I just read it, and enjoyed it. 4/5

 

I love a strong, tough Harry - and the logical progression after he walked out really worked for me. That AD had a plan for Harry, after lying about his wand, makes great sense, too. The way Tonks and Shack and the kids all expected Harry to just blindly follow Dumbledore's lead is very IC.

The "happy reunion" scene was too-sweet, but also IC. What happened to Draco made up for that.

I enjoyed this one. 4.5/5

 

While I enjoyed this fic., it was not the best that I have ever read, though you did make a military!Harry into a enjoyable fic it just did not seem long enough to me and it seemed as if you rushed it a little bit in the middle.

 

Just read this fic and I found it quite enjoyable. But I do agree that the author rushed it a bit in the middle of the story. 4/5

 

I liked this one a lot - I gave it a 4.5/5 - it lost a half point for the use of Cedric's name as an alias...

 

I think wandless magic wasn't done as well as it could have been, but I did like Draco being paralyzed and suing(SP?) Firebolt, but alas Harry and all of his friends at the pub was a bit to sweet.

3.5/5

 

Read it and liked it very very much. It's rare to see 'Harry goes into the military' stories at least for me, and the author seems to do it well too. The only fault I can see is the happy get together at the end. I'd rather see him tell the WW to GTH but I guess he sorta does that with the whole muggle ambassador thing. Oh and he should of used a .50 sniper rifle to be sure he was dead. Come on we all know the satisfaction he would have had seeing the dark lord's head explode and the bullet lodge itself in the building behind him... 300 yards away.

Much better then a hole in the front and back, plus the rat would have been turned to mush on the first shot.

I wanted him to shoot more people... >.>

 

No it's fine the way it is. Besides too many people give snipers in their stories .50 cal's. That rifle is extremely hard to qualify with, besides imagine trying to hide that thing, it weighs (unloaded) around 12 kilos. The whole point of the Barret is to knock out light to medium armored VEHICLES. That and materials, such as radars, power generators, computers, and such. It was not meant to take out people (even though it does a nice job of doing so).

Oh and yes the story is excellent 4.9/5

 

I just reread "The Sniper" from the beginning, and it's just as satisfying the fourth time.

5/5 For standing up to being reread.

 

Oh yes the weapon is plenty enough for the 700 or so yards as described in the story, I'm just a firm follower of the term Overkill. On the second note you are wrong, it was designed for that at first, actually early tanks hence the MaDuce, but now we normally also use it as a long range anti-personnel rifle.
IIRC If you think a .50 will even mission kill most modern APC's or tank's aside from perhaps light armoured trucks, and that's a big might if you're a FW nation you are insane. It's really just been regulated to killing people mostly. We have RPG's and AT-4's for anti-material work.
I agree with the hard to hide thing though, but it could be done with enough effort

I believe a Canadian SpecOps member has the honor of the longest range kill with a .50 at 1.5 something miles from GW2.

EDIT- and WTF kind of computers need a fifty to take out?!? That's not overkill, that's a waste of ammo. A nine mm parabellum is enough to take a computer out. Hell, I could do it with a .22. ;;

 

I wanted to remark this sentence: "I was so shocked I passed out from using too much magic." Does this make sense? if he passed out because he used too much magic, then it is not because he was shocked, right?

In any case, the worst thing about this fic is the fact that he goes around with Cedric’s face and name, what a better way to go hide from the wizaring world than going around with a both the name and face of a dead guy? It doesn't seem like a very intelligent thing to do, after all what he is going to do if he wants to continue in the army, live as Diggory all his life?

I also didn't like much the wandless and metamorphmagus, the last because he uses it to pose as cedric instead of doing small changes on his face that would have let him get back to being HP over the time; the first because it is not completely necessary for the fic and I would have liked to believe that Harry would have been able to do the same as the other recruits.

I didn't mean to imply with my rant that I didn't like this fic, which I do, just that it could have been much better. 4/5

 

The sentence does make sense when read in context. It suggests that had he been more on the ball he might not have actually passed out, but since he was so shocked and distracted he simply fainted.

 

I liked it. It takes two of my favorite things and combines them well. Or as well as any one can.

