A decent but not overwhelming oneshot from Rorschach's Blot:


Lost Memory

Oneshot: My version of the plot line where memory charms are abused. Tonks is in St. Mungos in critical condition. Madame Bones gets to the bottom of the mystery and everyone is horrified by what she reveals.
Complete - Harry Potter - Fiction Rated: T - English - Drama/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,870 - Reviews: 55 - Updated: 6-2-07 - Published: 6-2-07

It's a short read for in between, but it is missing a punchline. Halfway through it you know what happened before it is revealed, and that's it. Not even funny.

 

Mahou mo Ken

It's not terrible, writing as far as I could tell wasn't bad. The biggest problem was that it felt so much like anime, like the entire new system of magic. It had a few cool ideas, like Hiroshima and Nagasaki being magical village. Due to this there are very few magical families in Japan.

 

Couldn't get past the first couple of paragraphs. Utterly awful. Terrible even. God knows what the author was thinking putting it on ff.n. The only saving grace is thats its legible at least.

 

I thought the memory one was incredibly bad, but I quite liked the Mahou mu Ken one, even if the two women look like they are veeeery close to Mary Sue territory.

 

Mahou mo Ken I've enjoyed too. Not library worthy at all, as it's no different from a hundred other fics so far. Only this one the super-duper new trainer is the Japanese Emperor's bodyguard. And of course all Japanese magic is UBERCOOL and powerful. Of course every aspect of "Western" magic is useless and weak in the face of any japanese wizard. Sigh. But I liked the idea that the main centers of japan's wizarding world were Hiroshima and Nagasaki. And that the nukes annihilated most of japan's wizards fifty years ago.

A guilty pleasure if you can overlook the obvious. I'd give it 3/5 but I'd expect many here to give it 0 or 1.

Ror-blotto's Lost Memory is just a small plot bunny for someone to use in a fic than it is a fic itself. And it's not exactly a new idea either.

 

1. What is Right reviews

Harry finds himself making a decision to give it all up just to change what has happened. What he doesn't realize is that he gets a second chance to set it right.
Harry Potter - Fiction Rated: T - English - General - Chapters: 14 - Words: 64,602 - Reviews: 1582 - Updated: 5-29-07 - Published: 1-30-06

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2777448/1/

I first saw this fic while diving through the foul depths of HP fandom. And then I saw that a somewhat moderately talented author with by numerous flaws had posted a plot idea that, although very cliche, might turn into a great story. I hoped that maybe this author would miraculously lose her bad habits and write an honest-to-goodness story without Snape, Draco, Harry-torture and with a Harry getting powerful behind the scenes by manipulating everything. There was even a chance it might be better than Viridian's story; that is, it might have his good points without his pedophile!Harry.

The first chapter was skimmed over - the whole thing was cliche, including the fate thing.

But the second chapter had so much promise. Harry had a plan! He was going to do what Viridian's Harry did! It was brilliant, and I knew that this story would turn out to be a masterpiece. I had so much hope for Emma with lines like

And then an ominous warning of things to come appeared: Harry met Draco Malfoy. I blissfully ignored it, as I always do when Harry meets Draco in a good story, and I always regret it afterwards.

The next chapter was full of the Malfoys. I shouldn't stopped right then and there, but I held out against the horror. Maybe Harry would befriend all the previous Death Eaters. Maybe he'd manipulate them and destroy Voldemort's base. Maybe Harry would become a pure-blood ally; it might be interesting to see family characteristics like LightingontheWave's traits. And so I clicked the next chapter button.

The fourth chapter was interesting and decent, although the author did take some of Viridian's ideas. The fifth chapter had Harry befriend Snape. It was another gigantic warning, but once again I ignored it in favor of seeing it as another application of Harry's cunning. There was a scene repeated straight from canon, which gave yet another flaw to this fic. But I persevered in reading it - the writing was fine, and there were some signs that my dream might come through.

