EDIT: NVM I'm an idiot

About the update, there really isn't anything noticable to give advice on. Quality once again.

 

Thanks for putting an end to the bickering Santi, with a nice update.

I'll also echo Matian, in that it would be good to see more one on one interaction between Harry and Viktor and Nathan respectively.

Keep up the good work Santi.

 

Great chapter, nice to have things back on track. I agree with the others about having a bit more interaction between Harry and his brother but generally everything is fine as is.

EDIT.

Viktor laughed. “Well, to be fair, Kira, you did spring the snogging on me rather
suddenly.”

“Suddenly!” she exclaimed. “You tell me that you're going to be starting for the Bulgarian
National team and I'm, what? Supposed to just say congratulations and shake your hand? You
should have expected the snog of your life"

Its not at all a big deal but it seems kind of out of place coming from Victor Krum and Kira whoever she is.
Usually the term's a permanent fixture in HP fanfiction because of the British setting but they're Bulgarians... in Bulgaria at this point and I sorta feel like this detracts from that a little.

 

You know, they aren't actually even speaking in English. The fic is from Harry's point of view, and so everything we read could be considered as Harry's mental translation.

 

Great Update! I hope that Harry does beat Grindelwald's record. Looking forward to more. You haven't talked about magical power in this fic so i was wondering how you will compare him to other students?

 

"down the boy's hallway" - boys'

"managed last throughout" - managed to last

"Harry asked curiously " - punctuation missing

"learn nothing more from me at your time at Durmstrang" - maybe change to "during yor time"

"fairly actuate estimate" - accurate

"our seventh years to comprehend Harry" - missing comma before Harry. Also, maybe change comprehend to "accomplish". After all, Harry comprehends the idea of sensing magic, he just can't duplicate it.

"discern ones own magic" - one's own

"that it use to be tradition" - used, traditional

"Grindelwald search for rare dark knowledge" - searched

"finish a classes early" - class

"seven straight times" - maybe change to "seven times straight"

"reserved for upper students" - upper class students

"interrogate anther student" - another

 

I'm looking foward to what will be the media reaction to this. If Santi decides to use a OoTP Daily Prophet, we can expect Britain starting a crusade against the Boy-Who-Lived-Evil-Brother. You know, the next Dark Lord, The one who is moar evil than Grindelwald?

 

I'd actually expect the exact opposite. Since Harry's parents haven't disowned him for doing well in the Dark Arts, I wouldn't expect the media to make the correlation of intelligence to evilness. I'd expect local papers of eastern Europe and Germany to say something along the lines of "At last, on of Grindlewalds impacts on Dumstrang has been lifted..." Basically I'd expect it to be received very well. But where's the drama and conflict in that, right?

 

This in a way. I'd assume that Eastern Countries who have directly felt Grindelwald's predations would celebrate that yet another one of his legacies has been erased from history. But those in England looking for ways to dirty Nathan and the Potter family would make a big issue out of it, and no doubt Death Eaters will start taking bigger looks at Harry. Also, I fully expect a scene where Draco throws a copy of whatever newspaper reports the deed into Nathan's face, which will set off another issue between Harry and his parents.

 

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/DumbIsGood

That is all.

 

DLP, my name is Gregory House.

 

Ahh, another great update! Poor Harry heh heh he can't catch a break regarding Viktor/Kira! Maybe he should learn to knock before entering. Though why do I get the feeling that one day Harry will be casting his own doorknob red...

I'm glad to see more Viktor/Kira interaction, though. In the beginning she wasn't developed very well and she seemed more like an antagonistic presence more than anything else, but I'm glad to see you've actually given the two of them an actual relationship that's not just there for the sake of the plot. Good work!

When is Dumby going to reveal (or plan to reveal, since I think he knows he can't keep it secret forever) Quirrelmort's manipulations? Keeping it secret to protect the one you love is one thing, but keeping it for more than half a year is something else...

I eagerly look forward to more!

 

I thoroughly enjoy this story & it looks like there are more quality updates to come. Most people get lazy in decribing settings cuz they figure everyone already can picture Hogwarts themselves...and HP stories that take place anywhere except Hogwarts do a horrible job of describing their setting for the most part. but that is not the case here, you have done a good job in bringing Durmstrang to life. Your characters are also well done, particularly the OC's, Calypso esepcially...I find myself very interested in trying to figure out what she is up to. Mostly because it seems like whatever she is doing will not be simply good or bad, but a shade of grey & that sort of murky area between right and wrong makes for a better story I think...that and I simply enjoy the mystery.

Though I do have to agree with some earlier comments regarding adding some variety to interactions between Harry & other characters...all they ever do is study. It would be nice to see some one on one conversations /interactions where Harry is not talking about schoolwork, stucying or practicing. Also the Durmstrang professors could be fleshed out a bit more as characters, they just don't have the same depth to them as say Dumbledore, Snape or McGonagall for example. Though I do notice you seem to be moving Harry & Professor Kosarev into a pupil/mentor relationship...so that could be interesting. And I am sure Mr. Rosier will be quite an important character, so it looks as if this concern is being addressed

Prior to this Calypso thing, the story had thus far been moving a bit slowly but that too seems to be changing. I suppose I am still not used to the absence of the annual Voldemort plot taking up a big chunk of the schoolyear. But you do such a good job of describing what is going on that the pace of the story becomes a negligable issue at best...and now business seems to be picking up a bit.

Well that's it...I just wanted to say my piece & let you know I truly enjoy this story

 

The professors at Durmstrang are much more formal than at Hogwarts, so a student (unless it's an older student who is a protege) is unlikely to get to see them as people and consequently we don't get to see them fleshed out.

With Harry's friends conspiring to help him beat Grindelwald's record, all they'll be doing is study. And perhaps snog and duel/fight.

 

Do you mean prodigy as in a genius or protege as in an apprentice?

 

I know I'm stretching, but I'm gonna take a wild guess and say he meant protege, because you know, that's the word he used.

 

There is always so much discussion over this story.
Anyway, pretty good so far.

 

Another nice couple of scenes. I really like the way in which the relationships with Harry's friends are developing. Recently Krum has really become much more developed.

The scene with Harry listening to the wireless is nice as it shows Harry doing something other than studying however it would be better if there were more people there listening with Harry to show their reaction, maybe Kira?

The projects are coming along nicely and are well thought out. The transfiguration project is an especially original idea.

The introducing the problem of the chamber of secrets seemed a bit rushed. Nathan seems to have gone to Harry for help at a very late stage. Also the time line seems to be a bit off. The final Chamber of Secrets incident happens at the very end of the year as in Canon Harry misses the final exams, so Nathan entering the chamber needs to be after Harry has left school. Hermione was the last victim so shouldn't this be later?

This is a minor problem. This is one of my favourite HP stories. Keep it up.

 

I like how your Harry is slowly becoming a star student in Durmstrang. It's only right if he is as much intelligent as we are suppose to believe, that sooner than later his teachers will discover it too and help him develop in a great wizard.

Also, after Calipso mentioned that Nathan is TBWL I started thinking - was there any mention how he survived curse? In canon Dumbledore knew it was Lily's sacrifice, but I don't remember if he had any theory about it in this fic.

Should be - a one in a million talent.