Chapter 43

Posted on her Yahoo group.

Barely half way through the new chapter, decent. Although some possible ships might have been killed.

>.>

 

This is one of the better twin stories, I think. She does take some things, such as Harry being ignored by his parents, to an extreme, though. If you're signed up for her yahoo group, you can read ahead, and she says that she only has a few more chapters until the end. Thing is, there's a lot to resolve before everything is wrapped up. Daniel has been branded as a liar, but Harry, as far as we know, has still been disowned by the idiotic Potters. One does wonder just how hard the main characters were hit by a stupid stick in order to ignore all evidence and worship Daniel, though. Cruelty, stupidity, and huge tall tales don't equate with heroism in my book. 4/5.

 

As a fic, I enjoyed the overally 'premise' of the story but the unbelievability factor was so ridiculous that it turned me off it. Not only is Harry a completely ignored child, but the other characters of the story are just so resoundingly stupid. The ongoing tear-fests with Hermione is just overly emphasized, the characterization of James, Lily, Dumbledore, and basically all others are so skewed. It's basically a twin!Harry done to the complete extreme, where he is the gifted yet ignored wizard.

Enjoyed the idea, but could lose some of the nonsense inbetween.

3/5

 

I like this story - the pace has picked up, and Harry's starting to show his true strengths. I really thought he had cast some sort of notice-me-not spell on himself or that Daniel's adoring parents cast it on Harry to keep everyone focused on their "hero" child. That's the part of the story that upset me. That he's smart and tough and powerful make up for A Lot. The combat scenes are exciting. He's closer to adult than angsty teen, and he's getting less irritating all the time. I look forward to every update.

Revenge!Harry stories are a guilty pleasure for me - I enjoy it when he makes *everyone* who hurt him suffer. The exoneration is happening offscreen, but it's pretty sweeping and it's getting better.

4/5

 

Ugh, i started reading it on my own and then i saw H/Hr. Seriously people, how can you stand this pairing? It's most OOC pairing (well not counting some really sick crap like Harry/Snape) that can be written. Bad Pairing!

 

Nice first post.

Well, as you said, you started to read it. Finish or just don't comment if it's nothing constructive.

Besides, some people stomach Harry/Ginny if it is somewhat rational, or I'm sure people on these boards have said something like that before.

Either way. :/

 

I really like this fic. There are few spelling/grammar errors, the plot is new and interesting, and there are barely any clichés apart from the usual Ignored!Harry and Twin-Who-Lived!Harry stuff.

The Horcrux and the ways to destroy them are rather original, as demonstrated in the latest chapter. If you like this story and you aren't a member of her Yahoo group yet, do so now...

 

Surprising

I've seen this story in my searches on FF.net before and before I saw it posted here I summarily dismissed it as being one of those Harry isn't the BWL stories which previously have been thoroughly disappointing. I stand in error with my previous hasty judgement. This is an excellent story. It is well written a clever plot, and I have to say for being non-canon (which given the state of canon, canon isn't exactly a great thing to be *cough*albus severus*coughcough*)

Definately worth the read.

 

At this point in my HP fic-reading career (wish I got paid for it) I stay away from Harry/Ginny stories like the plague. I don't have anything in particular against the pairing, just the way JKR destroyed it and unskilled fans subsequently imagined thousands of ways to write it poorly.

Romance in HP is...poor. I have no idea how Harry ended up with Ginny, or Ron with Hermione. Its like JKR woke up one day and decided her books would sell better with those pairings and tried to ret-con the relationships. Given the lack of any real romantic basis in HP there are ALOT of pairings that are very much within the realm of reasonability. My current favorite is Luna, if only because Harry gets so emo-depressive (not without reason) in the later books that he needs someone to so utterly confuse him he's too busy being confused to be depressed. And she's usually written as being very open about sex, and considering all the crap Harry gets put through he can use some loving that isn't attached to a family of screaming redheads.

