Pretty good read altought you seem to have abandoned the story for a long time, I wish you would update soon.

Keep going

 

Err...this isn't Amerision's fic. He just posted it.

I like the story, but it is VERY rushed. There seems to be a plot, but i think its just there to even out the smut. It's a good read, and he used to update VERY frequently. Now, i havent seen an update form him in a month or so.

Honestly though, i don't like smut written like this. He builds it up nicely, but the actual smut is perhaps only 800 words per scene. Plus, he's brought in the domination shit, and i have to say...ugh.

I am not a fan of domination fics at all. I'm probably one of the only people who finds Oldwolf's fics terrible. No only the smut...Oldwolf can't write smut worth a damn, but the CONSTANT anal sex is making me wonder about him. Plus, his humiliations and whatnot really put me off. I'm not a fan of mistreating women, regardless of what they've done to you.

I like the fic, but he could have done it better. I just wish he'd make the smut parts larger, and more...i dunno, descriptive.

 

We think alike Yar. Pretty much agree with you on this guy. Not on my fav. list but I skimmed through the story. Nothing particularly original.

Parts of oldwolf's fics also put me off, some of which I completely dropped, like sisters black. The guy's pretty nice actually but I noted that his anal scenes really make my head spin at times. He took it that pretty well I give him points for that.

 

The smut is just *plopped* in your face.

It's like:

Harry: Hey, see this? I stuck it up your ass! Uhhhh! Yeah!

Girl: *moan*

Harry: Yeah!

Girl: *moan*

Harry: Sizzlin'

Girl: *orgasms and goes boneless*

Harry: Well, I've got blue balls...*looks around*...Anyone else?

It lacks any weaving, spiraling, and sensual language. It's just..vulgar.

 

Rofl...Amerision, that actually scared me.

Mrriddler: Same here...i made it to perhaps chapter 10 or so of Sisters Black before i dropped it. Sorta disgusted me, really. Then he put up that other fic where the hypnotique potion was used...gah! And then the outtake from Sisters Black...that was just gross. I'd never even fucking think of doing that, purely out of respect for the fact that it is SHIT on a dick.

And Amerision: You're absolutely right. THe smut lacks any imagery...its all about thrusts and banging, there's no actual image available to the reader. I didn't like the whole claws and shit coming a few weeks after i posted my fic too...dunno.

 

Updates?

I'm wondering when the story will have a new update. I like to read the next chapter and learn what happens next!! But the stories a great read.

 

In case anyone else is wondering stories on ficwad are temporarily unavailable while they update their database, however their website indicates they will be back up soon.

I had no idea what was going on.

 

True... It has been a long time.... And as for the fic, i give it a 2.7/5. Damn thing too rush, the characters doesn't have much of a development... Ok maybe it's just me

 

The sex scenes were hot, but otherwise....

So do I

3/5

 

Loved the smut, didn't really care about the rest

 

This is fucking terrible. I only have my age in 2006 to excuse myself for this rec.

0/5

Even as it stands, it should be pruned out.

 

Agreed. It's pretty fucking bad, no offense Amerison.