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Old 01-18-2006, 04:24 AM   #1
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Assassin's Apprentice by Fanfix - M

Fics title: Assassin's Apprentice
Author: Fanfix
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Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2745392/1/
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Apprenticeships are given to all the students of sixth and seventh year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. The Board of Governors however arenít pleased with Harry, and therefore, along with Blaise Zabini (for other reasons), is placed in the care of Hagrid, hoping to hamper Harryís learning, and to be given a chance to oust the Care of Magical Creatures professor. Perhaps, though, they should have checked a little more about Hagridís life, and that of Harryís. Because even fate isnít about to try and stop Harry from becoming the best; the best of them all!


A new fic by author of "Harry Potter and Azkaban Guards". Though there are many plot holes its still very enjoable story. Different from most of independent story's where Dumbledore is bastard to Harry. Though Dumbledore portrayed subtle manipulator here Harry doesnt fight with him and still makes his own desicions.
Very good story so far.
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Old 01-18-2006, 04:25 AM   #2
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do you have a link to it?
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Old 01-18-2006, 04:44 AM   #3
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sorry my mistake
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Old 01-18-2006, 06:14 AM   #4
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It starts off nicely. I'm waiting for an update. A few grammatical mistakes though. Maybe I'll offer to beta read it....
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Old 01-18-2006, 06:19 AM   #5
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Added it to Author Alerts. I'll see if he breaks 20k marker before trying reading it...
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Old 01-18-2006, 06:27 AM   #6
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only 2 chaptes just now, but actually quite good, though there are a couple of wtf! moments.
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Old 01-18-2006, 07:44 PM   #7
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It's pretty good. I havnt really given a crap about the few WTF!Moments because pretty much every story has them now days.
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Old 01-18-2006, 07:57 PM   #8
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Pretty good, i'll also wait to see if the story breaks the 20k mark.. in other news, Ip82 hows your next chapter coming??
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Old 01-18-2006, 08:00 PM   #9
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What's with all these people demanding updates from Ip and Ravenclaw, lol. I think it's annoying them... maybe.

*stares at Ip*
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Old 01-18-2006, 08:08 PM   #10
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Yeah, I know what you mean. He's been trying to get me to read it for a while now, but I told him he has to have it well underway and completely sure that he wonít be leaving it, like a lot of his other stories, before I do read it.

Anyways, Iíll get on his case with the updates if itís any good, maybe heíll see this one through. However, I wonít be very optimistic until I see it with my own eyes. :wink:
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Old 01-18-2006, 08:41 PM   #11
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I'm trying, I'm trying... writter's block is damn annoying.
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Old 01-18-2006, 08:42 PM   #12
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annoying bunch, arnt they? Dont give you or Raven a moments peace...
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Old 01-18-2006, 10:18 PM   #13
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This has LOADS of potential. The only problems I see is that Harry is going to be relying a lot on Blaise by looks of the way Ron and Hermione are acting, and I think a fem!Blaise with a sorta love/hate relationship would be better suited. The whole 'The only person that I plan on talking to the whole year is a guy who I spend my every moment with' attitude is kinda gay.
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Old 01-19-2006, 12:43 AM   #14
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Well just read the 2 chapters and there pretty desent. I agree Illusive about that hanging around a dude for a year is quite gay, but im fond of the slower decline with the frindship between the mudblood, poor weasel and Harry instead of the quick betrayal. Has the potential to be a very good story, and a good Dumbles on Harry's side is always welcome.
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really gd start, but i jst wish it was a fem blaise
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He likes Fem!Blaise but I guess he didnt want to deal with relationship crap in this story. Wanted to stay away from romance I guess...
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I wouldve liked to see an argument atleast between ron and harry and perhaps a bit more dialogue more detail about the other subjects they are studying. I also wouldve expected hermione to get all fussy over harry over the poisoning and ron to talk about how he's learned oh so many poison detection charms.

Other then that i like it, but id like to see more conflict
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This one has caught my interest. I just hope it's good.
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I still havenít read it, but next time he logs on, Iíll let him know of all your comments. Iím still holding on to my promise that I wonít read it until Iím sure that he isnít going to abandon the story. Who knows, Iíll even volunteer to help with the plot if he plans to finish this fic.
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Old 01-20-2006, 10:07 AM   #20
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Sounds good. Hopefully it'll keep going.
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