I might have continued in this way for some time - reading the fic, getting progressively more disappointed but still hoping Emma would break free from the hole her fic was falling in, and finally quiting after wasting a large amount of my time.

But then came the next chapter. It was the worst piece of shite I've seen in a long time, and it felt so much more horrible since it was violating a story with so much promise. I should've heeded the warning signs. I should've abandoned the fic far sooner. But I hadn't, and now I paid. In short, Harry went to the Malfoy's house. Then he started crying. Then Narcissa Malfoy comforted him. I died a little inside from the utter violation of the characters' personalities in canon. Somehow I made it to the next chapter, only to be treated with the Malfoys acting as Harry's parents. They wanted to learn what Harry was hiding, and I am completely sure that in the next few chapters they will. Fortunately, I won't have to find out - I quickly pressed the small red button.

And so my experience has taught me a valuable lesson (which I keep trying to ignore): don't ever think that an author will change his or her bad habits. When he or she posts a promising new story, know that it will be ruined by the flaws of his or her previous stories. This fic makes it here on the barely readable scale - hell, the writing is decent.

It's one of those

 

Hell, yeah - the story is ridiculous. I once started to read it as I like the genre "Harry travels back into his younger self". But it's not only AU, it completely turns over several important canon characters and turns into a sappy Harry-Malfoy bonding plot.

If there were hints of Malfoy using Harry for his own political schemes I could accept parts of that. If Dumbledore would try to protect Harry from the Malfoys there would be at least some realistic canon-elements. No - Dumbledore encourages - even forces Harry to spend Christmas with Draco and his parents.

The only point I grant her is that Harry himself doesn't believe in the Malfoys turnaround, but that's it. I still think Emma Lipardi's other story isn't that bad, but this plot is unreadable.

 

Another one of those

1. Seeking Ginny reviews

UPDATE:02.20.2007 BRAND NEW Chapter 12! For years Ginny Weasley has tried to stop her feelings for Harry Potter. She's even uprooted her life. But what happens when it's time to come face to face with him again?
Harry Potter - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 13 - Words: 115,222 - Reviews: 1283 - Updated: 2-20-07 - Published: 3-21-03

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/116590/

This fic is one I'd actually recommend. 4/5

The characterization is very nice, and 2 of the author's OC characters are written with good personalities. The interactions between the characters are some of the most realistic I've ever seen, and there's a touch of humour. The story is nearly entirely drama, written as the maturation of Ginny Weasely entirely from her view. In fact, this - and not the romance - is the main focus of the story. Another point to be touched upon is that a great deal of the story happens in Paris and is completely unrelated to Harry Potter canon.

Btw, for those H/G haters, yes, this is a fic where Harry-needs-help! and Only-Ginny-can-help! And she does yell at him, but Harry gets a few nice hurtful insults in return. Nevertheless, that chapter is o.k. because it's ending is awesome - there's some great symbolism that is all the more potent because it's been developed throughout the story.

Unfortunately, the first chapter is crap and'll probably turn off many of you. Ginny angsts for what seems like forever until in the next chapter she's a person who's seemingly gotten over her crush.

The worst point I can see is that it goes on forever without anything actually happening. Let's look to the romance for an example. It hasn't developed at all: right now Harry doesn't love Ginny, and all they've done is kiss. Once. After 100K words. God, that's so fucking boring.

The only other bad point is that there are a bit too few OCs that the author gives. Although she writes the most important of them very effectively, I sometimes get confused with the lesser ones.

But still, it's a good story. The only reason it's here is...well you know why. If you don't, I recommend lurking moar.

 

Title: The Destruction of Hogwartsby wimvincken
Author: wimvincken
Rating: PG
Genre: General
DLP Category: General
Pairing: Harry Potter/Daphne Greengrass
Status: Work in Progress
Summary: The theme of the story is anger, not the anger of Harry, but the anger of everyone around him. Payments are going to be made by those who wronged Harry in his short life. Dark!Powerful!Harry with Daphne Greengrass as pairing

Link


Couple things seemed wrong, the writing feels rushed and almost as if he didn't take the time to have a beta skim it atleast.

