Hey someone add the link please! The FF.Net hunted the story down and gutted it like a pig. Err, sorry too much Lord Of The Flies. Please add LINK!

 

Many of those concepts could prove entertaining in the hands of a competent author, but the complaints above prevent me from hunting this down. I'm also pretty sure it isn't good enough for the Library.

 

Amusing sig., by the way, Memory King........

 

The story has been deleted.

 

This story gives a new meaning to 'blood loli'

I'm sorry. I couldn't help it.

 

Those are the only chapters: I know because I wrote it. It seemed rushed because it was; I wrote those chapters over the course of two days. I was going through my vampire phase: I'd just seen Underworld and I'd watched Interview and Queen of the Damned... and all the VampireHarry! stories were either slash or I had already read them.

 

The link is dead. I think.
-fucked up indian

 

Hi Mr. Troll. Please read the thread before attempting to gain meaningless post count. Story is attached to Sesc's post.

 

Well I read the first few sentences and they put me off immediately, his writing style just rubbed me the wrong way and his made up word demonical well that just meant he had not even bothered to run his fic through spell check before posting it.

I persevered for a little while but his writing style didn't improve and the story didn't work for me although I had thought it might.

Doesn't seem great but neither is it appalling, one of many ok fanfics out there.

 

Please allow me to introduce myself
Im a man of wealth and taste
Ive been around for a long, long year
Stole many a mans soul and faith
And I was round when Jesus Christ
Had his moment of doubt and pain
Made damn sure that Pilate
Washed his hands and sealed his fate
Pleased to meet you
Hope you guess my name
But whats puzzling you
Is the nature of my game
I stuck around st. petersburg
When I saw it was a time for a change
Killed the czar and his ministers
Anastasia screamed in vain
I rode a tank
Held a generals rank
When the blitzkrieg raged
And the bodies stank
Pleased to meet you
Hope you guess my name, oh yeah
Ah, whats puzzling you
Is the nature of my game, oh yeah
I watched with glee
While your kings and queens
Fought for ten decades
For the gods they made
I shouted out,
Who killed the kennedys?
When after all
It was you and me
Let me please introduce myself
Im a man of wealth and taste
And I laid traps for troubadours
Who get killed before they reached bombay
Pleased to meet you
Hope you guessed my name,
But whats puzzling you
Is the nature of my game, oh yeah, get down, baby
Pleased to meet you
Hope you guessed my name,
But whats confusing you
Is just the nature of my game
Just as every cop is a criminal
And all the sinners saints
As heads is tails
Just call me Lucifer
cause I'm in need of some restraint
So if you meet me
Have some courtesy
Have some sympathy, and some taste
Use all your well-learned politesse
Or I'll lay your soul to waste, um yeah
Pleased to meet you
Hope you guessed my name, yeah
But what's puzzling you
Is the nature of my game, mean it, get down
Oh yeah, get on down
Tell me baby, what's my name
Tell me honey, can ya guess my name?
Tell me baby, what's my name
I tell you one time, you're to blame
What's me name
Tell me, baby, whats my name?
Tell me, sweetie, whats my name?


Sorry couldn't help myself. since this is my first post I am the the Cold Burn. I joined this sight as I thought I could get some constructive critism on any fanfictions I may decide to write. Oh yah I'm a fan of vampires.

That is why I read this even though everyone warned me and everyone else about it through their previous posts. Anyway...blech. The worst thing was that it had a decent amount of potential... some spell checking and maybe a lort more fleshing out it might have been good, who knows. anyways I think this should be in the recycling bin since I'm pretty sure the only reason it's here is that its got 'Vampyrs' and if we want more vampire centric Harry Potter fanfiction lets write some. I think I just might.

Also, I despise it when peaple use 'Daemon' or 'Vampyr' or any old english varriation of a word just to give something some sort of 'special authentic feel and make the proper spelling ebil'. If you want to write your story in old english for athenticity or something fine... more power to you but please if not then for God's sake stick to the actualy spelling of the word and stop butchering english!!

This is the Cold Burn, sighning off.

 

Please make a proper introduction by creating a new thread here: http://forums.darklordpotter.net/forumdisplay.php?f=29

Refrain from changing the text color or font, and keep your gay little poems to yourself. If you genuinely like the occult, I recommend you start by sucking up to me, Andromalius, a Great Earl of Hell, as well as its number one sheriff.

Good day.

 

Dude. The motherfucking Rolling Stones D:

I'd say it's rather a case of don't copy/paste someone else's work, or at least not without giving due credit.

EDIT : I love the rant about using proper English in a post where I counted at least 9 mistakes.

 

Sorry, I honestly figured everyone would recognise the song... didn't occur to me that someone would think that sympathy for the devil had been writen by me as some sort of venture into depressed poetry. Really I didn't believe anyone had the balls to insult the Rolling Stones by adding me to the mix.

And yah I noticed the grammar isues mate, I was just going to fix them, but since I'm using a PS3 controller to type I'm way too lazy. ( also it was funny in a 'I can't believe I just did that' way).

OK...defensive rant that will ensure I apear to be a jerk: check. and thanks by the way for the link and whatnot... how about we say the link canceled out you not recogniseing the Stones and I'm the only who has feet for breakfast? after all i'm the one who typoed his proper english rant.

 

Fuck Rolling Stones.

Someone else's mistake cancels out yours?

 

O.K. I'm pretty sure I just said that I was the one had to 'open mouth-insert foot' so I'm really not all together sure what your pissed about. Maybe your favorite finger is now the proud owner of a hangnail? Only you know.

Anyway since apparently I misspoke earlier. Thank you for the link. Lets say that your being polite and helpful cancels out your sacreligous hatred towards the stones. And you have a level of testicular fortitude that I can only admire. Evidenced by your claim that the lyrics to 'sympathy for the devil' where an emo poem written by yours truly.

Cheerio.

 

You blather and try to erase your grievous sins when you should be on your knees before me.

 

Hey, you two.

Get a room.

 

anyone have this story in another type of file?

 

Download the DLP story archive, courtesy of bornagainpenguin.

Has a shitload of fics that will hopefully satisfy you.