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Fan Fiction Recommendations: Barely Readable to Almost Average Part Two

Discussion in 'Fanfic Discussion' started by Antivash, Sep 19, 2009.

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  1. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    I considered that story a guilty pleasure a while back, but I stopped following it. I checked out the reviews fairly recently, and don't plan on reconsidering my decision. Reading about Harry being raped just ain't my cup of tea.
     
  2. Mordac

    Mordac Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    I've been following that story. Strangely (and fortunately) I managed to miss the rape scene, though I did learn about it later.

    Anyway, I am disappoint with the new chapter, for the author completely pulled out of his/her ass that Lily was Morfin Gaunt's lovechild (LOL WTF). I'll still read it though, it's somewhat of a guilty pleasure for me.
     
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  3. Innomine

    Innomine Alchemist ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Fuck that.

    Window closed.

    I hate stories where he gets raped. I still have nightmares about that fic where Harry lets himself get repeatedly raped to save two girls or something.
     
  4. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Meh, like anything, a rape scene can be pulled off. Although I've yet to see it done well.
     
  5. White Rabbit

    White Rabbit Hippity Hoppity DLP Supporter

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    Amerision did a pretty good job with his, even if it was for the lulz and not a serious story.
     
  6. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    I liked a few where Harry was the rapist back in the day, but maybe that was just because I liked almost everything HET and smutty back then, if it wasn't below my relatively low writing standards.

    Doesn't make much sense in retrospect, since rape is generally NOT about sex, only proving ones power over somebody.

    And to stay on topic, here's an HP/Naruto X-Over I found strangely enjoyable.
    Summary: The Mirror of Erised doesn't show first-year Harry Potter his family. In fact, he doesn't recognize the image at all. But the reflection sparks something in his soul, and Harry starts remembering a life that isn't his.

    Maybe this fic is doomed to fail like others in this genre, which is one of the reasons why it's here.
     
  7. Kensington

    Kensington Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    The ever friendly and cuddly Merc with a Mouth discovers a baby named Harry on his doorstep.
    [​IMG] Harry Potter > Non-BtVS/AtS Stories > Theme: ComedyDireSquirrel • FR15 • Chapters [6] • Words [11,485] • Recs [5]Reviews [73] • Hits [7,433] • Published [15 Dec 09] • Updated [28 Dec 09] • Completed [No]

    This is a crack-tastic story involving a Harry raised by Deadpool. So far the story has been much more hit than miss, not losing a single beat so far while it has transitioned from Marvel-verse to Hogwarts.

    It is a little short however, and it's unknown if the author can maintain the level of humor.

    It's a great way to spend 10-15 minutes reading.
     
  8. Banner

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    That was worth a smile. Thanks for rec'ing it.
     
  9. Dungbomb

    Dungbomb First Year

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    Harry Potter and the Champion's Champion
    What happens if Ron gets to compete in the tournament instead of Harry. This is a Harry/Hermione story with Ron Bashing. If that isn't what you like, please read something else. It's a plot bunny story so give me a break about OOCs also.
    Harry Potter - Rated: T - English - Romance/Humor - Chapters: 8 - Words: 46,795 - Reviews: 798 - Updated: 12-26-09 - Published: 11-1-09 - Harry P. & Hermione G.


    Herman comes up with a way to get Harry out of the tourney. a little too much "I'm 14 and found the love of my life" but the Ron bashing sorta makes up for it...sorta
     
  10. Memory King

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    Less bashing and toilet humour, and the story might have turned out pretty decent.

    As it stands, I consider it closer to the barely readable side of the spectrum.

    Have to admit that I'm still following it though, for curiosity's sake.
     
  11. scaryisntit

    scaryisntit Death Eater

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    Pretty much this, except that I gave up after the fourth chapter and have no interest in where it leads. Once upon a time I would've enjoyed this, but different standards and all...
     
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  12. CaptainG

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    1. The Harem War » reviews
    AU post OoTP. Poor Harry. Sirius left him far more than a house and some money. Dumbledore is the Dark Lord? And what is he supposed to do with the women he was left? Sometimes, Pranks suck and others they are opportunities. H/Multi
    Harry Potter - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 15 - Words: 109,457 - Reviews: 170 - Updated: 1-5-10 - Published: 1-3-10 - Harry P.

    This Fic is everything I should hate - some twisted sort of slave bonding system, manipulative Dumbledore, letter from Sirius that solves everything...

    If you can get past the realistations of truelove in the first chapter, it is however, written well; characterisations are accurate in my opinion, and there does seem to be the promise of an actual plot once we get past the beginning. And the smut is surprisingly good

    Two or three years ago this would have been up there, but I feel Ive read it all before. Still, a nice guilty pleasure
     
  13. darklordmike

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    Meh. I skimmed this for about eight chapters or so, and then I couldn't go on. The writer engages in so much pointless summary and narration that even the best smut in the world--which this decidedly isn't--couldn't save it from being tedious. And then there's this:

    We learn at one point that Remus repeatedly raped a 12-year-old Tonks, who had previously been sold into slavery to Sirius. When Harry and Hermione learn of this, they don't even blink. Not one word of comfort to Tonks, and not one word of condemnation for Remus. Harry begins banging Tonks, and Remus somehow becomes his most trusted adviser. It's one of the least believable characterizations/scenarios I've ever seen in fan fiction, and is a story-killer no matter what follows it.
     
  14. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    I'm not a fanfic fanatic, but I truly wish to know where you live, so I can beat you to death.
     
  15. Scott

    Scott Professor DLP Supporter

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    Wow... Ultra fucking fail. I have to check this shit out...