Things where it says 'Harry turned quickly back and watched closely the Slytherin table'
whereas "Harry turned back quickly, closely watching the Slytherin table"

It was the small things like that which irked me.

He also forgot to double check for minor mistakes, i.e including two 'and's in the same sentence when they weren't allowed.

I know it seemd hyocritical considering I don't have perfect english, but I still expect an author to have near perfect considering...well they are writers.

The ideas also seem...meh.

Plus the whole point being Harry wanting a date with Daph and that seems to be the whole drive for a while, anger is also thrown in.

An average fic at best and felt some of you might like.

 

wimvinken? You actually posted a fic by that complete fucktard on DLP?

Anyway, he's a complete shite author, can't write to save himself, thinks he's the beesknees and has a bigger ego than Bio and JBern put together. His stories actually have some original premise at times, but the writing makes them unreadable.

I mean, the guy claims to be a native english speaker, but most of the DLP folk from non-english speaking countries speak and write better english than he does.

 

*Necros

I had to.

My Hero reviews
There's more than meets the eye when it comes to Harry. He's changed over the summer. The Dursley's beat him. He finds release in the form on a razorblade. Slash. HPDM. Cutting and drugs. R&R. Used to be called My Immortal. ON HOLD!
Harry Potter - Fiction Rated: M - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 15 - Words: 85,577 - Reviews: 233 - Updated: 5-6-07 - Published: 8-31-05

Forgive me.

 

Erm... Are you looking for WTF Fics (sick and perverse) or The "awesomely bad" HP fanfics (general discussion) perhaps?

Because that doesn't look like something you'd actually appreciate reading.

You know what, I think I'm going to rename this thread since some people miss the point. From "Unrecommended" to "Almost Recommended" so people get the idea this is stuff not *quite* fit for the library but worth suggesting.

 

Well, the subtitle had barely readable in it, so in it went.

 

That's fine, but don't forget to include a link if you're advising folks to give it a shot and read the thing.

Or hell, just read the first post in the thread to get the original purpose and guidelines for responses here.

 

Solstice Muse is a female author with some original plot-ideas - but her stories really aren't DLP-material. One of her favorite characters is Ron ... well, I often identify with the minion with the sidekick.

I started to read three of her fics, but stopped when I wasn't able to follow almost 100 stories anymore. Nowadays I know she is also one of the worse slashers


I post only one story here:

Timeless

Dumbledore kept him exactly where he was supposed to be all his life.When Ron turned 18 Dumbledore's spell had run its course.Now he learns to deal with a very unique problem...Time Epilepsy.COMPLETE
Complete - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 39 - Words: 166,558 - Reviews: 422 - Updated: 3-16-06 - Published: 2-22-06​

I really like the plot-idea. Ron has "time-epilepsy" - he jumps through time and space, randomly appearing at locations and times he had been before or will be at one point and then returns to his original timeline moments or hours later. The problem: Well - Ron has spent a lot of time on his broom. And don't forget the flights across GB at the beginning of his second year and at the end of his fifth.

The story is told in short episodes, written in third person but reflecting either Hermione's or Ron's pov. The author tries to include a wide variety of incidents and there is a huge problem looming in the background, but at one point it seems to become a loop. The way it is written it eventually becomes boring. It lacks some humor one would expect with a nekkid Ron suddenly appearing somewhere. Further, the plot concentrates too much on the relationship of Ron and Hermione and even includes a Lav-Lav subplot with Lavender as Ron's secretary.

I never finished reading it. Concerning the headline of the thread I'd say it is somewhere in between. If you are interested in unusual plot ideas, give it a try. But ignore this post if you can't stand Hr/R.

 

This is one of those

Title: Marked for a Veela
Author: gregthebunny2005
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2963297/1/Marked_For_A_Veela
Summary: Harry must deal with being bound to the Veela race, while trying to defeat Voldemort and get free from the vixen Veela that chase after him. PreHBP HPFD later on.

