It was mentioned that Maeve couldn't contact Harry because Fawkes was there, but nothing more.

@Anya: this is fanon

 

Hey.. an update. Nice. Although I get the feeling Harry is going to end up unconscious, and arrested by the Ministry. bleah

Also:

Did you have to use twitch so much?

Maybe the first time use "Harry could feel Mecial healing his wounds, and felt his arm spasm, rah rah rah sensation return to his arm rah rah rah"

Twice in succession like that just made reading it a bit awkward.

As for the fight itself, the bit where Voldemort is all like "You were given your power I earned it!" It's probably not necessary to include it in the story, but I couldnt help but think the only reason he's so fast at countering spells is because he's holding the Elder Wand, so maybe some taunting on Harry's part could be included there.

 

I just read the latest fight scene and I think you're partially correct on your own analysis, it does feel more like watching a movie but only (for me, at least) from Riddle's prospective. I can sense the emotion behind Harry for the most part. But Riddle is too calm, too put together.

I know this is the moment of his triumph and he should feel confident, thus able to keep any emotion in check easier. But canon Riddle would never allow a prize to be taken without showing some sort of fury. I think you're right that he'd see through Harry's plan to save Dumbledore but I think his reaction is off. He only shows this sort of cold resolve to get Dumbledore when I think he'd let some, if not quite a bit, anger show at not being able to land the finishing blow on Dumbledore right then and there.

That's the most glaring example of not feeling the emotion behind Riddle that stuck for me. At times each character felt a little artificial (the line "This, Harry Potter, is my power!" with Harry's return of "And this is mine!" for example) but overall I enjoyed the battle, especially Harry using the remnants of his demonic form to save himself, which I felt believable.

The most enjoyable characterization this update for me was by far Dumbledore. I think you've really nailed his weariness in this update.

This is just conjecture... but with how you've reduced the use and importance of Harry's demonic form and even nearly eliminated the form entirely... is it some sort of purification of both Meciel and Harry's souls that was planned? With the sword taking Harry, the demonic form dissolving, the elimination of all other Denarians, it just feels that way to me. Maybe you can't answer that but it really intrigues me to consider when I read your latest updates.

 

Should be: was strong.

Liked the part with Dumbledore. As stated above Voldemort is too calm.

 

I hope you're wrong, but if you aren't, I'm wondering: would the Ministry be able to locate and/or extract Meciel's coin?

I can't wait to see how the battle ends.

 

If he does end up arrested by the Ministry and considering they are dumber than dirt, odds are they would think they could hold him coin or no coin. And as a result it will either in a mass slaughter or a mass almost slaughter.

On the newest part. I enjoyed the battle. The Elder wand has really leveled the battlefield.

 

should be: his very head in the skies.

 

Would he really get a hole through his chest from the lightning if he wasn't grounded?

 

Who thinks Amaris will intervene somehow?

 

Now that Fawkes is dead, Harry may flee from to the Ministry to the Winter's lands.

I'm wondering, if it wasn't Voldemort, who was it that dealt with Maeve?

 

Voldemort stated that he had no contact with Maeve

I will throw out, my baseless assumption, for the lulz, that it could be Olivander.

 

Harry's tactics seem rather flawed to me. He fights like someone in a story, starting out slow and slowly increasing his firepower.

This is a bad idea.

He knows what Voldemort is capable of, he knows he needs to go all out to win. There is no need to test his strength or anything like that.

He shouldn't open with a few fireballs. He should open with as many Words as he can get out without killing himself, over and over again. They're his most powerful magic, and it makes sense for him to use them to wear Voldemort down first (or even defeat him), while he's in good condition to use them to their full potential.

And when he can no longer get Words out, he should use his next strongest magic.

@Franki: And Voldemort is completely trustworthy, right? He certainly has no motive for unsettling his opponent with uncertainty right before a fight.

 

I think if there would be something that would break up the movie-like atmosphere, it would be a bit of Meciel talk. Something to get into Harry's head.

 

Actually Harry has an idea of what Voldemort was capable of. The Elder wand has changed things tremendously. The wand is allowing Voldemort to fight on a equal level with Harry's far from human speed, endurance, and power.

Im getting the sense that without the boost from the elder wand Voldemort while extremely dangerous and powerful wouldnt stand a chance against Harry.

Speaking of the Elder Wand, I wonder how well it would work with Harry's hellfire.

 

Which only backs up my position more.

If Harry is going to defeat Voldemort, it will be with his most powerful magic.

The longer he waits, the more he exhausts himself and the more he risks being seriously injured. Both will affect his ability to use his most powerful magic to its full extent.

If Harry's most powerful magic is not enough to defeat Voldemort, it does not matter that he's blown his chance at the start of the fight - no matter how long the fight lasted, he wouldn't have won anyway.

If it is, then he might as well use it when it has its best chance of overpowering Voldemort's defences, i.e. when it is at its strongest, i.e. at the beginning of the fight.

 

Lol, fun scenario.

Harry defeats Voldemort, claims the Elder wand. "Now I am greater than ever before! Mwahahahahaha!"

He casts a few spells into the sky. The wand promptly snaps in two as he holds it. Harry looks at it in shock, then realises he hadn't carved the runes needed to channel Hellfire through the wand, causing it to break, destroying an almost priceless weapon. Oops.

 

I disagree Taure. VM doesn't know what Harry is capable of and has such should wait for the most oppertune moment to display his true power. I also don't think VM is too calm, I don't want to read angry!crucioing VM, maybe he he could react to some surprises from Harry, but nothing overly stupid. Will elaborate when home from work and not on iPhone.

 

@Taure
it would be funny if both used their most powerfull spells at first and go down from there to until they didn't have power for anyting but tickling charm.

"Are you gonna kill me with tickling charms Potter muhahahahahhaa hah hahah ha haha eno- hah -ugh no hahah more hahah tick- ha -ling charm hahahahaaaaaaaaaaa"

update was very good I liked the fight.

 

How about Amanda using this to keep him alive and St. Mungo's doing the rest?

or this:

I guess you could also have recently recovered Fawkes flash him to St. Mungo's.