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Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Sin Saiori, Feb 22, 2010.

  1. Qwerty

    Qwerty Second Year

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    To be honest, it failed to capture my interest from the start. The characters and the dialogue are uninteresting although the writing style itself isn't too terrible. 2/5, leaning towards 1.
     
  2. knothead

    knothead Groundskeeper

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    Yeah, there are a lot of cliches. The characterization's not the best in the world either, but it's a decent guilty pleasure fanfic.

    3 stars and to the recycle bin.
     
  3. ParseltonguePhoenix

    ParseltonguePhoenix Unspeakable

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    What knothead said. 3/5.
     
  4. MattSilver

    MattSilver The Traveller

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    Should've stopped there. Just cliché and not all that interesting - more like a Barely Readable to Almost Average rec than worthy of the Library. Reading on gives no joy neither, unfortunately. So I'll just agree with the consensus here and say it's a 2/5 at best with no guilty pleasure to be had.
     
  5. Rin

    Rin Oberstgruppenführer DLP Supporter

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    Aww, I was just messing with you.

    Anyway, are there any decent stories with this idea, where Harry works with the press as the main plot device of the story?
     
  6. Heleor

    Heleor EsperJones DLP Supporter

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  7. Militis

    Militis Supreme Mugwump

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    This is a guilty pleasure fic for me...First one I've read with Reporter!Harry. (Second will be the link above.)

    3/5 for decent writing (even if it is a little bland, I find hardly any errors).
     
  8. Sin Saiori

    Sin Saiori Death Eater

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    Well my vote stays at 4/5:

    1 star for good grammar/spelling/format.
    2 star for original plotline/devices (for me anyway).
    1 star for guilty pleasure received from reading this.

    I know it's only recycle-bin-worthy compared to all the other stuff in the library, but I'd still recommend it to anyone who asked.
     
  9. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Far better than the original story in terms of cliches. The problem is that the story is a bit dull.

    Except Harry recruiting people into his "sekret" band of writers, who disguise themselves to go to fundraisers. Don't ask me, I don't know. -_-

    Not to mention that they are immediately loved. Chapter 4:
     
  10. Katricia

    Katricia DA Member

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    I remember reading that story once, and I'm pretty sure it's even on my Favorites list somewhere. The main thing that irks me about stories like this are how his often Harry's pseudonym is something along the lines of James Evans or in this case, Harrison Evans. How is it that no one ever makes the connection between the name and Harry James Potter, Lily Evans son?
     
  11. LightLess

    LightLess First Year

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    Sorry for being of topic, but I don't think I'm the only one curious.

    I've also read thousands of fics, but never seen one where's the best school is in japan and/or Harry studies there.

    Are there any worth reading to recommend?

    thanks,
     
  12. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    The only reason I mentioned it as a bad thing, as I cannot recall that theme used in a good story ever.

    Never.
     
  13. wolf550e

    wolf550e High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5178251/1/30_Minutes_That_Changed_Everything

    I don't recommend this for the DLP library (not good enough by far, IMO) but it's salvageable if it were edited for spelling and plot holes.

    The premise is, after World War III and IV, everybody dies and only Harry survives. He develops a method to send a device that is like a magical painting of himself back in time, contacts eight year old Harry Potter and changes the timeline. Harry goes to a magic school in Japan that uses time manipulation thingy to have five years of school in a single month of real time, during which the body does not grow, creating a bunch of people with multiple magical masteries and muggle college degrees but in the bodies of Hogwarts first years. The author doesn't quite pull it off.
    Also featuring manipulative!Dumbledore, (intentionally) backwards magical Britain, the Muggle MI5, the Hogwarts Founders' Heirs, and H/Hr (who, at the current point in the story, have been dating for twenty years but since they have not experienced puberty yet, are just friends).
     
  14. DreamRed

    DreamRed Seventh Year

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    This was edging for average during the first chapter, but the line at the end where a sane!Xenophilius Lovegood responds to Harry's snotty letter to the Prophet through the Quibbler just stopped me dead.

    Jesus fucking Christ. What bullshit. I mean, I know Britain's got the Daily Mail but you guys have got fucking Fox News. In a war of 'freedom of the press', we stamp you into the ground. Perhaps this pissed me off more than it should have, but to me it just showed another ignorant little American twat lauding just how good their fine country is despite all the dirty, dark shit that's been leaking out its arse over the last few decades.

    /rant. If the rest of the story continues in the same vein, I've no interest in it. 1/5
     
  15. Rin

    Rin Oberstgruppenführer DLP Supporter

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    Actually, the USA does have the freest press, and it's the only business explicitly protected by our constitution. If anything, FOX News is an example of that freedom, and not a counter example.

    Now, with regards to whether or not our press chooses to exercise that right by printing whatever the fuck they want . . . well . . .

    Either way, the freedom exists for them to enjoy, whether they use it or not.

    I have to wonder how England's highest courts would decide the Pentagon Papers case if it were British classified documents and the British equivalent to the New York Times.
     
  16. silverlasso

    silverlasso Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    I think this story is interesting enough for me to follow, but definitely not something I'd be able to recommend for the library. The quality of writing, especially for the articles, is average at best. But like I said, it's still a story I don't mind following, so I'll give it a 3/5.
     
  17. Rhapsody Belle

    Rhapsody Belle Sixth Year

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    This.

    I'm willing to follow it, not so willing to rec it to others. 2/5 for those reasons.
     
  18. calutron

    calutron Unspeakable

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    The plotline of harry becoming an anonymous columnist for a newspaper thats used for toilet paper ;-[] no its poorly executed, at best it's an indulgance. (1/5)
     
  19. happilyeverafter

    happilyeverafter Sixth Year

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    Meh

    I found this pretty bland. Apart from it being full of cliches, it also didn't stay to close to the cannon characteristics. Harry doesn't become some super writer over night, the titles that they used were wrong, ie: ""What do you mean, Lord Harry?" Lord Peter asked, a bit stunned by the question." You don't call people Lord Harry, you just call them Harry and probably the most annoying this was how no-body figured out who he was- apart from Fillius- even though Oliver Twist basically talks about Harry Potter in every single article and all issues around him. I don't really know what to think, sure it was entertaining, but at the same time full of cliches and my pet hates. Also, since when does everyone in Britain sue people, it's really not done too much in the UK.
    1/5
     
  20. sincostan

    sincostan High Inquisitor

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    As Rin said, your example doesn't make sense. If anything Fox News exemplifies that freedom. It's not freedom of the press only if your ideals happen to line up with the viewpoint expressed. And I thought libel law is much more stringent in the UK than the US. I'm going to need an internet legal expert to weigh in here, but I thought that in the UK, public figures can seek damages for unproven allegations against them, while in the US public figures generally have to suck it up.
     
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