Title: Will of Fire, Heart of Stone
Author: DisobedienceWriter
Rating: K
Pairing: N/A
Genre: Drama/Adventure
Chapters: 7
Words: 72,148
Updated: Aug 15, 2012
Published: Jul 4, 2008
Status: Complete
Summary:The Hokage faces a terrible potential crisis when the Village Council spreads news of the young jinchuuriki, Naruto. The world changes when a more attentive, forceful Sandaime rears his head and takes back full control of his village. Sarutobi-centric.
Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4370189/1/Will_of_Fire_Heart_of_Stone

Great story. Shows how the Sandaime SHOULD have handled things after he became Hokage again.


Checked by Minion, February 11, 2015

 

Not really. They may as well just put Danzou in charge if Sarutobi is going to act like this.

What...

I think this is the first story that's actually made me dislike the Sandaime. Good going.

 

Danzou would make everyone an emotionless tool and attack the other villages. In this the Sandaime acts like a military leader should. In your quote the Uchiha launched an attack with the intention to kill straight at the Hokage. Thus treason=death.

 

Blah... Sarutobi acts nothing like Danzou here. He is still a fair leader and cares about his subjects. None of them are emotionless tools or anything. He just makes everything more fair and removes the traitors that have festered in Konoha during his weakness. Nice short story with an interesting idea, but the execution could have been pulled off a little better. I think Naruto might be a little too super, but in general, not bad. I'll give it a 4/5 for now.

 

Killing someone purely with killing intent is fine then? 'K

 

People have been known to get heart attacks/strokes right after being scared. Usually they have health problems anyway but you get the picture. Shouldn't have been a burst blood vessel but something else but I'm not holding that against the author.

 

Yeah.

This is utterly retarded, and reeks of instant failure.

The only times we've seen killing intent actually accomplish anything aside from draw some comments from spectators (i.e. Pain) was when Zabuza and Orochimaru used it against brand new genin.

The fact that Sarutobi kills someone - someone who I assume to be a clan head and therefore an accomplished and powerful jounin - is absolutely crackers.

That's an instant 'X' if I read something like that.

I mean shit, Orochimaru hardly blinked when Naruto went KN3 in his face.

 

Orochimaru pretty much halted Kakashi right in his tracks with it, if I recall, during the confrontation after the Third Exam preliminaries. Unless something else caused him to freeze up in terror right as he was in the middle of charging Raikiri to defend Sasuke.

 

The guy is a freaking psychopath, not the best example.

And as I believe that the "council", which seems to be almost entirely fanon at times, is described in this story as being composed as "elders" (not clan heads) and so would probably tend to be a bit more susceptible to heart attacks or such than say:

 

Alright.

You make good points, but it still seems strange to me that a man who presumably grew up in a ninja village and had a long ninja career couldn't withstand a little - or even a lot of - killing intent.

I mean if being old and having a weak heart makes you susceptible to simple stuff like that, then it would be pretty dangerous having a sixty-nine year old as your Hokage - no matter how strong he was or even is.

 

Actually, the Uchiha in question (in the fic) is referred to as the "Uchiha clan head" or "Head of the Uchiha clan" several times in the first chapter.

In fact just before Sarutobi kills him in the fic...

So yeah.. at this point in time the Uchiha clan head is Fugaku (also named in the fic), who is a Jounin, and the head of the Konoha Police force. For a man who was planning to assassinate the Hokage, and turn Konoha into the Uchiha-Village he died surprisingly easily.

Just thought i'd put that out there

And yeah, I found that part of the fic hard to swallow myself.
I mean even when Sasuke was subjected to the full force of Orochimaru's killing intent (Zabuza's too now that i think about it), he didnt drop over and die.

Ignoring that, the story is pretty average so far and looks to be going nowhere fast. I can see this becoming yet another of DisobedienceWriters never to be finished fics.

 

Which is an excellent point, as was proved when Orochi came around in the manga. I do agree with you that it was a contrived plot device, killing someone by looking at them, but I was just arguing that it was technically possible, with the dumb way that "Killer intent" seems to work.

(Really, I hate it.)

And uriel got me with the "clan head" thing. I just assumed that Fugaku was clan leader, and I admit I didn't really read too far into this story.

 

I was under the impression that this fic was 2 shot showing how different Konoha would have been if the cliche council was to have been put in it's place by a more firm Sandaime. It was mildly entertaining that way. But now that there is a chapter 3 I just can't get myself to get into the fic.

1/5

 

Actually it looks like Fugaku was not the clan head -

Spoiler

because later on the fic talks about Itachi burying his father (Fugaku, in canon), mother (Mikoto) and brother (Sasuke) after they were offed by Orochimaru.

Still, the technical errors are too many for this to be a good read. 2/5

 

So yeah he was the clan head. Maybe Itachi buried the body after it was returned or something? Who knows.

Also this quote in the first chapter really takes the cake:

When something like that is meant to be taken seriously, and the story itself isn't a crack-fic... you know you're in for something special.

But then most of disobediencewriters fics have super!main-character so shouldn't really be surprised.

 

It's been updated. I had some serious issues with this chapter. First of all the Sandiame seems ridiculously powerful in the exchange with the other Daimyos and Kages. I also disliked the portrayal of Jiraiya shown here. On the other hand, I liked that Naruto still has some weaknesses and potential for growth. Another thing that was a plus in my book was how the chapter ended with Naruto being basically given free reign to stop the chaos in Wave. This chapter was pretty mediocre in my opinion.