This has been updated again. We see Harry and Hermoine talking and an attack at the end.

 

I found it a tad disappointing with some good moments. I can't seem to grasp what's wrong with Harry and his parents in that story that they can't face each other and talk. There should have been a few words spoken between Lily and Harry and some more consequences for the duel, as I see it. Another thing that bugs me is Hermione. The angst element since her "raping" is too high for my tastes... ...I would've let her be evil with his brother and have Harry banging Luna instead...

But well, as the Rolling Stones said once, "you can't always get what you want."

I think that in her Yahoo! group she has posted until chapter 37...

 

Chapter 38 in the yahoo group. Yahoo is where I read it at because its usually several chapters ahead of ff.net

 

Its a nice fic, worth a read. But am I the only one that wondered why in the hell Harry does anything for the wizard world?? It's kindda engaging to read but the angs/romance sometimes came off as a little forced.

And Hermione.... I donno she seems kindda plain and half developed.

That said I did enjoy the Luna moments and the storyline in general. I also like that Harry isn't suddenly super powerful and that he is trying to make his own mark in the world. It's definitely one of the better twin-who-lived fics out there, if you can stand the angst.

 

lol. It's basic premise is fine. How it builds upon it is total crap. First 20 chapters are such a load of dung, it's not even funny. The last 10~ or so have been interesting enough but meh.

3/5 - for blatant logical inconsistancies, average and worse charecterization, horrible Dumbledore and a boring Harry.

 

Chapter 40 is up at the author's yahoo group

 

I really couldn't understand why his perants, teachers and peers ignor him like he doesn't even exsist. I mean Mcgonagall completely over looking him with the Wambats (was it?) and things like that. Just seem unrealistic to me.

The Harry/Hermione ship is just annoying.

His brother getting all the cred was annoying.

And the way James and Dumbledore acted with the duel was just lame.

 

Some stories have Harry becoming powerful for no reason, others, he is incredibly smart or cunning. This story just has him neglected, instead. I accepted this early on in the story, even though it was incredibly dumb that there was no reason for him to be treated like he was (the author did not even attempt to give us some vague reason why).

As the story has progressed, it's gotten a little better. It's avoided some cliches and ran head-long into others... decent overall.

After Harry leaves Hogwarts, it all just falls apart, however. The conflicts the author has been building since the beginning are summarily put on hold and Harry's now suddenly dueling Voldemort and... well, it's all over the place. It started out well enough, but I've lost interest in it, really.

 

Exactly, she should really start wrapping it up within the next few chapters. There's no point in going on any longer since the primary plot has already been resolved. We all know Harry is going to beat Voldemort, there's no story there. The only left is the reconciliation or the lack there of with his family.

 

It used to be very good fic, but lately I agree that it has gone way down hill since he left hogwarts.

 

I started this months ago, and put it aside. I am happy that I took some time to read the next twenty chapters in one go. I want to know what happens next, I want to see Harry get the girl and leave England.

I think one of the signs of a good story if that "page turning feel" and I think this story has it.

But I could be wrong.

3/5 rating

 

As some have previously stated, I find that the main problem of this fic is the unbelievability factor. The attitude of every single damn person in the story is whack. There is no plausibility in the way Lily and James treat Harry. I just can't see them completely ignoring their other son. Also the way nearly everyone believes whatever crap Daniel spouts rubs me the wrong way. I mean even in canon Harry has trouble convincing people at times that he's right, so why should his twin have it easy? I mostly skimmed the chapters, hoping that they would improve, since it had so much response (reviews) and had made its way into the DLP library, but in the end, I gave up.

It was beyond annoying. It was horribly aggravating and got on my nerves. If the neglect hadn't been so in-your-face it would have been a much better story. I do remember some action and happy horcrux hunting.

 

I've always assumed that Harry's social-invisiblity is a magical effect. It is too extreme to be otherwise. It probably happened as a result of Voldemort's first attack on Daniel and Harry. I don't think the sibling's disparity is mentioned as having occurred before then. I wouldn't be at all surprised to find out that the enchantment (lacking a better word) was unintentionally self-imposed.

Three people seem to have broken through the enchantment before 'the duel'.

Voldemort: who is extremely powerful, uses magic unconventionally, and - being a psycho villain - is probably touched in the head. He may have gained some kind of resistance from being involved in the initial attack on Harry.

Hermione: who is a muggle-born. Perhaps muggles/muggle-borns are immune? I don't recall how she came to notice Harry in the first place so I won't speculate further.

Luna: who is skilled at divination and who's thought processes are atypical at best. She is touched in the head. At one point she feared falling under the enchantment yet again and forgetting about Harry as he really is. She thus endeavours to be extra-weird which she believes will help her to keep seeing the real Harry. I'll try and find the quote...

Luna first noticed Harry whilst she was channelling some bizarre Lewis Carroll.

So Luna's off-kilter thoughts, or perhaps her divination skills, probably help her to see past the enchantment. Voldemort's off-kilter thoughts, or perhaps a side-effect of his involvement at the start of the enchantment, probably help him see the truth. Hermione, maybe because she's a muggle-born, I'm not sure and don't care to re-read it, help her to see Harry for who he is.

The Luna argument is the strongest one. Harry's social-invisibilty is not natural.

Yak.

 

That does make some sense. It could be it, but unless there's some concrete detail of an actual enchantment I don't know if I could buy it. Still, if I ever reread it under that light, It will probably be more tolerable. Maybe someday.

 

It's pointless now anyway. The primary conflict is over and she's just dragging the story on. Beating a dead horse. You get the idea. The revelation that social-invisibility is a curse rather than nature would just be tying up loose ends rather than anything meaningful.

 

Harry really needs to go cover the Potter's House in paint with the words "Creator Save The Squib" in green and silver paint..just to prove a point..

 

Let us not question why Magic herself decided Harry should be told to bugger off, and a disillusionment charm cast over his ass!

 

Quoted for the truth.

Even so, you've got to admit that at least, it made way more sense than beating the shit out of him for no reason at all.

 

Story has been updated on the authors yahoo group

 

More evidence in the latest chapter (41 - pre-beta), that Harry's social-invisibility is magical in nature and not just author-laziness:

"Miss Lovegood is a natural diviner," Flitwick explained. "Ordinary
and in many cases extraordinary objects bring forth her powers."

"Hardly a natural, Professor," Luna rebutted. "If I had been I would
have seen Harry a long time ago."

"Excuse me?" Flitwick asked, troubled by her wording.

Luna nodded, pushing her blonde hair back behind her ears. "Harry was
invisible, sir."

"Invisible?"

"Well he certainly wasn't divisible now was he?" she teased, before
turning solemn eyes on Harry. "We really should fix your leg."

This chapter furthers the relationship between Harry and Luna a little - just enough to put her into possible contention for Harry's affections.

Yak