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We've all been there. You post new words in the WbA, piping hot and fresh off the press...and then they just sit there, languishing in wait for a considered response. A lot of work has been done to promote activity recently, and the WbA has picked up a bit, but we are greedy fuckers and more feedback is always better.

So. To that end, this thread is a place where authors can put their hands up to provide a quid pro quo service to other authors for feedback and critique. You do me, I do you. Ideally, the two authors would have posts of vaguely similar lengths to comment on, but the details of the exchange would be down to them to figure out. I certainly wouldn't expect someone to read and critique my 120k fic in exchange for a response to a 3k post.

To keep things somewhat orderly, we'd all follow the same basic template. I'm thinking something like:

• Name of the fic and fandom
  
• Link to the post
• Details of the post, such as word count
• Short overview of what the author wants, in particular the type or focus of feedback

After seeing a post, interested responders chasing feedback of their own would @ the original poster and they'd hash out the details. With any luck, this will encourage people to comment on fics they otherwise might not have, motivated by self interest if nothing else.

One thing I want to mention - if you were going to provide feedback anyway, don't be a twat and hold it back trying to extort some feedback for yourself. 1, that goes against the entire spirit of the WbA forum, and 2, it's a dick move. Don't be making dick moves.


I'll start things off with a request of my own.

• Fic details: Rise - Fable (videogame)
• Link
• Post details: The post is the latest of an ongoing arc, and is just under 4k words.
• Feedback details: What I'm looking for is thoughts on the way the conflict played out, in particular how characters reacted to the situation they found themselves in, and the way character dynamics played out during it.

 

Bam. Posted.

The particular feedback I was looking for isn't really relevant until I finish rewriting this thing, so I'll hold off on making a request for now. Happy to give feedback to others - the more specific your question is, the more helpful I'll probably be.

 

In that case, @ me in this thread when you finish; consider this an IOU.

 

@Halt easy done. You want the feedback in a ffnet review?

 

Anyone who fancies giving me some feedback, here's my requisition order:

• Fic details: Druid of Holly and Yew - Harry Potter AU
• Link (WBA)
• Post details: Still fairly early on in the story. This is Harry's first morning at Hogwarts. About 1500 words.
• Feedback details: I'm mostly interested in finding out if the staff members appear to be in character - mostly Snape, but also Hagrid. General thoughts on the post are welcome, but my biggest concern is whether you think I've handled Snape right.

 

I'll take that up as payback for your thoughts on Rise.

 

Fic Name: The Mystical Pursuit
Link: LINK
Post Details: 2nd Chapter of this story, 1.9k words. If you want, the first chapter on this same page is like 1.8k words for context.
Feedback Details: Just looking for if this hooks you in, if you would read more. What to change to hook people in. I would also like some people to check if my tensing/perspective is decent.

 

Fic name: Great and Terrible
Link: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/threads/great-and-terrible.31160/

Post details: The latest chapter is the one I'm focusing on. Looking for advice on characterisation and flow though any thoughts or comments at all are helpful.

@momo I'll happily take a look at yours.

 

Haven't yet had any feedback on the latest chapter of my Dresden Files fic. It's some 9k words.

Here's the chapter in question: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/posts/1067359/

And here's the whole damn thing: https://archiveofourown.org/works/3282722/chapters/7162112

I'm particularly interested in the tempo and making the action scenes flow well and be clear and exciting. Hit me up and I'll review something in return.

 

Fic name: The Driftwood Lord
Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13326509/1/The-Driftwood-Lord
Post details: I'm being very anal about writing chapter three. I have a rough outline of the plot and I'm trying to incorporate the MICE quotient into the fic, but I'm very insecure about flaws. I just don't think I'm great at revisions, and I haven't had any chapters beta-ed yet. Generally, just please point out things that seem off to you. Be it story flow, OOCness, etc. Suggestions would be nice too, but beggars can't be choosers. Currently at 5.5k words.

If you can, please leave the review on Fanfiction.net.