Yo. The last two scenes are up. Some feedback on the last one would be great.


About incorporating more HP-charcters in the story: Voldemort's in there this chapter but as for Sirius and Snape? Sirius has a role later on but I don't really have any plans for Snape. Harry's sort of distant from the world- he really only communicates with either Dumbledore or Amanda. He's even taken a step back from the Order after the torture thing.

It could also be my way of covering my weaknesses for multiple character interaction and the like. I'm not so good with them.

 

Nagini has been getting large lately??

That was funny.

So Amanda has progressed to the point where she has earned even a little bit of Harry's respect when it comes to dueling. Im going to take that as good thing.

 

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NOOOOO. Please, change it! This name (and Ragnok) should be banned .


I really liked interaction with Amanda, the penis joke killed me. Also, I think it was first time I saw Voldemort having an actual spy within Gringotts, even if its name was so poorly chosen.

One more thing: are Death Eaters scared of Harry just like normal people fear Voldemort? Rabastan seemed hesitant to call his name.

 

I really enjoyed those two scenes.

Amanda is probably my favorite character of the series, simply due to the way she has developed her character during the series. While Meciel will always outclass her, unfortunately she will be harder for me the reader to associate with due to her immortal and inhuman nature.

The characterization of Voldemort was also spot on. I liked how he wasn't portrayed as some psycho who punished everyone who dared to ask him a question.

 

I liked this chapter, especially the middle and ending.

So does that mean that the Gringotts invasion was a bust, that what Harry took out of there was a fake?

Also, I like how the Dark Lord is played here. Only Voldemort would be concerned about his snake's weight.....because she's been eating people.

 

The thing I liked most about Voldemort was that he liked the room better with the curtains open... I mean, Dark Lord or no, the feel of the sun on your face is nice.

 

I agree, the characterization of Voldemort was good, he wasn't completely off his nut like so many make him out to be (suitably malicious, but not a raving lunatic). What I particularly liked about that scene was the fact that when it started it was working with the oft used "really dark room" cliche but at the end it was all for the goblin's benefit. As Taure stated, sunlight is nice.

As for Amanda, I have to say I most enjoy the way she has progressed from the beginning of the series, in many ways, she's the most dynamic character of the lot. While Harry has changed over the course of the three stories, it's been in a much more understated manner.

I think the cup was most definitely real, the heavy enchantments on it lend themselves well to this conclusion, as does the momentary mental attack that Meciel swiftly killed. There was, if I remember correctly, a decoy that Harry tossed into the vault, meaning that the Goblins managed to miss the fact that it was a fake. That, and me thinks Griphook isn't the brightest bulb in the box.

 

I personally LOVED how you used Griphook as being the goblin reporting to Voldemort.

Rest of the chapter was great too.

 

I was pleased with the Voldemort Scene, It has always annoyed me that in most fanfiction Voldemort curses his followers just for asking a question and always seems to reside in a dungeon.

Please change the goblin name, like KrzaQ said its used way to much...

The Harry/Amanda interaction was great, I find that i enjoy reading those scene's the most.

Luke

 

I started cackling when I read "Griphook". You have to give him a fight scene against Harry, Shezza. I know you like to poke fun at the cliches of HP fanfiction, and a (brief) epic showdown between the "benevolent" Griphook and Harry would be pretty hilarious. I can't believe you didn't do this at Gringotts.

I liked Harry's monologue about the conflicts going on. We're all waiting for that epic climax to come, but Harry knows what he should understand. That nothing will be over when Voldemort is defeated.

 

Harry's statement wasn't quite correct though. The Winter court is involved too (Voldemort appears to be allied with Meave), which means that the Summer court is involved as well, because whatever affects Winter affects Summer.

So involved parties are:

Denarians, Wand Wizards, True Wizards, Knights, Angels, Winter Court, Summer Court. Also Vampires and Drakons have been dragged into it.

That's a pretty long list of Who's Who in terms of powerful beings. Only really Outsiders and Demons that aren't involved in one way or another.

