here, and lacking any significant premise or plot" means this story to me is just average.

No matter how well it is written, if it is boring, it is boring. 3/5
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Old 12-14-2007, 03:25 PM   #19
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I couldn't see this as novel length, but a few one-shots about Harry's life afterwards would be nice. The flow of the story made up for the unoriginality, and I particularly like the quotes thrown in that allude to the ending. 3/5. Would've gotten a four if Harry atleast slapped her or something.
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I personally think this is the best idea of what happened.
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