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    “Moments later, he was sitting on the bed and told me to sit on his lap with my back to him. I was terrified but complied. His hands began rubbing my belly, sides and thighs slowly. He kissed my neck, shoulders and cheeks. He asked if I wanted more. My mouth said yes. My body leaned my head back to allow him to kiss my lips. As his tongue soon entered to find mine waiting, his hands touched my breasts. My mind screamed in terror, my body moaned in pleasure as he gently played with my budding breasts and nipples. More? Mind NO! Body begged him. His right hand spread my legs wide apart. My body and voice begged him for more! I was dripping. His fingers touched me! Mind went into overdrive wanting it all to end, voice begged him for more and more and more. I could feel something building, something my mind did not want but my body and voice begged to have. He slipped a finger into me! I begged him for more. He slipped a second one in and I came! I begged him not to stop as I came! He left me panting and spent as he placed me on the bed.
    “He stood and looked at me. He wanted to know if I wanted more. Mind NO. I asked his if there was more. There was, he told me. I begged him for more. He told me to lay back on the bed and spread my legs. My body complied. He then lay on top of me, gently. I felt that bulge again. He kissed me! Snogged me senseless and every time he broke the kiss my voice begged for more. He was sucking my new breasts. I was moaning and begging for more. His kisses moved down my body. MORE! His tongue and lips found my pussy. MORE! I couldn’t think any more. I wanted more! MORE! My hips thrust his face. I was in heaven and then - HUGE ORGASM!
    “When I opened my eyes, he had gotten off the bed. He was looking at me. He asked me if I enjoyed that. My mind was crying. My face smiled. My voice told him I did. Did he make me happy? Yes! Did he make me feel pretty? YES! Did I want more? GODS YES, PLEASE? Did I want to make him feel happy too? Can I? Yes! He told me to sit on the edge of the bed. I did. He told me to pull down his pants. Mind - NO WAY. Body? I was soon staring at that bulge. I never had seen a cock before. I thought it was HUGE! To be honest, Harry’s is bigger.
    “He told me to touch it. I did. Stroke it. I did. Lick it and stroke his balls. I did. Mind wanted nothing to do with this. Body begged him for more and mouth told him, pleaded with him to let me make him happy. Take him into my mouth! No teeth. Lips and tongue. In and out but not all the way out! Deeper, deeper! Deeper until he was all the way in and out. Faster. I did all that. I knew nothing about what I was doing to him or what the result was. He told me I was beautiful and wonderful! He gave me no warning and came in my mouth. I almost gagged, but I kept sucking until there was nothing left of his come or his erection and he told me to stop. Without being told, after I let his cock go, I kissed it and said goodnight.
     
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  16. Random Shinobi

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    Um... Good characterisation, you say?

    There are plenty of ways to write believable H/Hr pairing, but this...is not one of them. The fic starts with Harry suddenly realising that he wants Hermione. This is crappy writing but nothing too bad, although I usually click the red X at this point. Unfortunately it just goes worse; He doesn't ask her for a date, he flat-out asks her to marry him.

    Ridiculous? Yeah, I know.

    Ron freaks out. No wonder, I would have freaked out too. However, he doesn't freak out because how utterly absurd Harry's proposal is, but because Hermione is supposedly his girl (even though they are not dating).

    Now, had Hermione acted even remotely canon-like, this fic would have tiny chance to actually become readable, but no. She says she loves him and accepts. Okay, I guess she could love him, why not? But canon Hermione would never agree to marry anyone without dating him for at least a year or two. She's the type to not make hasty romantic decisions like that without even seeing if they are really compatible.

    And that was just the first chapter. I could go on about how ridiculous it is that wizards enslave witches when they have equal magical power. Not to mention that this fic makes wizards utter bastards...

    Oh, and the fic doesn't have "manipulative Dumbledore." It has stupid and evil Dumbledore that does everything seemingly just for lulz.
     
  17. Trooper

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    This.

    Also, I see exactly where this is going. Harry and the witch's secret(?) version 2...or whatever its name is. That fic where Harry shags everyone and thier grandmother...
     
  18. Anme

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    Although this story is in my opinion far better than most of the fanfics out there, I very much doubt that it would make the library so I posted it here.

    Things I liked:
    - Complete and pretty well plotted story.
    - Writing is good enough (although my standards may be lower because English is my third language.)
    - For me it was captivating enough to read it out in one go.
    - I liked the idea although I can see people not liking it.

    As the title suggests someone plays a 'cat and mouse' game with Harry(who is an Auror) and his friends because he/she wants revenge on Harry. Harry and friends get notes with what they have to do and so on.

    Aside from surviving and finding the 'Cat', a lot of attention goes to Harry/Ginny pairing. They haven't spoken the two last years after Ginny broke up with Harry, who has no idea why she did it. And surprise, surprise, Harry still loves her and she still loves him. The reason why she left him is kept a secret pretty long and has to do with the rest.

    There are probably a lot of people here who will hate the story already but although I wasn't that enthusiastic about the romance in this fic I found it tolerable enough. Harry/Ginny pairing in general I have no problem with.

    Other than that there were a few instances where I found it a little bit harder to suspend disbelief but it didn't bother me that much.

    The fic isn't mindblowingly amazing but it's good enough so that I didn't regret reading it.
    I'd give it a 3 although it's closer to a 4 than a 2.

     
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  19. Bratling

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    It's Harry/Ginny. Harry/Ginny=AutoFail around here.
     
  20. fanficlover

    fanficlover Fourth Year

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