Paranoia By CrimsonNoble - T (One-shot)

[Antivash]

Title: Paranoia
Author: CrimsonNoble
Rating: T (PG-13)
Genre: General
DLP Category: General
Pairing: Implied H/Ginny; Vague sense of H/Tonks
Status: One-shot
Summary: Paranoia can be justified.
Link: PARANOIA (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3690666/1/Paranoia)

Interesting little one-shot. Personally, I liked it. Bit of violence, small bit of acceptable Ginny/Ron Bashing. Pretty In Character for everyone. Of course, if you dislike disfigured Harry fics, this might not be for you.

Pretty well written as well. I didn't notice any obvious grammar or spelling mistakes, and it flows really well. I disagree with the mention of memory charming the new-guy auror, but whatever, its minor.

Over all enjoyable read, I feel.

4/5.

[Jearom]

This is the first really good one-shot that I have read that would make for a good full length story. 4/5

[Oz]

;_; I want more. I'd like to see a full-length story with this Harry, but it's good enough as it stands.

4/5

[scaryisntit]

I find it odd that Harry continually ignores Tonks' plea for attention.

"I swore." "I swore." she says, but Harry doesn't seem to care. I suppose that would be rushing into things though.

Besides that, I agree with Vash.

3.5/5.

[Antivash]

I find it odd that Harry continually ignores Tonks' plea for attention.


I didn't really see it as that, honestly. I mean, at this point, Tonks seems more of a close friend than a potential beau. Further down the line, I could definitely see it as a possibility. But in the current time frame, it seems a bit too soon for that.

[Korisovra]

4/5 from me. It was a very interesting look into this generations new Mad-Eye.

[Richardc269]

I liked the one-shot a lot. An interesting story. 4/5 from me.

[Bukay]

Yep, an interesting one-shot. I'm not a fan of disfigured!Harry, however in this case it's more of a show as to how his character changed after said short episode...

4/5

[Cathal]

Good, I was getting sick of all those SexBomb!Harry's.
4.5/5

[ArseNick]

Interesting. Post-war-disfigured!Harry is +++ to any story, if you wanna make it realistic. Wish this fic was more descriptive of the fight, post-battle trauma and his interaction with his friends.
Still, 4/5

[yojorocks]

I really enjoyed how fast Harry was forced to mature in this brief stint, yet how realistic it was. Too many authors suddenly have Harry acting like an adult for no particular reason, but forcing him out of his teenage life and into not quite adulthood here was very well done. An excellent tribute to the farse of Moody's death in DH. 4/5

[Heather_Sinclair]

Liked it. Didn't care about the arm one way or the other. Thought the end was way too quick, but it was good enough for a one shot. 4/5

[ParseltonguePhoenix]

Too damn short, if you ask me. It really is just a thought, an idea--like the author mentioned at the end. Harry with a magical eye after his first is taken from him is a thought I've played with before--it just adds him a bit of authenticity, I think. "I've been through a bad-ass fight or three, and sure, I lost my eye--the Death Eaters who attacked me lost much more!"

But yeah, I saw Tonks' saying 'I swore' as reassurances to Harry that she'll keep her word...not as grasping for his attention. He asked her not to leave him alone anymore...and she swore. But that's just my opinion.

3.75/5

[eXcalite]

I find it odd that Harry continually ignores Tonks' plea for attention.

"I swore." "I swore." she says, but Harry doesn't seem to care. I suppose that would be rushing into things though.

Besides that, I agree with Vash.

3.5/5.


I would probably ignore her too for the moment. After all with all that loosing his eye and arm business. After that though...

To OP: great fic. Definetly worth continuing.

[Goddessa39]

For some reason Im not that fond of Harry/Tonks, but there are much worse pairings out there so I can stomach some just fine. The thing about Harry needing new body parts would bother me in a longer story but in a oneshot it just fits. This bit is more for how he handles the last of the outtake, so there can be plenty of things that are forgotten and then mashed around.

I like H/G but the Weasley siblings (save Fred and George) are often fun to bash around with a lemon-laced pointed mace on a good day. I could seriously see this as more than just this if it were continued but I believe the eye thing and new arm would get quite annoying.

4/5 instead of a 5 oneshot because it confuses me whether I want more or not.

[Onlyhestands]

Overall I liked it. I think it would make a good full story, but as a one-shot I found it pretty satisfying to read too.
4/5 from me.

[Glernaj]

I find it odd that Harry continually ignores Tonks' plea for attention.

"I swore." "I swore." she says, but Harry doesn't seem to care. I suppose that would be rushing into things though.

Besides that, I agree with Vash.

3.5/5.

This really struck me as something that she was saying to reassure him than anything else.

5/5

[Iztiak]

Hmm, I liked it.

One question, does anyone know of any other well written stories about disfigured and/or extremely paranoid Harry?

I like the idea.

[Jeram]

It's okay - didn't really seem that interesting to me, although perhaps it was the general theme that didn't interest me. Crippled Harry? Not really my favorite genre, it just seems - oddly limiting to me. I liked the reactions to his condition, although they seemed to be written almost like a brush off. And really, the whole thing was really too short for me to really enjoy it.

Middle of the line for me.

3/5
-J

[knothead]

I seem to remember reading this story before. I didn't think it was library quality at the time (I think there were a lot of one-shots that had gotten vetoed which is why I didn't suggest it).

It's a decent story. One grammar error that I saw (Pomfrey is misspelled). I don't know if I'd give it 4 stars though-- it works well enough as a very short story, but I don't know if it would work well as a longer work. I'll say 3.5 stars.

[Croaker]

Edit: as of 7/2/2008. Blame the folks at DLP for making me read this again and correct two spelling errors that pissed me off. Yes, I'm joking about blaming them. No, I'm not joking about what this edit did.

I laughed.


Like other's have said, though I liked it, I don't know if it would be interesting as a longer work. Maybe if it didn't go down the route of pissing and moaning about the arm and eye, it'd be okay.

[BlitzkriegAngel]

I enjoyed it somewhat. Could be a good full lengther. 3.5/5.