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Girls Girls Girls By Scorpio- NC-17

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Tasoli, Feb 28, 2010.

1.7999999523163/5, 15 votes
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  1. Tasoli

    Tasoli Minister of Magic

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    Feb 28, 2010 #1
    Title: Girls Girls Girls
    Author: Scorpio
    Rating: NC-17
    DLP Category: Restirected section
    Pairing: Harry/Gryffindor Chasers
    Status: Work in Progress

    Link: http://hp.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600021652

    It is very good story starts with GoF. Give a try I liked it
     
  2. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Feb 28, 2010 #2
    ... LOL I think I read the first chapter of this and had to stop at the end. Katie randomly walks in on Harry in the prefects bathroom and Harry stares at her shaved cunt. Later she sends him a note telling him she isn't wearing any knickers. The worst was when Harry failed at some charm and she orgasmed from him looking at her. :|

    -5/5 D8
     
  3. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Feb 28, 2010 #3
    Awful, Awful, Awful.

    From what I've gathered from the first chapter, this story is about premature ejaculation, as Harry has moments like the ones quoted above quite often.

    I would rate it a 1/5 if I was sure this was a serious attempt at writing smut. Reading through this story, I find it difficult to believe that anyone could be this clueless.

    I think it gets a 1/5 anyway, even if it is unintentionally amusing.


    Fur teh lulz sentences:
     
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  4. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Yeah, I'm afraid the pubic hair fetish isn't going to work.

    You'd think someone would have written a good Harry/Gryffindor-chasers story by now, but no.
     
  5. scaryisntit

    scaryisntit Death Eater

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    Feb 28, 2010 #5
    Gay!Colin, check.

    Leads into...

    Uh huh. I wonder where this will lead...

    1.5/5, and that extra .5 only because it's actually written with a pretty decent grasp of the language.
     
  6. Luda

    Luda Seventh Year

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    Feb 28, 2010 #6
    No offense tasoli, but why the fuck did you recommend this?
     
  7. Tehan

    Tehan Avatar of Khorne DLP Supporter

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    Feb 28, 2010 #7
    Whatever floats your boat, man.
     
  8. reggin

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    Feb 28, 2010 #8
    Could not fap to this. 1/5
     
  9. doctorofawesome

    doctorofawesome Squib

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    Feb 28, 2010 #9
    This barely qualifies as a brain fart. 1/5.
     
  10. Scott

    Scott Professor DLP Supporter

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    Feb 28, 2010 #10
    I keep getting this image replay in my head of Harry grunting and cumming. It's fucked.

    That's cool :rolleyes:. I this story would get more popular if it was Severus Snape.
     
  11. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Feb 28, 2010 #11
    LOL.

    Exactly this review convinced me to read it.

    At least it really is funny - even though unintentionally. It isn't even bad - just a stereotypical pubescent teenage fantasy.

    I wish I had that many wet dreams...

    1/5
     
  12. Darje

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    Feb 28, 2010 #12
    I'm afraid that if I read this I would die of laughter, just reading the reviews is making me crack up so bad my stomach hurts.
     
  13. Inert

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    Read it. Wished I didn't.

    It was mildly amusing, but the whole Jizz-In-My-Pants!Harry was more annoying and stupid than anything else.

    tasoli: let me know what you're smoking and where I can get some.

    1/5 only because the writing was pretty good.
     
  14. Archer

    Archer Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    Mar 1, 2010 #14
    I read it for the lulz.

    1/5.
     
  15. Skykes

    Skykes Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Mar 3, 2010 #15
    [​IMG]

    Premature ejaculation is no laughing matter. Men need to quickly cum up with a solution to this problem.
     
  16. Schrodinger

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    AH BURN IT BURN IT BURN IT FUUUUUUUUUUCK!
     
  17. Torak

    Torak Death Eater

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    Mar 3, 2010 #17
    This story is the truth

    I never laughed this much just from reading smut

    2/5 just for this quote
     
  18. Pyromaniac

    Pyromaniac Third Year

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    Mar 3, 2010 #18
    Is it poorly written? Oh hells yes.

    On the other hand, is it remotely fappable? Also yes. Hence, 2/5.
     
  19. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    There... Are no words for the disgust I feel for you. The answer to both is, its the worst piece of shit ever.
     
  20. Schrodinger

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    I love your avvy so much.

    In any case, this fick isn't taht bad. The smut is below average, but the entire rest of the story is like an independent Harry without a manipulative Dumbledore. more of a COmpetent!Harry, something I like. If the same story was tackled by a good author, it could very possibly become amazing. 2/5 for... unfulfilled potential.
     
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