He couldn't even do it properly and save us all from this train wreck of a story?

 

Nope, and I gave up after chapter 10.

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From the authors page

I'll give him that...

 

I read this more because of the pairing than anything else. A fair few cliche's but still better than 90% of the crap on FFnet, and 95% better than any other HP/NT fic. It's such a pity this pairing has a grand total of one(1) decent fic.

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As for this fic, once you get past the cliche's its not too bad, readable at the very least.

 

Here is a link

 

MY BAD!:banana:

 

The Fifth by swabloo
He was a man of many names.Death,Zeus...those that named him knew of the terrible power he posessed.Methos was never a name,it was his Legend.Harry Potter,on the other hand..That was something special.You never forget your first.CROSSOVER HP/Highlander/SG

One of the better fics I've read lately.

 

I would say it is a perfect fic for this thread. Decent, but not good enough for review.

 

Here's an interesting one.

Harry Potter and the Greater Good, it basically is a what if Dumbledore and Grindelwald didn't fight each other and instead essentially subjugated the ministry. It is a decent read at this point, which plenty of potential (although I see some things in it that are remarkably similar to the fic I'm writing at the moment). Only issue is that the first chapter is mostly from Lily's perspective, but that's a minor quibble. With some work, this could be quite good.

 

This was pretty good, and if Chapter 4 is to be any judge it's on its way to getting better. That being said, I've always been a fan of the "Turn things on their head" style of alternate universe, and I like how the backstory of the differences is being revealed slowly in the background of the fic.

In addition to that 36k words in 2 weeks is quite the update rate, so we should be seeing more pretty soon.

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The whole Snape + Riddle plotting against Dumbledore thing in chapter 4 has me interested. Why does Dumbledore need to hide the Stone (if that's what he's hiding), and who is he even hiding it from? Grindelwald?

 

Pretty good concept here: a Harry who's been dropped by his friends decides to accept Bagman's help. Bagman's help is actually done decently, and prompts Harry into learning as well. His performance in the First Task may have been a little too good, but I liked it.

The second chapter is pretty much focussed on the Harry/Susan pairing, which is slightly fluffy, but nothing to hate the story for. It's only 2 chapters long but there are over 21,000 words in those 2 chapters.

The writing is decent, but I'm putting this here for a few reasons. Firstly, it's too short for For Review, and there's no way to tell for sure where the author will take the plot. Secondly, a more talented author and a more serious focus on the dangers of the tournament and Harry's studies (assisted by Bagman's tips and Harry's 'new' friends) would make it a little more compelling. Anyway, give this one a try.

 

Definite 3 star material. Although I am biased for the Harry/Susan pairing - so it was nice to actually see a new quality story featuring the two of them.

 

One for Harry/Fleur fans maybe.

Not too bad so far I think. Some cliches and such of course but then what fic doesn't have some sort of cliche?

The first chapter is somewhat absurdly long but the latter two are more manageable in length.

Harry and Fleur's relationship is alright so far. They're simply friends and haven't all the sudden started sleeping together like in many fics. Fleur's accent is a bit much maybe...

The whole 'Male Veela' thing really hasn't come into play yet, so again Harry doesn't just go 'poof' and change all the sudden.

The political stuff isn't anything groundbreaking but it's not overly absurd either.

Dumbledore seems to be fairly well done and isn't portrayed as a complete moron or overly manipulative 'old coot' as many are fond of calling him.

 

Kick in the arse of the wizarding world is a fun but spelling mistake riddled little fanfic. First, it's Hermione-centered, so many won't like it.

It's basically a Time Travel of the 'send a message back in time variety', but so far it doesn't seem to be in order to change a dark future or anything (in fact, it is said it won't change Future!Hermione's live at all as it makes an alt!timeline) but simple scientific curiosity and 'why not' from a future hermione.

It makes some extrapolation about HPverse, but nothing horrible (i find), and a good point about it so far is that there is absolutely no bashing.

I like it so far, but it might be a guilty pleasure.

 

I think it is a perfect case of good idea with bad execution.

Story began alright, but went completely awry form there. If you want the entire Hogwarts to abandon Harry including Gryffindor then you need to give reasons for it. The author just mentioned that everyone abandoned Harry and that's that, which isn't very logical. The Gryffindors would have stuck by him even if the other houses didn't.

Secondly, most of the characters are quite OOC. Susan feels a bit Mary Sueish and the author seems intent upon forcing her and Harry together without any logical progression.

The writing itself is so-so and dialogues aren't good either. And the author needs to utilise scene breaks as the flow from one scene to another is quite jarring.

Overall, the author needs to settle down the story a bit and progress the plot smoothly and not rush it as it feels in its correct state.

The story can turn out good with the support of a strong beta or if the author is really dedicated to improving his writing. At its current state, I don't think this once deserves the Recycle Bin, let alone the library.

 

I think it's good enough to make the library as is. It's nothing groundbreaking as far as fanfiction goes, but it is a rare pairing and Harry's character is interesting. Shit, if all my boys started talking shit about me based on something that I wasn't responsible for and I only had one or two friends that stuck by me, I'd tell the rest of them to fuck off. Harry seems to have done this here.

The writing could be better, I agree. But it's an enjoyable read and, if the next few chapters continue in this same vein, then I think it's worthy of the library.

 

Hmmm...there were many things in there that were irritating. I may be nitpicking but Aguamenti, conjuration and bubble-head charms aren't learned till sixth/seventh year. Ginny, in the early stages of her third year casts the first and Harry casts the other two in the early stages of his fourth (though Harry's casting may be overlooked - the situation is desperate, and he did manage a Patronus at thirteen...).

But Harry does know the Diffindo spell well before the first task in canon, and all students learn about the witch-burnings in third year where they hear about flame-freezing charms (Harry's essay about Wendelin the Weird who uses them), so I find it improbable that Cedric would've never heard of it.

There were other things too like Harry forgiving Hermione but not Ron, friend!Malfoy (Narcissa) sending Dobby to help ensure Harry's safety before his second year etc. I can't recall the rest of them at the moment. I agree with all the comments Johnny Farrar made in his review. This is not even recycle bin material as it is.

Might end up as a guilty pleasure fic for a lot of people (myself included) though.

 

Pretty much this.

And the author uses ellipses way too much. You know you need to work on your writing when there are ellipses in every other paragraph.

Not too bad though. I've read a lot worse.

 

Updated, the Harry - Dumbledore interaction was really well done. The author excels at writing dialogue in my opinion, the conversations in this story are suprisingly authentic compared to most other fics.

 

Another chapter of Journey Through the Dark and I'll put it in For Review. I like it.