 

I won a contest in the group- she provided a paragraph briefly detailing each characters' reaction to the truth about Daniel. I forget whether she said that the winning entry would be made canon in the story, but I will be honest and say only one other person entered and they chose Remus, as I did. I can't think of a better place to put this. The first paragraph is the one Meghan provided; teh rest is all me:


The werewolf motioned to Aberforth to get another round. He planned to
get as sloshed as Sirius, who was already several firewhiskeys ahead
of him. How could he have been so blind to Daniel? To Harry? He was
the sensible rational one. Remus threw back the shot and held his
breath as the steam whizzed out of his ears. He just didn't understand
it. But how could James and Lily and even more importantly Albus not
have seen?


A few possibilities- a few truths started to form. He wondered why he bothered trying to figure this out- it was all too overwhelming, and his ponderances would be lost in a spinning haze of distorted noise, blurred colors, and dancing lights. He welcomed it. Because he couldn't stop thinking- wouldn't stop- until he was good and sloshed.

Did he assume an inherent nobility in the child with the power to defeat
Voldemort before he could lift a wand? He knew he assumed Harry had to
have been jealous of Daniel- as Daniel's confession had sunk in, he
realized he had been projecting his own jealousy of normal children,
with the outright hatred and prejudice thrown his way taking the place
of the magnitude of Daniel's fame overshadowing Harry.

Wholly different situations. But with nary a few moments thinking about it,
truly studying Harry, he had assumed that the comparison was apt, and
he knew so much about Harry without ever digging deep enough.

And when Albus fairly confirmed that Harry was jealous of Daniel's fame and
what he would do to get a taste of it, he accepted it without question.
Because Albus said it, and Lily and James believed it.

He was fairly sure that growing up an assertive boy with a Gryffindor
heart in a Slytherin household, Sirius felt vindicated that two
wonderful people like the Potters would accept him despite all that.
And because of that he realized that the two Marauders of the canis
lupus species were in the same boat- not only were they both willing to
accept anything Lily and James did in exchange for their friendship,
neither one- not even Remus- was ever so hard on themselves at the
worst of times that they believed they deserved this treatment. When
the anxiety, when that horrible weight in his stomach that represented
the fear of his secret getting out was lifted, he soon dropped the
self-pity: "Finally, someone sees the real me!"

And so he ended up willing to believe the Potters were always on the mark
as judges of character. And so he had ignored the signs.

Daniel was the one who was nervous and stayed away when James offered to let him see Lupin in his werewolf form when the Wolfsbane potion became
available.

Daniel was the one who came home berating anyone and anything in ways that uncomfortably reminded him of Severus' gang of Slytherins and the
Malfoy boy.

Daniel was the one who took for granted that he would have the latest broom, the sleekest robes, the most wonderful toys.

Daniel was the one whose temper seemed quickest to rise, revealing more than a character flaw- the seeming knowledge that he had to keep up a mask of civility around others to get what he wanted.

....aaaaand he was doing it again. Giving so much thought to Daniel, and not
to Harry. He knew it would be no comfort to the older Potter boy that his thoughts about Daniel were now fairly dark.- the one certainty he held in his heart now was that Harry didn't care. He didn't care what he thought, what Remus thought, and what his parents and teachers thought. After he petrified James, he saw contempt for his "uncles," but mostly disinterest- they were beneath him now.

And
so he knew he had failed the secret promise he had made to himself when
he reached adulthood- any other Remus Lupins, ostracized children for
whatever reason, he would find them, and give them the chance no one
else would give them. He had failed spectacularly.

And he noticed his firewhiskey was a little too dark- for all of his
ruminations that should have pushed him to drink harder, they only
slowed down his drunkenness.

So on that note, he unceremoniously slammed down the rest of the shot. He
winced, the tears came, the steam blew, and he poured again.

He realized that he should stop thinking about what he was going to do-
getting good and pissed was exactly that.

"Rosie, can you be sure to help this old mutt home? A good 'ol shove-" he
pantomimed a push that would knock over Hagrid- "through the Floo?"

A high pitched snort came from the bartender.

"You're in the Hog's Head, young Mr. Lupin," grunted the white-haired
Aberforth. "Not the Three Broomsticks. I am nowhere near as buxom as
Madame Rosmerta. And I'll give you as rough a push as I these old bones
can manage. But I'm NOT cleaning up after you."

