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Complete The Lie I've Lived by jbern - M

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by jbern, Feb 9, 2007.

  1. Ragon

    Ragon Dark Lord

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    Apparently you skipped over any of the Oliver Woods parts from POA.
     
  2. Janus

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    You mean the book when he wasn't out of school yet or even on the pro team...?

    Coincidentally, neither does Dumbles. I find it rather hard to believe the old man can just shanghigh someone into a possibly deadly situation that they didn't agree to in any way shape or form when they're not under his direct authority.

    *cough* Not that there haven't been ones that could do it in fanfiction before, but jbern's doesn't seem that way in this fic.
     
  3. Ragon

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    My point was think of how crazy wood was when he was on a SCHOOL team. imagine what the coachs and people are like on the PRO teams.
     
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    Ooooh okay, that makes a great deal more sense. >> I was worried for you, there for a second.
     
  5. ZeroTheDestroyer

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    Thats odd, I don't think I saw Oliver wood at all in this chapter, usually he is lying around somewhere. Wonder what kind of anigmus the guy would be? a mosquito?
     
  6. Ragon

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    Judging from the way his appartment is Im gonna say a pig.
     
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    Damn he just stole Dudley's anigmus form, Big D does it again!
     
  8. Khazad-Dumb

    Khazad-Dumb Loves the Gay Porn DLP Supporter

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    Lolwhut? <filler>
     
  9. ZeroTheDestroyer

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    Offtopic this forum should be all Jbern, better limit myself to just that, oddly enough an anigmus thread seems to have just opened up.
     
  10. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Mmk. I just read finished reading the fic. To my surprise (after seeing the first Mooney in the first chapter... I thought you were going to fix that, jbern!), it was excellent. Kept me entertained throughout the day.

    I did, however, note a number of grammatical errors dispersed throughout the fic. Namely, you seem to have trouble with question marks at points, like when Harry is asking a rhetorical question.

    You also made Lily a whore. ;-;

    In the beginning I was worried that you were going to take the same route all other Independent Harry authors took and have Harry cut off all ties with Ron and Hermione and become best friends with Neville and Luna... but thankfully, it didn't happen. Harry even reconciled somewhat with Ron. I'm liking the relationships with Oliver and Penny Harry has, and I'm definitely liking the Sorting Hat.

    You also didn't go through the normal canon route of 3 tasks, and I admit, this threw me for a bit. I was wary, but you pulled it off magnificently.

    There is another problem I have though. Throughout all this, Fred and George and the older Weasley brothers (minus Percy) have been giving Harry a lot of shit, and Harry vows revenge... but he hasn't done anything other than set off all of Fred and George's prank items and deny Bill his chance with Fleur. I dunno, I was expecting a bit more to cow them. It reminds me why I hated Bobmin's fic so much. Her Harry in that story kept getting trodden on by Dumbledore and Snape, and whenever he would come out on top, he would always go, "Next time, I won't be so nice!" or something like that. Except, the next time it happened, Harry would do the same thing. Pointless threats. <_<

    I mean, at the very least he could tell the older Weasley's "I fucking told you so!" in reference to the beginning where he said he should be let on in any big secret thing that is happening at Hogwarts.

    After the first couple shaky chapters, this fic becomes amazing. Well done, definitely looking forward to your next update. I'm guessing it's not going to be soon... seeing as how you just updated a week ago, right? :p
     
  11. Ragon

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    Main problem with giving the older bunch hell is that Bill and Charlie are a good ways away. Bill and Charlie might actually be a challenge however small of a challenge.
     
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    If Harry were to do something obvious back, it's not like the Weasley brothers would go; You got one up on us mate, nice one! We'll leave you alone now.
    They seem to be the kind of people who'd throw a bigger hissy fit trying to show everyone who the man is. I hate stories where Harry's all talk and no action but I understand why Jbern's Harry in this fic would take the high route and ignore little childish pranks.

    ..until he's gotten rid of the tournament atleast.
     
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    On the other hand, with the memories of his father and the sheer knowledge and skills that those memories bring, he could probably utterly crush and humiliate them with very little effort. Especially since he has the assistance and friendship of the hat who with his millennia of experience could probably come up with some very nasty things to do.

    I mean at this point it should have become obvious to Harry that just ignoring them wont make them give up and go away. Striking back would at the very least force the twins to spend time de-cursing their possessions, defending themselves and such, time that they would otherwise have been able to spend attacking Harry.
     
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    Just a random remark: the thing that is most likely to be missed by Harry(as opposed to HJ) is probably the Invisibility Cloak, the Firebolt (my favorite,) or Hedwig. Although the Wizarding World might actually disapprove of abusing a post owl.
     
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    Hermione, Cho, Gabby... Hedwig.

    I can just see the faces of the other girls now...
     
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    ... no no no.
    That you would MISS most. Not how much do you lust after or how long it takes you to beat off at bedtime thinking about it. How much time does he actually spend thinking about Gabrielle or Cho? Compare to: how many times in a year does he actually WANT his Firebolt or use his Cloak?
     
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    The Wizarding world makes potions ingredients out of various magical animals, most with more appeal than an owl, and straight up abuse another sentient species. I don't think owl abuse will be a concern.

    And wtf? The next task is object/animal-based? Did JBern change something...?
     
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    Why would Hermione be there for Krum? Krum is a giant deuchbag in this fic.
     
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    It's just speculation about a Second Task re-write for this story.

    I very much doubt it will happen.
     
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    Given that one year after planning to execute a Hippogriff for breaking a douchebags arm, and then allowing a fourteen year old to fight a dragon, I'd say logic left Potterverse some time ago. I could totally see forced participation into the tournement, if you were the individual picked.

    As such, Krum and Hermione would be lulz. His secret pedolust revealed to all, as well as her being muggle-born.
     
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