Mfw

It died before it could take flight.

 

I find this idea profoundly cool. The addition of a 10 year old (hopeful) badass is an additional bonus - as far as young protagonists go he's a great choice. Look forward to checking this out, mostly out of hope he'll play a role, though it's a shame that I'm only a little familiar with both fandoms/games.

Four chapters and this is alright, but I feel I'm missing things due to lack of familiarity about the worlds/characters. The prose is enjoyable enough and I get a sense of the characters, I enjoy the descriptions, not too many things making me cringe, etc. I'm interested enough to finish reading what's been published, which is only about 24k.

Bit annoyed at Arthur's reaction upon waking - I know he's ten (or twelve? author uses both) but he's meant to be clever and well trained iirc. Which maybe he is, and this is what he figured Sarah would do, but still.

I can't tell if some of the dialogue is clever callbacks to the games or just talking to talk. But there's teasing and it feels natural enough.

The 'action' as minor as it is so far, is decent.

There are a few fantastic one liners that even got a few feels out of me.

And by the end of the last published chapter I've got a feel for the characters and I'm getting invested, which I didn't expect. I like them.

Ultimately I think this is a great START to a story, and I can easily agree with OP that it's worth a 4/5. But it suffers from a condition a lot of authors have where they get their initial idea / setup written then quit writing because they don't know what comes next. This is more or less exactly what I'd want out of a crossover between these two stories. Or at least it has the potential to be, depending on where the author would have taken it (but didn't).

I'd go with a solid 4/5 if this was more than a prologue, but fuck it, I'm still rounding up to a 4/5 because this was fun. Probably should be a 3/5 though due to length.