Title: The Medic of Konoha
Author: ares88
Rating: M (still don't know why, though)
Genre: Adventure/Romance
DLP Category: Other Fandoms - Naruto
Pairing: Uzumaki Naruto/Multi (probably it'll end with femHaku)
Status: WIP
Summary: Naruto is raised by Tsunade and the story starts when Jiraiya brings them to Konoha to be the Hokage. Naruto doesnt want to be a ninja. He want be a medic. See how his life goes when dealing with Konoha.
Link: Fanfiction.net

Well, it certainly won't be the best fic there is, and it's a little rough around the edges but it's a pretty entertaining read, even with all its mistakes. Still "young", only 5 chapters, but their length is more than decent and despite some grammar and spelling errors still manages to keep you reading.

It's quick, it's easy and i'ts entertaining.

 

I've read and I've got it in my favourites. What you said is all true BUT the grammar in there can be borderline atrocious. The one thing that really gets to me is the lack of 'the' sometimes.

For example.

Women all looked at him crazy

Instead of:

The women all looked at him crazy.

And so forth. That is my number one hatred of the fic, which means I can never re-read it all the way through before I have to close it before I scream. That said, the idea of a control specialist Naruto is cool, especially how he uses the strength techniques.

 

From the first A/N:

This doesn't look so good, but I'll give it a shot.

Edit: Wow, I tried to read this but couldn't handle the second paragraph. The grammer SUCKED. Does it get any better?

 

...Naruto...jinchuuriki and chakra juggernaught, as a MEDIC-NIN?

No thanks. There's such a thing as trying to be too creative. Naruto is what he is. Attempting to make him into a healer, genjutsu expert, poisoner, puppeteer, et cetera is generally fail as far as I'm concerned.

 

Actually huge chakra reserves are very usefull for a medic-nin. Think about a few thousand shadow clones running around healing everyone. On the other hand, Kyuubi's chakra is supposed to be corrosive and all around nasty stuff...

 

I'm gonna go with this. The fact that Naruto is a jinchuuriki pretty much precludes him from doing any sort of small, delicate acts of ninjutsu. It's part of his character. Naruto is not a girl. Naruto is not an Uchiha. Naruto is not a medic.

I'm also a bit wary about the fact that this author clearly is trying to distinguish between ninja and medic. As far as I'm concerned you need to be both. What, is he going to be stitching people up and performing surgery with a scalpel here? Isn't Tsunade both a legendary medic and a legendary ninja?

I don't really want to read a story about Naruto sitting around in the hospital all day.

Again, that would be if Naruto were capable of the small-scale delicate procedures that medic nin perform.

Don't get me wrong, Naruto has very good chakra control at the current point of the manga, probably better than 99% of all ninja given he's able to do what other "legendary" characters were not, but that isn't the same thing as being able to perform delicate surgery on a human.

If Naruto were going to heal, say, Gamabunta, then he's the man for the job.

 

Uhm...Is it just me, or do neither of these make any sense to anyone? Wouldn't "Women looked at him crazily" be more eloquently turned into "Women looked at him as if he were crazy"?

As for the story, except the fact that Naruto is the container of the 9 tails, the parts I did read, it wouldn't matter if this was an OC instead of Naruto, if you merely replaced the name.

 

Mobs. -_-

*sigh*

I'll keep reading, for the moment, but that is one of the five major signs of fail right there.

Edit: Also, lol.

Edit2: Never mind, I can't read this.

 

I read a few chapters of this when it first came out. The grammar is simply atrocious. I spent more time noticing errors than the plot. As for Naruto himself, he came off as annoying.

2/5 from mwa.

 

erm...Moi? I never took french or nothing but...

 

That's how the French-Algerians spell "moi". Really.



...I once met an Algerian.

 

I enjoyed parts. Seems like the author is just trying to make Naruto to be like House.

 

- Angry mobs of villagers who scream "Die Demon!"
- Kakashi who tried to kill Naruto and used a line: "Because of you my sensei is dead!"
- No logic whatsoever in this story. Another shitty fic written by a virginal 14 year old boy.

And you advised to read THIS?

 

Grammar is terrible.

Naruto's character is rather... cliche. And arrogant.

Other characters in Konoha do not act logically, rationally, or even remotely intelligently.

All in all, I give it less than 1/5.