"If I puked, it's only one good scourgify-"

"It's the principle, lad. If your stomach starts to churn, find yourself to
the door."

"Maybe I should have gone to the Three Broomsticks," slurred Remus.

"I'll give you three broomsticks," muttered Aberforth, wiping the same mug he
always seemed to be focused on.

And as always happens, his drunken memories were like a hideously edited
movie- remembering the top of Sirius' unconscious mop of hair across the table, their wholly un-supportive support of each other as they staggered into the crisp Hogsmeade night air, and their tandem vomiting.

And as Sirius lay passed out on the carpet directly in front Remus' floolater,
and Remus lay on his sofa with an arm and leg hanging off, the alcohol wore
off, and the attempts at delaying what came next failed.

Sobriety returned, and life went on.


IT's probably not my best, but I wanted a chance to read the last chapter early. Maybe if there was a cash prize I would have bothered to put a little polish on it.

 

Unsung Hero is all the way up to Chapter 47 on her Yahoogroup. This marks the ONLY twin-centric HP story that I've ever come across that is both worth
reading and following. The link for the group is: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/MeghanFanfictionBA/

As for the pairing being OOC, you need to read a little bit closer, dumbass. Harry is a Ravenclaw, Harry has the top marks in almost all of his courses, Harry studies all day, everyday. Can anyone else think of someone more suited to Hermione? In Canon the pairing isn't that bad, hell it's better than Ron. That's an idiot for ya.........

 

It's an alright story. A bit angsty (I left the author a review about it a while back), but interesting enough. Harry has a magical creature animagus, which is generally gaytarded as a plot device, but the author at least made him work for it. Hermione is pretty much characterized as a canon Ginny with good grades; she even gets in a situation that mirrors that of the diary in CoS. Also, the author loves sex - she filled a good two chapters with nothing but Harry & Hermione bed time.

In summary, MeghanReviews is better-than-average author of what would otherwise be a very cliche-ridden story arc.

3.141592653589793238462643…./5

 

You remember all the numbers of Pi?
3.14159265358979323846264338327950288419716939937510.

 

Sex loving fangirls are better than cutting fangirls. In real life and in storytime. :banana:

 

Does not compute

At any rate, the writing is good but the plot sucks. It's a good way to waste time but not worth re-reading.

 

The pacing for the story jumps around a lot...and is it just me or does the whole Voldemort soul piece possessing grown people seem off. This is just a small piece of his soul and it overpowers a full soul easily. That doesn't really seem to compute in my eyes. I could see the soul bit influencing an adult like it did in canon...but whoring oneself out to someone they can't stand seems a big stretch to me.

In canon an 11/12 year old girl fought the diary horcrux for months before she finally succumbed to full possession...and Hermione Granger purported brightest witch of her age has a complete personality transplant in a matter of days...entertaining to read but hard to rationalize even in the construct of the story.

If Voldemort was that much more powerful than the average witch or wizard he would have conquered the world in short order...as it stands he was beaten consistently by this Harry as he dragged his dim witted brother from his idiotic misadventures. Once is luck and two/more is a trend...

I'd give this one 3.5/5 for what is completed to this point.

~Matt

 

This is one of the best 'Potter Twin BWL mistake' stories i've read so far.

Harrys progress seems nice and even. He isnt superpowered and his magical animagus has a purpose and it make some sense(concidering some animagus forms Harry has in other fics)

 

meh, it's an ok story. the only thing notable about it is the curse Harry seems to have place on himself. otherwise it's nothing but cliches barely kept together by a weak plot. 3.5/5

 

I used to be hooked on this fic until chapter 39 a while back, after that i lost complete interest in it.

Before chapter 39 I'd say a 4π/3 out of 360º.

Now reading it feels more like a chore. It is well written, there's no denying that, quite possibly the Basilisk cliché did it for me. I'd say π/3 of 360º now.

 

daaamn! If those two get to gather and had a kid...well, the only thing i see is two neglect full parents working all day and setting there kid with some baby sitter. i feel sorry him. heh