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Old 12-17-2007, 12:32 AM   #1
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A Twisted Timeline by madnesspersonified - R

Title: A Twisted Timeline
Author: madnesspersonified
Rating: R
Genre: Drama, Humour
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Summary: Much to his displeasure, Harry is thrown back through time into his six year old body. As a result, Harry decides to contort the timeline, purely for his own amusement.

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This fic isn't incredibly realistic (read: not realistic at all), and Dumbledore is very cookie cutter "For the greater good" "Sacrifice one for many" rahrahrah.

However, mobsterboss!Harry is pretty cool, as are some of the minor characters depictions. The author is rather gifted with humor, but problems arise when they try to insert plot.

If you are willing to suspend disbelief, it is a good little time killer, so I thought I'd see what you all think, and it contains some cool quotes like:
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"Somewhat respected...oh well, we're purebloods at any rate, unless we count my great uncle's obsession with house elves, which I don't
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Old 12-17-2007, 12:59 AM   #2
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This have been around for a while... I could have sworn that it was posted on DLP before...

Having said that it is an awesomely funny fic... Mr. Fondlemember the goblin.... LOL

4/5
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Old 12-18-2007, 12:23 PM   #3
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No, this hasn't been posted hear before, only the author's crossover fic.

That said, this certainly isn't the best story ever, but it's very entertaining and funny. A lot of changes to canon safe it from the Recycling Bin. And I'm not sure this will become H/Hr, did I miss something or what?

3.8/5, rounded up to a four.
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Old 01-06-2008, 12:54 PM   #4
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Quite a nice fic, I am enjoying it so far I will have to give it 4/5.
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Old 01-07-2008, 05:44 AM   #5
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You know, I have tried to read this on multiple occasions and I just don't like it, 1/5. But I am not going to officially rate the thread because I generally don't like Humor fics.
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Old 01-07-2008, 06:21 AM   #6
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I liked this well enough until he did the whole mafia-kid thing. Some people can pull off silly, but his attempt just came out ridiculous.
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Old 01-07-2008, 06:43 AM   #7
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Meh, it was kinda funny but I got bored pretty quickly.

3/5
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Old 01-07-2008, 12:52 PM   #8
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This might have been a good fic. I don't know and never will know. The fact that I found three grammar errors right off the bat and the author couldn't decide how to properly spell the Killing Curse ticked me off. 2/5 for what might have been decent.
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Old 01-18-2008, 04:27 AM   #9
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I found this to be a good fic, and any fic that calls Dumbledore a "manipulative young coot" and has a believable Girl!Blaise is good in my book, and while you may need to turn off disbelief a few times, its a great read IMO
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Old 01-18-2008, 01:35 PM   #10
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Why is a 4 star story in the bin?
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Old 01-18-2008, 04:59 PM   #11
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Certainly better than some of the stuff in the library. Not the best, but readable
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Old 01-19-2008, 08:33 PM   #12
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I agree with ip82, the fic was pretty good until the kid mafia thing. Add that with 7 year old Hermione being uber smart, and I couldn't click the X button fast enough.

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Old 01-19-2008, 11:13 PM   #13
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While this has definite flaws, it's a nice little vacation from reality. I've had a good time laughing at it, just as it's supposed to be. Because of the fact that it's in need of a beta reader who is good with grammar, (It has some errors. It's not as bad as about 75 percent of the stories out there, grammatically speaking, though.) and I've found a couple small plot holes, I can only give it 4/5.
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Old 01-23-2008, 03:54 PM   #14
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I thought it was entertaining and doesn't deserve to be binned 4/5
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Old 01-24-2008, 01:02 AM   #15
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Spelling and grammar are all right. The plot is generic, the characters are cookie cutter, and everyone except Harry is an idiot. Somehow, though, it amuses me.

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Old 01-24-2008, 12:29 PM   #16
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It's light, shallow fun. Some of the humor is being stretched too far, but I always love a smart, kickass Harry.

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Old 05-10-2008, 09:26 PM   #17
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A light, entertaining read. It was finished today. 4/5
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Old 05-11-2008, 12:14 AM   #18
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I'll give the finished product a 4/5 for sheer entertainment value.
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