The quote you made of me saying something, is wrong dumb shit. I advise you to get glasses blind dumbass

 

Methinks newbie should get glasses too and read the replies to newbie's thread. That way newbie might get smarter and stop posting stupid stories for review...

 

The story is laughable. Luckily I read the reviews here first so I didn't actually try to seriously read it.

What is also laughable is the feeble attempts of the author to disguise himself on this website. He is obviously not only a fifteen year old boy, but a stupid fifteen year old boy.

I really hope that he not only abandons this story, but writing all together. He's probably crying at home because he posted the story here thinking it would get a positive review; choice of a dark prince, darklordpotter(dot)com.

Just in case it wasn't the author who posted it here, I commented on his story both on ficwad(dot)com and fanfiction(dot)net, sending him to this thread. His response:

 

Stove? I dont remember a stove. Does anyone else remember a stove?

Also

... exploded in the color of red. This sentence right here would be more indicative of a non native speaker. Which would be a contradiction to the assumption below.
Now here is an assumption and as assumptions go may not be correct but
does this not imply the writer can speak and write English competently?

Or maybe it doesnt... Either way get a freakin editor that is a native English speaker/writer.

^The fuck?

... hokay.. So the boy that had his parents killed when he was but a baby suddenly wants to change sides and join the very man who killed his parents. With canon background. Right. Believable it is.

What is this? A cult devoted to the resurrected leader or a freakin AA meeting?

Edit:

No. Fiction is like fanfiction in that you can write whatever idea you want as long as it doesnt seem carbon copy to another book. Just like regular fiction there are standards. Sometimes turds and shit does slip the filter. But that does not mean anything fucking goes. This is not Ranma 1/2.

Fixed that for you.

 

It's canon, actually.

 

Oh My God, I am not mohd7590. The only reason I came here was because in his story he said that he got some of the spells from here. I accept that you guys hate this story and the guy mohd7590, but please tell me how to delete this trash then.

 

If you deleted it, then these guys wouldn't have anything to whinge/complain/bash noobs with. Where's the fun in that?

^ That was the point of him changing the quote...

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Even if it was a good story there is no point putting it here when it's so short.

That said, it's truly horrible. Example:

Voldemort calls him "Harry", minutes after ambushing him etc. I don't see the realism.

 

Er... no. You can't do anything you want in fanfiction. Move along.

Also, I have no need to rate, as I feel the point has been quite eloquently illustrated by others.

 

I...don't exactly get how this story, if it can be called that, even got here. The author has the dubious reputation of producing shitty stories like shit-babies pop up in fics on FF.net. >_> And there is a curious similarity between those two. The author it seems, likes to take up and add various errors to already crappy stories, and abandon them again.


Like creating an active and more lethal substance using nuclear waste.<_<

And to my eternal shame, I tried reading some of the smut he wrote. Blue balls for life. :banana:

 

Banana. Bad.

 

No it didn't. His stories are re-filitered garbage. If this shit really did get onto Patronus Charm, maybe the mods and Lord Ravenclaw should purge the site of such crap.

 

I honestly would have thought that people would have figured out by now that mohd keeps his stories on his site and we don't have to read them. The author is banned here at DLP (if I remember correctly), and the only reason I continue to post my work on his site is probably the same reason JBern does - to get the word out there.

That being said, I've gone into great detail about his stories' problems on his site, and after acknowledging my commentary, he junks the stories and starts afresh, not changing a goddamn thing. Hell, the guy reminds me of ancientdragon14 (although at least I think we scared that fucker off). It didn't take me long (ie. once) for me to say 'Fuck that' and not bother to help mohd.

This story doesn't belong in the library. This story doesn't belong in the Recycling Bin. This story doesn't belong on DLP. Lock this thread, kick the OP in the balls, and let's leave this trash elsewhere. It's not worth our time.

 

Man, it's hard to know where to start with this guy's stories. He gets the shit kicked out of him at patronuscharm, but he keeps submitting terrible stories there. I think he's encouraged by the virgin fanboys who give him positive reviews on ff.net.

This story isn't even worth commenting on, but I submit for your entertainment a couple reviews from his other stories at PC:

 

These "fics" might be worth a laugh. I just hope its not just nonsense. If its too horrible to read, I'll just read the reviews. They look awesome.

 

Anything written by Mohd is auto-fail. Period.

Some have interesting premises behind them, but overall, the grammar, punctuation and constant spelling errors ruin any enjoyability that any one of his fics could ever possibly have.

1/5