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WIP The Havoc Side of the Force by Tsu Doh Nimh - T - HP/Star Wars

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Hw597, Oct 9, 2012.

  1. Gengar

    Gengar Degenerate Shrimp –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Nothing screams pretentious twat more than a teen scolding a 900 year old sage...

    Though, from expanded universe stuff, yoga (leaving epic auto correct) was pretty hardcore. Didn't he murder a Jedi to use the dark side to obscure himself from studios (again, leaving).

    please correct me if I'm wrong, i don't research heavily into SW. I don't particularly like it...
     
  2. Ichai

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    I am at least 90% positive there's an unwritten rule that any HP/SW crossover must have Harry paired with a Twilek.
     
  3. DrSarcasm

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    Update. Link.

    Off to read it.
     
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    Good update, plenty of lolz were had.

    Still enjoying this story, still wish it was updated more often, still wish that Jbern would update it more often.

    At least, the story reads like Jbern is writing it.
     
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    What? No it doesn't, or at least I've never had this impression. o_O
     
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    I get the impression constantly.

    But that could just be a subconscious preconception caused by the fact that I learned of it through the thread, and the first two comments suggest it's Jbern's Pseudonym, I suppose.

    Hmm, now I have to reread this to see if the opinion still stays.

    Oh what burdens reviewers must bear.
     
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    You sure this is Jbern's writing? I mean, a lot of writers have similar styles... And I see no reason for a different pen name.
     
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    This chapter was fucking awesome. More so than usual, I mean.
     
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    I agree. It'll be interesting to see how Harry takes advantage of knowing the Jedi's next move, and the Age Line part was very well done, especially his realization that he doesn't have the materials to undo it.
     
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    I love this so god damn much.

    Reminds me a bit of a black comedy with less cheap humor and more action.

    I hope the side story includes some anakin pranking.
     
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    If they go too heavy on the pranking I can see this going sour very quickly.
     
  13. Republic

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    Someone actually took the 'a long time ago' seriously. Hell yes.
     
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    Yeah, I really liked that too. I wonder if the Force is an ancient ancestor of magic or if they are still two separate things and magic is just unique to Earth.

    Havoc updated was the perfect end to my Thanksgiving. Now if only This one could update sometime over the next month my Christmas holidays will be excellent :D
     
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    It seemed weird that, other than his initial outburst, Harry didn't think twice about Anakin's prophecy or insist that the boy be told.
     
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    It was nice, had to reread the whole thing to understand it but it was nice. Kinda want more.

    There is a distinct lack of quality badass!thief!Harry in the fandom.
     
  17. CrackedMind

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    I was kind of thrown that Harry doesn't react at all to finding out that he indirectly caused the deaths of 27 Jedi (and apparently a few civil wars, etc). Like, I know this Harry is pretty callous, but I figured there'd be some kind of mention to it later in the story... or something. It's understandable that the Jedi react the way they do when Harry's magic physically hurts them (from mild discomfort to apparently death).

    I liked the chapter, but that was something that just stuck out to me.
     
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    It doesn't really change your point but I think Harry's actions didn't kill anyone by sheer effect, but by distracting them at crucial moments. Imagine a narcoleptic pilot
     
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    I'm incredibly happy about the update and really liked it, but Harry starts to grate a bit. I know that this is purely subjective, but the effortless way how he handels every situation bothers me. He seems to have for everything a gimmick or a magic trick and a perfect backup plan to boot. Furthermore, in the previous chapter he told the CorSec-Jedi, that mindtricks are criminal and now he uses effortlessly the Imperius curse in a "crowded" room, because it's convenient. It just seems, that even his morals are always where they need to be.

    I don't know if it was noticed, but Harry forgot his bodyguard (the former slave). Usually a mafia would torture and kill that guy, because of his apparent close proximity to Harry to send a message. But the tone of the last chapters tells me, that Harry will probably pick the guy up at an agreed safespot. These small things just drain the tension at least for me and my only hope for the next chapters is an "unexpected" apperance or mention of Belatrix/Palpatine to renew some dread for the future.

    The last thing, that irked me was the pranking stuff. Out of nowhere Harry starts an elaborate stock exchange prank and juggles with billions of credits. Or his parting words to Anaking, I honestly thought he was going to tell him something about the female wonders, given that he noticed the relationship (or friendship) between Padme and Anakin and his own interactions, but no, it had to be about fucking pranks.

    tl;dr
    I love the story and the quality, but it starts to drift a bit into comedy.
     
  20. Gengar

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    I'd love it if Anakin pranking causes him to get his head kicked in.

    You know, like in real life.
     
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