A good series I've been reading for a while. The only problem is the shit load of OCs that I have trouble keeping track of. Plus, I don't think Harry's non-vampire friends are fleshed out that much.

4/5

 

A new chapter is out. With luck she'll get the next chapter out before her (apparently) annual summer drought.

 

I section with Namach talking about power not being a raw unit of energy but the way to use it was very good. The bit on his history was good also. A littlr over the top on his abilitys but I have come to accept it in this story and ignore it.

The way she writes Harry is pissing me off right now. One minute he is creating a death cloud and wrestling for control of his mind the next he doesnt think he can best a first year lion fae student in a fight... WTF!!!!!

The next chapter with demons should be good.

As for the demontor. Get a bunch of people to herd one in with a dozen patronus's.

 

I think the part with Namach explaining magical power was the author trying to appease people upset with the vampires being super powered thing (DLP *cough*).

As it stands now it seems everyone has a similar magical level, but are more skilled in different specialised areas making them more "powerful" than others e.g. the Headmaster of Akren who is apparently below average magically but hardcore enough to kill half the current vampire ancients (according to Namach).

I think its a bit bs to be honest, previously she seemed to be indicating that Harry was pretty up there in terms of raw magical power (in the first story), and now seems to be saying the opposite? I didnt really understand what she was saying really

 

Yes but we have been led to believe Harry has excellent control of his magic. He can tap into it better than almost anyone. Thats what makes him so good at bloodmagic.

It seems very inconsistant.

 

I beg to differ, she/he just said that raw magical power is not all there is. If you have a lot of power but can't focus it, it doesn't help you at all. If you have not a lot of power but can focus it on one point it makes a huge difference.

Just think about a defocussed laser; even if it should burn a hole through steel it doesn't work if you can't put all the force in one point...

As for the Headmistress, she is, for continuing with the metaphor, one that has not a lot of power but a great control.

I still like the story. When I read the explanation of Namach I thought that she/he must have had a lot of complaints about the power of Vampires, but it still makes sense, it works in her universe.
Training helps the weak to focus, and that helps the vampires as they have a lot more time to train...

 

ahh good analogy with the laser. I can see what she's trying to get across it just seems to be inconsistent with earlier parts of her story not just the magical power thing.

E.g. as Erotic mentioned earlier with the lion fae, it seems like in some chapters she's setting Harry up to be the biggest badass on the block then in the next he's suddenly wary over some small fry (the lion fae is in his first year at akren).

Regardless, i still like the story and cant wait to see some demon pwnage

 

Harry didn't want a confrontation with a magical creature that is physically stronger than him in a muggle bar where he would be very restricted in what kind of magic he can use.

 

His internal monolog stated that he thought he MIGHT be able to beat him in a magical fight. He should be able to destroy 90% of Akren by now with only the very best of the seniors beating him, and thats only because he is still only a second year when they are 4/5th year.

Also pure strengh matters little it's training which Harry has had a lot of. A year learning physical fighting back in time and all his work outs with the vamps would make him a very capable fighter.

 

I agree with Erotic.
The last chapter mentions how no one has ever been able to change the composition of that stuff (except once in an experiment with potions) and how Harry's magic managed to not only change the composition of the goop but also destroy all the wards in the room just through his magic lashing out. You'd think that would indicate that he was pretty hardcore.
But then we get the scene in the night club where he only believes that he might be able to beat the lion fae.

It just seems like she's not really thinking parts of her story through and making it up as she goes along making parts of the story inconsistent.

OAN, has anyone read the Gold Diggers comic by Fred Perry? The animal fae in this story seems to be based on the were-creatures in the comic.

 

He still only has 2 years worth of fighting training though... The way I understand it, this lion fee thing is not only physically stronger than him, but also has been training (maybe not so seriously, but still training) since he was a small child - thats part of his society. Remember him and his friend just kicked their elders collective arses.

The other problem Harry/Rahkesh has is that if he were to take on the fee than he'd be taking them all on. At the moment he has worked for his place in the school and to not be attacked all the time. There is no need for him to start up a new war witht hte students when he has bigger things to worry about. That's just sensible

 

I don't know why but i didn't go all the way in this chapter. It got boring through out half the chapter and i stopped reading.

The fic is losing my interest and it's going no where. Whats worse, problems after problems keeps popping up to the point where you are like WTF. There is barely any action anymore. this fic is just not worth my time anymore. meh!

 

I second that..

It's like.. I have to read the whole frikkin book just to read a new chapter.. I'm kinda lost.. It used to be one of my favorites, now I just don't care anymore..

 

What aggravates me most about this fic is all the OC's and strange plot schemes. She started it so long ago and you have to read the whole bloody thing over again to understand her latest chapter. Seeing as how she takes forever to put out a new post, I have to re-read the whole thing every, single time . . . having to go through the Inca shit again * put gun to my head and fire * It's stll pretty good, but the slash innuendo's and OOC Harry make this story a bit . . . blah.

 

Well its updated and to me it wasnt that bad. The Vamp/Demon returns and Namach beats some demon ass into a pulp but he actually gets wounded a little and the ateres get beat into a pulp or some of them do.

 

I am quite a fan of this series, but this story compared to the last is lacking a bit i feel. Well not lacking so much as getting bogged down in details and some of the OC's seem pointless. Still a very good story, one of my favourites, and i can see the light at the end of the tunnel so to speak as i feel it will accelerate now that she has set the scene for alot of her plotlines to come together and i feel the flow of the story will become much better because of this.

 

good chapter I think, and hopefully in next chapters this story will be a lot clearer, when Voldemort will be dead

 

You know, no matter how many people criticize (including me) her stories, she still goes on and i appulade her for that.

Anyway for this chapter, it was interesting and enjoyable. Though when the demon/vampire acted like a dog was a little...uncomfortable. As the for fighting scenes, it was aswome. One of the best but nothing compare to what shezze could come up with.

The story is finally moving and problems are getting clear and it seems voldy is finally going to die in the next chapter, or is being planned on or something like that.

It isn't exactly a harry potter story anymore really but i'm highly enjoying it.

 

I think that .....someone... mentioned a while back that she's really just used the HP world as a base for her own world out of convenience. She could have easily written an original fiction with this, but she wouldn't have the well based HP stuff to go off from.


Other than that, I think that it's getting a bit hard to follow as well. I just kind of pass over names I don't remember...I'm too lazy to look back and re-read it all.

 

I just saw the update and was going to read it, but than I just got too lazy.

The story's not interesting any more, too much time passes between her updates and I have to go back and read previous chapters, to understand new one.

I completely agree.