 

It's a good little one shot, but the writing just doesn't seem to flow well. Some elements of the story were a bit stupid, particularly taking Cedric's name. The metamorph thing can be passed off as a necessary plot device, but the rest of it detracts from the story. I'm going to have to go with a 3 for this.

 

I enjoyed this story. I was so glad it didn't start out with the same (or similar) 'betrayal by the wizarding world' scene. It gave something fresh to focus on, then talked about how he was betrayed.

Croaker: Didn't you read the court scene? Dumbledore wouldn't look at Harry, not even for emotional support. And he never showed up to talk to Harry later. Even if Dumbledore doesn't have to, Harry would still feel betrayed by his mentor type figure.

All in all, not one of my favorites, but an enjoyable way to pass time. 4/5

 

I found this fic when I was in the mood for this kind of oneshot, so I really enjoyed it despite its flaws.

It might have been better to further interlace the background story with Harry telling his tale and to switch the point of view in between the background (3. person instead of 1. person) and Harry's tale.

With switching to the background it would have been easier to insert additional information not fitting in the flow of the story, and it would have been a nice way to cover time skips.

Harry paused and leaned back in his chair. Lost in thought he slowly sipped at his tea.

"So you still kept an eye on the events of the magical world?" the other man asked.

"Yes, of course," Harry answered, "Dobby sometimes bought a Daily Prophet or the Quibbler. Actually that was the way I learned about the prophecy....​

Alltogether it works well as a one shot. The author focusses on major events without digressing over military details, political ploys and Dumbledore's machinations.

4/5

 

3/5 from me. No complaints on the writing, but the mere fact that Voldemort, the most powerful dark wizard ever to set foot in Britain with his evilness gets sniped.
Meh. He's supposed to be a genius. Arrogant, maybe, but how incompetent is he if he doesn't even have a barrier raised to protect himself when speaking in a REALLY PUBLIC PLACE?

Then Harry banished a pillow at Tonks and somehow knocks her out. What the fuck?
Do the Black's put bricks in their pillow-cases?

Then, the last straw is that Harry and Tonks discover him being an Animagus. I'm sorry, but I can't stand that cliché.

Could've been interesting, I suppose, but once Voldemort is down, Dumbledore could just fix it all by himself, no problem at all. So the story's basically over right there.

 

It was an interesting story, I liked the way it was written but didn't care for the end all that much. The angry Harry gets expelled is always at least mildly interesting In my opinion it's a 3/5.

 

Maybe because it surfaced recently, I thought I would give it some piece of my mind. I remember reading this fic some time back, and liking it enough to read the sequel. (I remember liking it somewhat more, though)

I've given the text the repeat glance.

Perhaps that day my mood was better, but I keep finding little nitpicks as I am going along.
First Dark Minion mentioned the possible switches of the point of views. No matter the solution - the problem is there, it shifts from the retelling to the now without any difference Slightly disorienting, bud not a real flaw per se.

The comments about the height (151 cm (a little under 5 ft)) were distracting. It's quite strange to read heights of people in centimeters, as it blows away the immersion. I don't know for sure (as I am not British, maybe they would say it still breaks the mood) but I think that just leaving the feet measurements would work better. "Oh, I'm a little under 5 ft" sounds better than "I'm 151cm". Still "I'm under five feet" might work even better.
that's also a nitpick from my side.

The metamorph revelation is an already usual one (we have all seen similar ones). What I really like about this Harry is his prank for Sirius. i don't know, pretending to be James was childishly crude, but for some reason Sirius' quick response left me sniggering.

Choice of the name was strange, but understandable withing the story logic. Somewhat.
The nickname "Potter" was fake. It really feels artificial. To pot somebody. A strange phrase even. As far as my tiny search show's it's possible to say it, but doesn't look like a very likely saying. Much less becoming popular. Maybe someone more native could comment?


All in all, I don't know - it's slightly worse than I remember, full of little annoying thing, but on the other hand it has a substantial style and pace. And doesn't get into much unneeded details. And the idea of killing Voldemort with a sniper rifles is fun, I can't argue with that. So probably 3.25/5.

That's it for today.

Nauro.