An excellent chapter, it is certainly one of the best I have read in a long time. I'm looking forward to seeing Harry kick the shit out of the white counsel, idiocy really pisses me off.

 

Wrong! Well...I may not have suspected, but I was wishing.

 

Lol, you guys have no idea, and Jon will milk it for its worth I am sure.

Thanks for all the reviews, I am surprised this particular chapter was so well received. Review-wise it is the most popular chapter I have written.

So in truth you guys aren't all about sex and violence, huh? A little bit of character development, some drama, and a spiffy entrance does it for you too.

Good to know.

 

No, it's really all about sex and violence.

Really.

 

Yeah, pretty much.

 

meh you really need to update your PC fic with this material.

I swear to god am I the only one who hates trying to read multiple chapter stories with this godawful system folks use here of 1 thread per chapter? I went trying to pick up where I left off with Nu and Shezza's Dresden xover and I CBF now to sort out the links to the different chapters.

 

Having trouble posting on PC, Mid.

It fucks up my document. Raven is looking at it, as far as I know. That's why I haven't been updating there.

Otherwise there's FF.net: Demon's Feign, Merlin's Pain

 

Just read the whole story. Its been on my favorites list for the longest time, I dont know why it took me so long. Harry is an awesome blend of amazing and crazy. He cracks me up with some of the lines he spouts out randomly. You write a great Dresden. His characterization is perfect, sarcastic and stubborn. I love the end scene of the ch 14 when the patronus comes and declares war on the whole White Council. It was brilliant. My favorite part so far. Excellent story.

 

Dresden must be feeling so guilty right now.

LOL!

Mai's reaction is delightfully cute.

This reminded me of the scene in Deathly Hallows where the other Harry comes across the numerous wizards of the Order (and polyjuiced doppelgangers) at the Dursley's house.

only for one annual special occasion
only for annual special occasions
only on special occasions

Heh. The total opposite of what Hollywood has been teaching us since Star Wars.

And again.

ROFL. I love this guy.

Remove the 'not' and it makes sense.

Your boy's got balls.

came to face the Gatekeeper where it shook its antlers once.
came to face the Gatekeeper where it shook its antlered head once.

Hell, yeah!

The DOW delivered by patronus to a meeting of the secretive Council was inspired and suitably dramatic without being overblown.

I hope you have something special planned for LaFortier. He demands no less.

Overall, this is very good. It promises war in the coming chapters. It also hints at sex several times. We love the sweet anticipation of violence and sex. Keep those chapters coming, Nuhuh.

 

Reading yak's post reminded me of something, Is Michael going to fight the White Counsel? They are going to try to kill somebody he has sworn to protect.

 

It sounds like it. Michael isn't the only Knight. We haven't seen Sanya yet, so we don't know his opinion on the Outsider.

 

Thanks for the edits yak. I will fix them up on the PC+ FF versions.

Also thanks for the comments all. I loved writing this chapter. Mai is so hot. LaFortier will so get his ass handed to him. Just not sure by whome.

Glad you all liked the patronus bit. I had to resist something more dramatic.

And dear me did I forget Michael?

 

I dunno, i think the patronus was a bit much but it had the effect on the wizard council seeing as it's pure white magic. Ironic isn't it. lol, Irony seems to keep the world going round.

 

I liked the Patronus because it presented a cleary contradictory image. Since when do demons wield powerful "light" magic? It's not enough to prove Harry's "innocence" – but I liked the choice over something more extravagant.

 

I liked the Patronus too. The Patronus Charm is used often in Harry's world by the Order to communicate. It can deliver messages anywhere, since Patronuses cant be hindered by barriers and things, so I can see Harry using it in this situation. It just happens to have the benefit of being an extremely light spell, and something that completely confuses the entire White Council.

 

I want Harry/Mai smut.

 

Thank you...no.

 

she could do all sorts of freaky things to him.

And I saw that awhile back, forget who wrote it, Vash?

 

That was Nuhuh.

She raped him ^_^