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Oneshot Fifty Shades of Gryffindor by Greasy Monkey - M

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by Skeletaure, Feb 11, 2018.

4/5, 14 votes
  1. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Feb 11, 2018 #1
    Title: Fifty Shades of Gryffindor
    Author: Greasy Monkey
    Rating: M
    Library category: Restricted Section
    Status: Series of independent one shots
    Description:
    A series of one-shots featuring characters from the world of Harry Potter getting laid in incredible fashion. Shameless PWP. HP/HG/GW/FD/LL/PP/etc. Rated M for a reason.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12829859/Fifty-Shades-of-Gryffindor

    This is smut. It's quite well written. The characters have relatively strong character voices that makes the fic more than just Megamatt style generic sex - the author makes sure to establish the location, characters and scenario (albeit obviously following loose smut-oriented logic). However the characterisation somewhat falls away once the sex begins - that's the weak point.

    So far there is just one chapter, which is Harry/Fleur. Next chapter is supposed to be Harry/Parvati.

    For what it is, 4/5.

    Tags: author: Greasy Monkey, smut, Restricted Section, Harry/Fleur, Harry/multi
     
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    Feb 11, 2018 #2
    I fully approve of that cover image.

    For smut, it’s surpringly good; porn logic and all. Certainly it isn’t Hoosyourdaddy quality or anything, but it’s good. To be honest, the biggest thing that bothered me (not hot and bothered) was the author’s choice of adverbs and adjectives. They had some really strange choices here and there. Some really anachronistic choices that absolutely toss you, head first, out of the story.

    I second Taure. 4/5
     
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  3. Xepheria

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    Apr 5, 2018 #3
    According to the most recent update, the author has passed away. Dude was seventeen :/
     
  4. Donimo

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    Apr 5, 2018 #4
    Auto erotic asphyxiation.
     
  5. AaronD

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    Apr 5, 2018 #5
    Just saw, that sucks, if true. Although I kinda have to question the smiley face emoji that his "sister" left at the end of the message. Doesn't really seem like the right emoji to leave at the end of a "My brother is dead" message.
     
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    Apr 5, 2018 #6
    Yeah, the smiley face made me feel suspect.
     
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    Apr 5, 2018 #7
    Also, who shares their FFN account information with their sister? Especially one with smut on it. That's just weird.
     
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    I mean the author name is QuestionableInactivity.
     
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    Apr 5, 2018 #9
    #2Meta4Me

    Could've been a profile left signed in though.
     
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    Apr 5, 2018 #10
    Not to mention that he 'expired', like milk. Whole thing just seems like a joke.
     
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  11. TMD

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    Apr 5, 2018 #11
    Taure must be livid, the next chapter was Harry/Susan and scheduled to be posted in 2 days time.
     
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  12. Skeletaure

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    Apr 5, 2018 #12
    My money is on a werewolfwarrior style "parents found the smut" situation and he has been forced to stop writing, giving a made-up excuse.
     
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    Apr 5, 2018 #13
    Whatever the case, rip semi-decent smut :(
     
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    Apr 6, 2018 #14
    Or it’s some shitty slightly late April fools joke.
     
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  15. Xion

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    Mar 16, 2020 #15
    Fifty Shades of Gryffindor has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 2
    Words: 12,819
    Updated: 2020-03-16 16:05:01 UTC
    Published: 2018-02-09 05:55:31 UTC
    Previously updated: almost 2 years ago

    Brought to you by Scryer story thread updates.
     
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    The my brother is dead chapter is now gone.
     
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    Well, yes, he came back to life, obviously.
     
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    Mar 16, 2020 #18
    Taure's desire for Susan smut can raise the dead confirmed
     
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