Even more disturbing is that there is actually a positive review for this story

 

If you need someone to shoot you, I'm there for you.

I heard that pain was good, but this... I don't think that guy had this in mind when he said it.

 

Words fail me... maybe because my mind was convulsing in agony. Anyone got a flame thrower?

Who the dork that wrote the positive review??

 

I did. I just wanted see what the writer would do next.

 

Two cents: Why oh why, does the spell take you to your eleven year old body. I mean, what if Harry reads this letter before he turns eleven? Does he go into the future? And why should he be an tiny tot fighting the big bad DE's?

It's a time spell. It should have a destination which is not mentioned in the spell at all.

About the rest, I'll say you people have said enough.

 

It was anomynous, so I guess the author logged off and wrote a review for himself.

 

>> Ragnok squealed in delight, <<
* flinch *

>> The Ministry would like to offer you one hundred million pounds as compensation.” <<
Let's see. JKR stated flatly that 1Galleon equals 5British pounds. At close of business Nov30, 1GBP = 2.0567US$
So the government, without a trial, just on the word of the Minister is going to pay out over A Billion dollars.
Frankly, *I'd* accept that bribe. Good job, Sirius. Bill Gates, step aside!

I have beta'ed a lot of manuscripts, some professionally, and I can't read any more...

 

There is a problem with your math. If the government is handing out 100 million pounds sterling, that equals to 20 million galleons and 200 million dollars. If the government was handing out 100 million galleons, then that would equal to over 1 billion dollars.

 

Ummm... 1 galleon equals 5 pounds. 1 pound equals 2+ dollars.
100m x 5 = 500million pounds
500m x 2+ = (1000+)million dollars
Although my math is pretty weak, I think I did this right...

 

1 hundred million pounds, Banner, not galleons. There's nothing wrong with your maths, just your reading.

 

You actually want to read more of this?? Why?

 

That dickweed needs to check his pants, because it's obviously been replaced with a pussy.

This story is by far the worst thing written when someone's actually trying to write.

 

To see if the bad reviews affect the story at all, or if the author posts some angry rant defending his work. Maybe it will improve. If it doesn't then it'll be to tear it down again with every new chapter.

 

That was the one single most painful thing I've ever had to read. The idiot kept switching between first and third person, and I couldn't figure out who was talking. The author or Harry?

Goblins squeled, cliches ran rampent, uber-political/kiss-his-ass!Harry made me want to vommit and gouge out my eyes.

I must flame this and report it for abuse, though it probably won't do anything...

 

I thank all of the angels up in Heaven and the demons down under the sea for each and every one of you, and here's why. I apparently am physically incapable of looking at too much fail for too long - my eyes literally start gliding over it, like an Aversion field of some sort. As such, I would have been unable to read more than part way into the first screen-ful of this cerebral diarrhea before it would have kicked in.

Thank you, one and all, for saving a few of my brain cells, so I can go waste them on some other fic... or maybe Tower Defence.

 

Now you have to give the man a little bit of credit, he did manage to make a race that fought the entire wizarding nation to a standstill into literally squealing pussies and completely destroy anything they had resembling dignity with one chapter. Im pretty sure even My Immortal didnt manage that and its the worst HP fic in existence. Anyways when I saw that Ragnok squealed I just started laughing so hard I could barely move enough to click the X button

 

I'm just glad the link's broken.

My brain was raped hard enough during my attempt to read Deathly Hallows.

 

Nah, The link isn't broken, the Author exercised their brain cell and deleted it as fast as they could.

 

Oh my! The Story got deleted.. I wonder... xDD
Good riddance from what I read of you guys' comment.. but I can't help to be a bit curious about it..
Oh well, it got deleted anyway...

 

For his intelligence we should at least make the fool's death quick if still painful. That story was shit. I like the suggested nuclear bomb at the end, FF.net does have some good stories, however teh majority of what it has is for the most part slash or shit because of idiot fangirls.