elvin, epic fucking review, son.

Legend.

 

I like. That helps, I probably should have put an extreme OOC/AU warning at the least. Most likely just going to delete the story and develop the idea a little more before trying again.

 

I have to agree with the others. While I have not read this; I have one thing to say: Draco and Herman will not nor ever get together as a couple. Even though I loathe Herman's character, even I think she doesn't deserve that ignorant worm. Wait...yes I do, but still. And Herman doesn't deserve Harry either, now that I think about it.

I also agree that you need to restart the fic, and make it Harry centric, get rid of Draco altogether (either by death or some mysterious way), get rid of Ginny (if she's in the story). I'd say kill Herman too, but oh well. Others have said it already, but it plainly sucks. I haven't read it, not going to.

 

I'm going to have to say, Hell no. It's the worst piece of advice you could ever be given.

Your story doesn't sound good, but I'd have shot an average Independent!Harry -- which has roughly the same flaws, if I'm to believe elvin's review -- in the exact same way. Write a Hermione-centric story if you want to, I don't care, and I would read it if it was good. Now changing your plot to please one category of readers? At the risk of being repetitive, Hell No.


EDIT to elvin: for some reason, I always thought of the 'H' in Hermione as a silent one; like the one in 'heir'. Corrected.

 

Should be a Hermione-centric story. Sorry, just couldn't resist. Please don't kill me.

 

Both "an" and "a" before an "h" are acceptable, "an" is the more traditional usage, "a" is the more common one these days.

 

I thought it was "an" when the 'h' was semi-silent (honor, heir, etc) ?

 

If you're talking original fiction, we agree. But this is fanfiction where the audience expects certain conventions, certain... for lack of a better word... cliches-- as long as they're not overused or are at least portrayed differently. I'm not saying do all of them in a single fanfic, but the author is almost expected to do a crowd-pleaser in fanfiction.

Edit to add: Perhaps it would have better to write: Never be afraid to cater to the audience, but cater sparingly. Always have them wanting moar.

 

No, I still think its pretty retarded, you write for what you want to write, for the ideas you wish to convey.

Actually, I guess it depends on why you write, some people write for the readers, because they want praise, etc etc.

Others write because they want to convey certain ideas, or to flesh out situations imagined in their minds. And then they are kind enough to share these ideas with the rest of us.

When I write, and no, I don't share it, it is because of the latter.

 

Really? I thought it was only an when it was a silent h? If I'm wrong then sorry Tinn.

 

Don't worry, its still probably the closest anyone has come to out-grammaring Tinn.

 

I agree. People can write for the ideas they want to convey, but that doesn't mean that the ideas also cannot be heard by a larger audience.

There are, of course, other reasons why people write, and then there are the commercially successful writers-- some of whom write all the time to fulfill obligations, but then that's not really apropos to this topic.

 

Addendum: Taure is not always right. You guys may be correct on this one.

 

...Have you ever paid attention to Sree in IRC?


And knothead: I agree with Ellis. I catered to my audience once -- a chapter in one of my stories. It worked extremely well, and retrospectively it's the chapter I hate the most of everything I've ever written.

 

Sree, you are racially connected with her, stay away from me, I don't want the cooties!

Also, its said that bad spelling, or typing in this case, is caused by the brain working faster than you write or type, so just think like that, I know it makes me feel better.

No, I don't care if its technically wrong.

 

You know you're fucking up when the nigra knows grammar better than the rest of y'all. Also:

Jolly and BrightEyes: to the TaTa-mobile!

 

And here I thought the Work by Author section was meant to be the place where you ask for help on writing ...

 

THERE IS NO HELPING SOME PEOPLE.

...Just sayin'

 

Sometimes the only advice you can give is to tell them just how badly they suck and that they should never, ever try it again. It's either that or send them to GinnyPotter.com, where they will be truly appreciated.