Voldemort was powerful enough to create an artifact that disabled Meciel's contact with Harry.
So why wouldn't a modified version of an ancient Dark Arts ritual that is capable of splitting a soul not wok?

It's just a thought and I doubt we'll see anything concerning this in the fic.

 

Ah ok Valid reason but I did originally make that pic for the Introduction forum XD

 

Well, yeah, a mortal by himself probably wouldn't be able to. But with the help of the fallen angel in question...? I don't see why not.

 

Great update. I think the end of the scene is fine. Is it hypocritical of Dumbledore? Yes. But it also fits into his character.

I hope it comes back to bite him in the ass later.

 

I think the reason Dumbledore kicking Harry out felt so off to me was because it did not gain him anything but lost him plenty. Unless I am missing something obvious here?

Harry is possibly the only one other than Dumbledore who has fought Voldemort twice. He is also the one who knows most about Vesper, and as Dumbledore knows, The one prophecied to take Voldemort out. Not to mention that other than Dumbledore, he is probably the most powerfull wizard affiliated with the order. A fact that was made especially clear in the scene before when Harry destroyed the portrait, something that Sirius said no one else in the order managed to do.

In letting him stay Dumbledore could have taken advantage of everything Harry has learned and knows, something that could have been very usefull. Then there is also Meciel. I know Dumbledore does not really trust her but for the moment atleast they have a common goals. Having someone with millions of years of experience trying to see flaws in the orders plans could only have been usefull. Not to mention her personal knowledge of Vesper.

Then there is the fact that by kicking Harry out, Dumbledore has not only managed to anger Harry but also alienate him further from both himself and the order. This seemed especially odd considering that Harry had just saved the life of Arthur who is a member of the order. Maybe next time Harry is faced with that situation he might decide that since he is clearly not allied with the order its not his responsibility to protect its members. I would have expected that possibility to occur to Dumbledore. Harry does seem like someone who might hold a grudge afterall.

So you see, unless I am missing something, by kicking Harry out Dumbledore lost lots of potentially usefull advantages only so that he could say: "Naah,naah! You are not a member of the order and cannot stay! prrrrttt!". I would definitely want to see more justification why Dumbledore did it? It seems more foolish than anything and so far Dumbledore has not been shown to be foolish.

Five to go until what I wonder? The end of the story?

 

The story can't end in 5 chapters, unless Shezz pulls a climax out of his ass.

I think it's 5 chapters until the postponed "Lily + Meciel" scene. Shezz did say he wasn't abandoning that idea.

 

Less than five? Is this going to be a trilogy?

 

I believe Shezza mentioned once or twice, that the original plan was a trilogy. I believe it still is the plan.

I suppose, it could all end with Denarian Knight, but I doubt all conflicts will be resolved, unless Shezza is aiming for 50~ chapters with this one.

 

When Dumbledore kicked Harry out, I presumed it was because he wished to discuss something with the Order about Harry, or about a piece of information that he wishes to keep Harry in the dark about (e.g. the prophesy).

There were two bits in this chapter that felt a bit off to me. Firstly, the whole paragraph with the house-elf headstand felt a bit weird - out of place. It doesn't really serve any purpose, and the idea of Harry going round the house pointing stuff out to Meciel and saying "Haha, look at that!" is a bit weird. I know Harry's a bit immature, but he's not that immature.

Secondly was the incantation for Fiendfyre. I can't remember if you used the incantation in previous chapters, or even if the incantation is from canon, but it's a bit...lame. But the whole Fiendfyre bit was cool regardless, and I agree with whoever posted above about some people in the kitchen should make some sort of reaction to it. It is, after all, one of the most powerful and dangerous pieces of dark magic (able to destroy Horcruxes, and set whole Cathedral-sized rooms on fire).

 

Nice chapter, Shezza, although the immaturity kinda bothered me a bit.

You spelled nitpicking wrong.

 

I hope its a trilogy I'm rather looking forward to Denarian GOD. Its the next logical step for naming.

 

More like Denarian King

 

Denarian King doesn't sound right.

 

Denarian Pimp has a nice ring to it.

 

Heh, sounds like good Omake material. Harry and Meciel replace God for a day. Meciel wants World Domination, Harry...Harry just wants miniskirts.

 

I said King because its next in Line


Renegade, Knight, King....

 

I was thinking more of a 2 on 1 grudge match the fallen and the wizard against the mightiest of mighties 3 walk in 2 walk out with the title and the powers.

 

Well it seems to me that whenever Harry gets information he always acts on it, very quickly. It seems like Dumbledore is trying to curb Harry's impulsive nature by restricting how much he knows.

Did the Carpenter's ever actually apologize for kicking Harry out to get his ass kicked?

Harry/Amanda FTW

 

I'm hoping for some kind of show down between Harry and Charity.. or at least Michael and Charity . I thought Harry would take his anger out on Amanda, but since he didn't I'm hoping he takes it out on Daniel .. and/or Charity at some point.