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Old 11-01-2011, 09:55 PM   #1
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Apocalypso by Grinning Lizzard - M

Title: Apocalypso
Author: Grinning Lizard
Rating: M
Genre: Horror/Friendship
Status: Complete
Library Category: Humour
Pairings: None
Words: 6,497
Published: July 22, 2011

Summary: Harry finds himself in a hellish future. Semi-crack, TGYH challenge response. 1st Person POV and very, very strange.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7206371/1/APOCALYPSO

This wasn't in the Library, but it definitely should be. 5/5 stuff in my opinion - I haven't laughed that hard in a while.

I won't spoil the ending, as I'm certain you'll be surprised by it. Definitely not what I was expecting. Anyway, there isn't much more than I can say without ruining it, so just go read it. It's well written and entertaining, which you'd expect coming from Grinning Lizard.



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Old 11-01-2011, 10:04 PM   #2
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I actually thought it was pretty fucking terrifying, not in the "shit your pants" way but in the "doom slowly creeps behind you" way.

Except for the ending, which was fucking hilarious.

5/5.
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Old 11-01-2011, 10:09 PM   #3
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Oh, it was terrifying no doubt. I had some concern about categorising it as humour, but there wasn't a Horror category in the Library and like you said, the ending was fucking hilarious.
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Old 11-01-2011, 10:38 PM   #4
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Horror goes into Dark Arts, but I'm not really sure which is appropriate.
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Old 11-01-2011, 10:45 PM   #5
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Wait a motherfucking second.

How is this not in the Library?!
This shit is creepy as hell. I used to take House-Elves for granted. Well, no more!!!

 
Although, I find sadistic pleasure in Ron's death. The way he was just turning on that spit -- I laughed my ass off.


 
Also, Rambo!Dobby is a fucking boss. And to think I hated the little shit...



5/5, no doubt about it.
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Old 11-01-2011, 11:30 PM   #6
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It was bloody brilliant and still is. Fuckin'Awesome/5 and to the Library it goes.
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Old 11-02-2011, 02:12 PM   #7
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Thanks guys.

I'm keen for as many legit crits on the writing as I can get. I wrote it in an extremely short timeframe but then struggled when it came to touching it up a bit. Just a mental block. I know it needs improvement, so any help that can be given would be ace. I think the present-tense/POV style threw me off big time.

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Old 11-06-2011, 04:09 AM   #8
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Loved this when I first read it, and it hasn't dulled on me at all. I don't think anybody saw that ending coming...

I'm also very surprised it hasn't been added to the Library yet. Cracking stuff, Gromit!

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Old 11-06-2011, 06:41 PM   #9
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5/5.... Very creepy. I also agree with Nargles... Usually I hate Dobby...
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Old 11-08-2011, 04:22 AM   #10
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5/5 Ive never seen the house elf thing taken so far! Excelent work! Hermione was written very well as a ...well as a lunatic! I would have enjoyed her experiencing more of a defeat than instant death.

She didnt really suffer or "realize she lost" it was all over in a moment.

Maybe thats just me but I like the enemy to squirm a bit first.
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Old 11-09-2011, 05:00 PM   #11
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Elves are far better in FanFiction than they were in canon. I am also firmly behind Hermione being insane. This story ticks a goodly number of boxes for me.

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The last sentence of the story was hilarious. Keep writing such stories GL.

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Old 11-27-2011, 02:32 AM   #13
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Very well written, and I enjoyed it immensely.
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Excellent story GL. One of my favorite’s one-shot.
It shows great timing with, both, the start and finale (the idea of time-travel) and gives the story a good closure. Speaking of witch, it’s completely unexpected. The mystery behind Harry's amnesia or memory loss it's interesting; and the entire fic leaves more questions than answers.
Well written, nice grammar, original idea, I give you a 5/5.
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