I've never heard of a "make voice", so probably it's wrong.

there

Harry amusingly

A nice update, it was good idea to show how this all look from their perspective. Though, I am now wondering if Harry will try to find a way to destroy their coins.

I half-suspected that Namashiel would fight Harry instead of running away.

The only bad thing to say about this update is its length. It's supposed to be two parts and it's shorter than part one. So, now even more than usually, I can't wait for next update.

 

Hey. The first scene of Chapter 15 is up. It's 3k words long and there's a helluva lot more to come. I probably won't break it up, but we'll see as I write it. Thanks, KrzaQ, for the edits. I'll add them when I upload this chapter- which, hopefully, will be tomorrow.

 

I'm wondering if Dumbledore is banking on Carpenter to deliver Harry's soul from evil through love.

Good job, especially on Dumbledore's duel with Harry. It's very revealing that Harry was sort of horrified when it appeared that Dumbledore had caught on fire. He and the reader often take it for granted that Dumbledore can die or be beaten at all, HBP nonwithstanding.

 

signed, I guess

double coma

Uh, and "sparks sparked"? Doesn't sound very nice.

Harry

spin around

What

coaching/teaching/seeing/a verb

It seems Maeve dug deeper than I thought. Still, Harry's reaction to Dumbledore's request was hilarious.

On a side note, there are 15 chapters left? 20 maybe? I'm wondering how are you going to fit dealing with Voldemort, Order of Blackened Denarius, Maeve (and possibly Winter Court) and White Council in that.

 

Firstly, im pretty sure Singed is correct. You know, singed from fire?

Also, i've got a copy of the plot.doc, its kinda out of wack now, but yeah, he will fit it in.

Though, I won't complain if it drags out longer.

I could give you more info, but its not mine to give.

 

No, I did not English is not my first language so it was to be expected, but, for my defense, I checked three on-line dictionaries, urbandictionary and this one too and found nothing fitting context.

 

Glad to see such an fast update; it more than made up for the uncharacteristically short chapter last time. I really enjoyed the duel between the two and seeing the Words used again. I'm curious to see where you'll go with the Gringott idea. Looking forward to the next part.

 

I love the last bit with/about Amanda and a nice beginning overall!

 

Yeah, the rest of the chapter is looking to being pretty badass, I can't wait either.

 

(knocks on wood and performs every other form of anti jinx in existence)

SHEZZA'S BACK!!!!

Only Shezza could possibly put out so much.

Harry vs Gringotts. This could be entertaining.

 

That's basically what I thought when I saw she gave us two updates in a week end !

Awesome updates, hope Harry'll kick Maeve'ass and get Amaris back !
Also, where is Meciel ? No lines for her since the Dementors incident, I'm worried ^^

 

Shezza is male, a he!

But I'm also interested in what Merciel has to say to Maeve's words and actions...she was and still it out for blood over some silk sheets, imagine Harry's and in some way her daughter (first for both) being withheld from them in such ways...*grin*
This is going to be quite interesting in the future

 

That's what you think.

 

Second scene is up. Because I'm female, I'm obviously a pre-teen fangirl. I've decided to turn this into slash. For those who hate Draco and Severus, sorry, but they'll be his eternal mates. Later.

 

I could dance with glee.

2 chapters in what 3 days?


The first little girl just screamed MALFOY!!!
Loved the first part every mission begins with... ICE CREAM!!

 

Repetition

Unless Meciel is supposed to mispronounce the word, it's Gobbledegook

by

our

orifice

Good scene, the ice cream made me think of DFMP and blood flavored ice cream. I almost expected this girl to have name Roqariel.

On a side note, I love your update rate!

This supports my theory that super-intelligent, most beautiful, glowing (all Harry's words) Meciel is actually author's self-insert! I'd suggest naming her Raven though.

 

LOL I guess it says something about Harry in this fic then that I thought she was like Harry back when he was younger and more immature (like in Renegade).

 

She did seem like Harry but she screamed Malfoy to me. Harry has the same sorta attitude as Malfoy but Harry has the brains, talent, power, and balls to back up his words.

 

I have nothing against mother daughter incest but usually that type of stuff is done in oneshots or omakes not sure I like it actually being canon for Denarian series as you hinted at when Harry was getting info from Maeve and her and his daughter showed up with bubbles on them and were kissing on the lips and stuff.

""Luck?” Harry snorted and turned around. “Who needs luck in the face of immeasurable firepower?"


The mission to raid one of the most secure magical locations in all of Britain began as those types of missions always did: with an ice-cream. Harry licked at the magically-flavoured frozen treat with great relish, enjoying the ‘natural’ flavours for once with relish. He licked his frozen lips, barely even feeling the cold of the winter morning, and cocked his head to the spectre seated next to him."


This is the type of stuff that makes your stories so unique the line with who needs luck when you got immeasurable firepower is going to be used by me all the time now. Also starting missions with ice cream is awsome.


9/10 You don't get a 10/10 since you made Maeve molesting Amaris part of the actual story instead of a omake or oneshot or something.

 

^lol.

That's all.