When I first saw a story with Harry and Veela without Draco *gasp!* you could imagine my surprise. Any story with Veela has to be decent, in my opinion. Moreover, the authors who write such stories are generally part of the DLP-type crowd; that is, they're good at writing.

The story started with a good line: "Harry had to honestly say that, after today, he hated Veela." I could honestly state that I was looking forward to the story after reading that. Unfortunately, that was the last good line in the story. It was immediately apparent, after a few paragraphs, that this author is one whose writing style is dry and boring enough to send a person to sleep. Moreover, this story does not have Harry be a Veela, which was what I thought it was about. I stopped reading it at chapter 1, as it had gotten unbearably boring.

I'm reading on now. I'm regretting it. The author does have a good idea with Harry being enslaved to the Veela. Unfortunately, that is also the last good thing about the story. Harry turns out to be the canon-pussy type. He apologizes for getting angry at the fact that some Veela enslaves him. How sad. There's some smut with the Veela that could alleviate this flaw - if the smut was good. By the way, it sucks.

Actually, that's an understatement, now that I'm reading it. I've skimmed the next few chapters, and the story's on a long, slow drag until the author inevitably abandons it. Harry befriends Malfoy. There's a lot of Hogwarts filler made boring by the author's bad writing and a noticeable lack of plot.

To conclude, the story is on the end of barely readable. It barely makes it into this thread, which is saying something.

 

I came across one of the most cliched independent!Harry fics I've seen a long time. And I'm... enjoying it. I wouldn't be surprised if some of you read the first chapter (well maybe not all of it) and just close the window. There's really nothing amazing or noteworthy beyond the sheer glut of cliches (if you haven't seen a particular one, just keep reading, it's probably coming soon).

And there are some moments when it is so painfully obvious that a female wrote it, that it just cracks me up.

It kills me that girls think this is how most boys act. Like we're all women, only some of us are more vaginally-challenged than others.

I swear I think the author is one of those women who's just a little too in love with her best gay male friend.

Tons of quidditch and camp stuff in this fic. So far no real drama or angst. No crying breakdown crap (although I could be overlooking a goblin healer scene or something). Nice!Dudley, Manip!Dumbledore/Ron/Ginny/Molly. No pairings at all (yet). Just a kind of happy Harry, who is pretty good at everything.

And yet, I'm sucked in and pausing after chapter 14 to recommend it here. I'm worried the end is going to be awful and I'd lose the desire to plug this fic, so I'm saying it now.

I think having extremely low expectations helps, but kinda like Loralee in that's it's just a very simple and easy to read story. I could also see comparisons to Wheezy1's Manipulator of Destiny. But the best thing going for this, something hardly any independent!Harry cliche-filled fics can claim, is that it's complete. The author posted the whole thing in one day. I'm not sure I'd be so eager for the next chapter if I wasn't aware that the end is in sight.

Oops. Almost posted this and forgot to actually put the link and story stuff up.

Summer of Independence by redfrog
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3661577/1/Summer_of_Independence
Set right after 5th year. Harry becomes independent. No pairings, lots of Quidditch and some Ron&Ginny&Dumbledore&Etc bashing.
Complete - Harry Potter - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Adventure/Friendship - Chapters: 18 - Words: 129,595 - Reviews: 79 - Updated: 7-16-07 - Published: 7-16-07

 

Second paragraph, first chapter:

Need I say any more?

 

Haha. Boy was I right to post when I did. The last "chapter" is so quick and abrupt it's hilarious. Bam-bam-bam, the end. Not a lot resolved but considering it was only "summer" of Independence I wasn't expecting Voldemort conclusion, but an appearance would have been nice.

Definitely has a nice unintentionally campy feel. Rating it 3/5 feels almost too high so I guess it's probably one of the most swiftly entertaining 2/5 fics I've read.

 

Is this "Summer of Independence" a rewrite of the one I read a while back? I remember trying to read the authors other story Unlikely Alliances, but stopped for some reason...