Title: Harry Potter and Death's Incarnate
Author: Shujin1
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure/Supernatural
DLP Category: Alternates
Pairing: Probable Harry/Death
Chapters: 22
Words: 55,697
Updated: July 22, 2008
Published: June 8, 2008
Status: Complete
Summary: Lily Potter's pleas for her son caught the attention of someone it shouldn't have. Now that Death has taken a personal interest in him, what is life for Harry going to be like? Covers First Year
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4310758/1/
Sequel thread link: Harry Potter and the Breath of Life


For a, frankly, shitty title, this story interested me quite a lot and kept me reading right up the current chapter. I dunno if everybody else will like it- but I was in the mood for reading something like this after surging through xxxHolic the other night. The basic premise is that Lily Potter's sacrifice caught the incarnation of Death's attention, Thanatos- who, for the record, is a woman. It plays on the cliche that Harry has a new invisible friend but does it better, in my opinion.

She does change him in many ways, both personality-wise and magic-wise, and she won't let him be killed- unless he becomes useless to her, at first. He gets pushed off the Astronomy Tower and breaks his neck, and still manages to get to Promfrey's office acting all prissy. As you go through the story, it looks like that he's changing her as much as she's changing him.

There's a whole bunch of different mythology that comes up in here that I found fascinating. Overall, reading this wasn't a waste of my time and I pronounce it 5/5.



The author started to rewrite the story:

Title: Deathly Hallowed
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure/Horror
Chapters: 5
Words: 33,666
Updated: April 22, 2013
Published: April 5, 2013
Summary: The Tale of Three Brothers was not a legend. It was a warning. No one cheats Death. And luckily for Lily Potter, the promise of the Cloak's return in exchange for her son's life was a fair deal. Rewrite of Harry Potter and Death's Incarnate.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9172846/1/Deathly-Hallowed



Checked by Minion, April 22, 2013

 

I have been following this story for a while also. Many little things are left unexplained, thus making the plot line feeling a bit mysterious, and perhaps confusing at times.

The mean feel of this story is angst. This story definitely doesn't have a light feel to it. I recognized a lot of Greek myth in it. Over all a good read. 4.75/5

 

Yeah, this is a good one. So far so good. A refreshing read for something a touch different. I liked it. A solid 5/5 for being something I read all the way through.

 

Creepy. I was just reading this story today.

Aside from the occasional spelling mistake, it's been pretty interesting.

Interesting and confusing...

 

There is another update. Strangely fast given that the last chapter was posted merely hours ago. A lot of quotes from factional magical beings makes the reader feel that they contain hidden wisdom.

 

I like the quotes as well. Quick updates are awesome (though they're not necessarily very long chapters). I've been following this story since the first few chapters were out, and it is definitely not following the beaten path.

The other story by this author, Olympus, is worth reading as well (I think it is worthy of the library...it's definitely better than some of the current library material); it's another pretty original story with actual subplots, and I really like some of the stylistic things used as well (such as titles in letters...you'll see what I mean).

 

Just read it all the way through and found it very enjoyable. 5/5 for the original content, fun read, and fast updates (something like 17 chapters in a month).

Awesome story.

 

I tried this when it first got posted and just couldn't get into it. I guess deities and religion are just not my thing, which was probably one of the reasons why I liked HP that much.

 

His update schedule seems to be fairly quick.

 

I prefered the author's story Olympus to the Death Incarnate. It wasn't really all that great.

 

I've liked this story as well. I caught the first chapter of it when it came out and have been reading the updates, but got stuck on chapter 12 when a bunch of updates were made for other stories I'm reading. So i'm still on chapter 12 of that story, but what i've read is original and good. I'll give it a 4/5 because I didn't feel the need to read it all the way through in one go without reading other stories. I was able to be distracted by other stories, so it didn't fully draw me in. I do like the update speed though, short chapters or not it's nice to have a pretty regular flow of chapters.

 

UnfortunatelyHarry refuses to be called anything but Asmodeus in that story.

 

Been following it ever since it hit 20000 words. Decent story although some of the characterisation comes across a bit off and I found personally that the story was...sketchy, as in parts of a chapter would be interesting and hold my attention while other parts would break that. A decent read though nothing overly gripping or spectacular - 3/5, would give it more as it doesn't deserve trash binning but I suppose its not quite a 4 for me and anything but whole numbers here looks silly.

 

Yes, I definitely think "Asmodeus" is awkward. If you're not going to use "Harry", at least choose something that doesn't sound like a last name (...A Second Chance at Life!).

Sree: I think the author is holding back that information to release it little tidbits later on, but I agree that it is confusing and wtf-provoking at times.

 

I liked this story, Thanatos made me think of Meciel in Shezza's Denarian series.
4.5 from me (voted 5)

 

What do think Thana is based off?

edit: Oh... and Shipping, Harry/Death? I don't think so Shez, its looking more like H/Hr.

Considering the way the author is changing her.... just so she can fit in with Harry and his Group.

 

Oh please be wrong! I'm avoiding HPHG shippings like most people here avoid HPGW's >:/
Harry/Thana & Harry/Meciel are what I hope for.

 

Well it looks like you are getting one of your wishes. Now you just need Shezza to make the right decision.

As for this story:

It's different from anything I have ever read, which is refreshing in itself. The mythology in this story is truly fascinating, and it's been incorporated, pretty well. However, a huge problem with this story is the confusion felt by the reader. There are times when I really didn't what was going on. Another negative is Hermione, the author is trying too hard to have her fit in Harry's group, though I do like the fact that Harry doesn't have friends, just acquaintances.

Oh and I agree with KrzaQ, Thana is a poor man's version of Meciel. I stress poor man's version.

I will give it a 3.5.

 

4.5/5 for the originality. It kept my interest out of sheer interesting characters and relationships.

And yes, Thana is very close to Meciel. A part of me likes Thana so much because her relationship with Harry is progressing far more rapidly than Meciel, making it a bit more satisfying at the present. Though, I'm sure the longer wait will be better for Shezza's story in the end.

This story is a good distraction and very little more.