Title: Simple and Clean
Author: DigiFruit
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure/Drama
DLP Category: General
Pairing: Harry/Hermione
Status: Oneshot

Summary: Trelawney never made the prophecy, Voldemort was never defeated on Halloween of 1981, Britain has fallen into darkness, and Harry Potter is just another no-name rebel soldier trying to smuggle a certain Muggleborn witch out of Death Eater territory

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6691692/1/Simple_and_Clean

Very well written. A bit angsty and sad. A Harry Potter who is fighting a losing battle all his life. No prophecy, no unknown power. Harry's resolve despite the overwhelming tragedy is very nicely portrayed. I rate this 4/5. The sappy end seemed disconnected with the overall theme of uncertainty and tension.

 

Interesting idea. I like it.

The references to canon annoyed me a little, and the obvious influences of certain manga were a little overbearing. I lol'd when the illusionist Death Eater made all of Harry's perceptions opposite... Very similar to how I lol'd when that happened in Bleach. God I hated that battle...

The writing flowed pretty well, and there weren't any spelling/grammar mistakes that I could see. The story was attention-grabbing, and the general mix of ideas were written in a fairly original way. Story-line was fun, but like Luckykas said, the ending didn't really fit. 4/5

 

This... is a perfect example of a decent idea turned to shit by shoddy execution. And the author's obsession with the pairing. Because really, that's what this story is - a pretty different idea that leads into nothing but overly fluffy, sudden romance between Harry and the Daphne who isn't.

The flashbacks were distracting, and most of the 'story' left me wondering where the actual story was. I understand that each scene is supposed to drive the tale forward, but generally, I expect coherence in the progression. And there really wasn't any progression here.


2/5 from me.

 

My guess is that the unpardonable sin here isn't the lack of a tag, but rather the fact an unsuspecting Sesc began reading a Harry/Hermione story.

God, would I have loved to be a fly on the wall when he realized his mistake. :awesome

 

The story was almost recommended not an hour before OP.

Just a tip: the search function is helpful in avoiding such redundancies.

On the story itself, this sums up how I feel about it pretty well.

One things that really fucked it up for me is the incorporation of animu characters and tropes. It worked better in his time travel story, but Tifa and Cloud? Honestly. :facepalm

I like his Naruto stories better. I think it's easier to mesh different anime together than to do so across genres. Also the standards for HP seem higher here.

3/5. Bin worthy at best.

 

I've got to agree with Lurker here. The first time Neville said something retarded like, "Complacency is his weakness!", I could tell that it wasn't going to get better from there. Add to that that the characterization of Hermione in this is reduced to blushing and bumbling about and I don't really see the appeal. I had to hit the X at the Cloud and Tifa bit; it just made no sense on so many levels. 2/5