 

I'm not sure that the Winter Court allied with Voldemort (Unless you get something from Shezza that I don't know ) since it seems to me that Maeve have no needs and made no attempt to allied herself with Voldemort and seems only to care about her own plan (Whatever that is so it could be possible that you are right.), but I agreed that they are defenitely involved through Ameris too since her choice to be Fae or Human will defenitely be effected by the survival of Harry.

 

Well, it's revealed that Voldemort is allied with some goblins, so it's possible he's also allied with more groups than we know. However, to gain the Wintercourt's aid I'd think Voldemort would need to surrender something important to them, though I guess Maeve might go and ally with Voldemort if it will gaurentee her daughter's transformation into a Fae.

 

Uh, do you guys not remember the end of Denarian Knight? Meave and Amaris meet up with a hooded man who was quite obviously Voldemort.

 

Damn Taure... well you're right. But to be fair, who else remembered that scene? :9

 

Nice chapter.

It was good to finally clarify that Harry was not a horcrux. It simply would not have made sense that something like that could have missed Meciel's attention. Now the only question is if Harry was one and Meciel destroyed it, or if there is an extra original one out there somewhere.

It was actually kind of nice seeing that Harry does not really consider the Voldemort situation a big deal. And really it's not. I mean when it really comes down to it, how many people did Voldemort kill in the last "war". I would wager more people die each day in car accidents than ever died to Voldemort.

Infact it seems to me that even if Voldemort won, there are lots of groups in Dresdenverse just ready and waiting to take him down. The White Council would probably act if it looked like Voldemort's actions would be about to reveal the presence of magic to the world. As would the vampire courts probably, they rely on camouflage. Heck, the faeries might come after him too as might Dragons and who knows what else. Really, the only reason Harry has for fighting Voldemort is revenge and self-preservation. In global planetary scale, Voldemort is small potatoes.

We dont actually know that absolutely certain. Though I admit it is the most likely answer.

However, Harry's statement is still correct because unless I have missed something, unlike the reader, Harry does not know that Maeve and Voldemort have made an alliance. Infact I wonder if it is learning of this that will finally cause Harry to attack Maeve and try to retrieve Amaris (Assuming that it will happen ofcourse).

You know, I wonder if Amaris's blood could be used to target Harry with somekind of curses or other spells. Might give Voldemort an advantage if he really has allied with Maeve.

 

Call me a realist, but I'd like to think that the correctness or incorrectness of Harry's statement depends not on whether he thinks it is correct but rather if it corresponds to what actually is the case.

Disagree here. The size of Voldemort's operation may be (currently) small but its very scalable (it wouldn't be hard to replicate his method for taking over magical governments in other nations) and more importantly in terms of personal power Voldemort is still one of the most powerful people on the planet (and I'm not just talking raw magical power here but also the more practical "how much is he actually able to do?").

I mean, think about it. He's considered more powerful than Harry, roughly equal to Dumbledore, and those two people are pretty much the most powerful humans that we know of. Add to that the fact that he's immortal (at the moment) and his allies and he's definitely a big threat.

Consider for a moment how close to ending the world (as we know it) Nicodemus got in Dresden. Now remember that Voldemort is more powerful than Nicodemus.

 

Damn, I really needs to reread everything again. >_<

Interesting though, I have seriously considered many possibility for the dark figure, but can't really come up with anything better then Voldemort.

And I think Harry is wrong here since the winter court is still involve through Ameris anyway regardless of Maeve possible alliance with Voldemort, but who really cares? I just want them to start fighting!

 

A crazy twist would be Dumbledore, but I don't think so. Especially as he's already allied with Summer.

 

I did think of that, I even go back and look whether Dumbledore ever call Amaris by her real name. It could be possible that Dumbledore want Maeve to help him rid of the Summer Court Fae for some reason and made a deal with the winter court who I believe don't really want anything in exchange for a chance to bring Fawke down, but this is really unlikely.