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WIP We'll All Fall After The Yule Ball by Averis - M

Discussion in 'Romance' started by Averis, Apr 12, 2011.

4.196720123291/5, 61 votes
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  1. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery ~ Prestige ~

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    Apr 12, 2011 #1
    Title: We'll All Fall After The Yule Ball
    Author: Averis
    Genre: Humor/Romance
    Rating: M for language
    Pairing: Parvati/Harry/Katie
    Chapters: 16
    Words: 58,226
    Updated: Mar 25, 2016 (ff.net)
    Published: April 11, 2011
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: Harry's attraction to Parvati leads him to take his Yule Ball preparation much more seriously and his night is changed as a result. Includes an awesome Ron, an interesting Parvati and a drunk Katie Bell.

    Link: We'll All Fall After The Yule Ball
    Link WbA: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=16805

    I know that posting your own story is generally frowned upon, but I've had this in Work by Author for quite some time and now that I'm about half-way done with this story I've decided to edit what I've got and post it to Fanfiction.net. Based on the feedback I've received in WbA I think this is good enough (and hopefully long enough) to make it into the library and C2.


    Checked by Minion: February 14, 2014
    Checked by Sorrows 03/08/2019
    - Progress updated
     
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  2. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    Apr 12, 2011 #2
    I won't go into a huge amount of detail but I genuinely think this is almost one of a kind. The only other story that so easily baits me into laughing or smiling quite as much is Contemplating Clouds, which is praise indeed.

    I can't really put my finger on why I really like it so much but it's easily library worthy.

    4/5 but I'm estimating a 5/5 when it's completed.

    For what it's worth, think it falls into humour more than romance and as for posting your own story, I do it all the time and nobody's ever complained ;D
     
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  3. Jormungandr

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    Apr 13, 2011 #3
    Certainly got my vote: entertaining, witty, and the characterization of both Ron and devious!Katie are just plain awesome.
     
  4. Garden

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    Apr 13, 2011 #4
    Witty, original, and cute.
    I'm giving it a 4/5 now, but I think a 5/5 would be perfect if/when completed, if it continues in this vein.
     
  5. Scott

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    Apr 13, 2011 #5
    Why are there 4 chapters in one chapter? Other then that some parts of the dialog in the beginning were stiffy but the Katie you got going on is hell yeah bitches. 4/5 for now.
     
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  6. Mage

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    Apr 13, 2011 #6
    It's awesome as is, and hopefully will be even more awesome when it's finished. The characterization is excellent. Giving it a 4/5 for now, when it's finished I could see it being a 5/5 if it keeps up at this rate.
     
  7. knuckz

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    Apr 13, 2011 #7
    We can post our own stories!? Okay, I might do that once I put up an HP story.

    But Averis, it's pretty well done. The pacing is kind of fast, and I think FFnet might have messed up your formatting (it's hard to distinguish one part from another), but it's pretty funny regardless.

    As it is, I'd say 4/5. Maybe a 5 depending on it's conclusion.
     
  8. Jas

    Jas Fourth Year

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    Apr 13, 2011 #8
    It is a very entertaining story. I like the characterisation of your Katie as well as Ron. It reads and feels more like a comedy than a romance fic but that is just me. Very enjoyable and looking forward to its completion.
     
  9. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery ~ Prestige ~

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    Apr 13, 2011 #9
    Actually I'm just lazy as fuck and threw it up there rather than make chapters. I'll probably just continue posting updates to WbA and then drop a few chapters together as one big chapter... if that makes sense.

    Thanks for the warm words, I don't want to let you guys down as far as the 5/5 goes...

    enembee is my fan boy WOOT
     
  10. enembee

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    Apr 13, 2011 #10
    I'd be more of a fanboy if you ever wrote some more Hercules!Hagrid.
     
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  11. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery ~ Prestige ~

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    Apr 13, 2011 #11
    EDIT: FUCK... Wrong thread. Update in WbA
     
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  12. The Duke

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    Apr 13, 2011 #12
    This story is really enjoyable so far; first I read in awhile that has Harry actually acting like a teenager. 4/5 that will probly turn into a 5/5 when its finshed.
     
  13. Scott

    Scott Professor DLP Supporter

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    Apr 13, 2011 #13
    Can you remove Chapter 2, 3 and 4 then if it's just going to be one long as chapter? It's annoying and messes up my reading.

    But <3 your Katie
     
  14. Jormungandr

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    Apr 13, 2011 #14
    More devious!Katie. That is all. :)
     
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    addictedforlife High Inquisitor

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    Apr 13, 2011 #15
    Read the newest entry in the WbA? Looks like that's over... :(

    OT: Don't know anything that I could say that hasn't been said. 4/5, with possibility of getting 5/5 when finished.
     
  16. Jormungandr

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    Apr 13, 2011 #16
    Oh, I did. :) I just hope that he'll bring her back in the next chapter, or something.

    It's refreshing to see a minor character being given such a devious characterization.

    Now, all we need is a bunnyboiler!Tonks/Fleur on Harry story, or something...hmm...
     
  17. Sapph

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    Apr 13, 2011 #17
    So this story is pretty much what got me posting on DLP again. I love how you've done the characters here, Katie is probably my favourite character from what you've written but I think you've got all of your characterisations (aside from the OOC Harry obviously) pretty much spot on. I'll agree that the way you've formatted it on the website makes it distracting, if you'd just taken on the chapter one, chapter two and let it flow some more it'd have been perfect but I can't fault the actual writing.

    One of the few fics I've actually found genuinely funny, I know it's not finished but I've gave it 5/5 .
     
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    Apr 15, 2011 #18
    This is a great story and Katie is AWESOME. Just a stellar character. Really. Definitely a 5/5. Keep up the good work.

    Awesome.
     
  19. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery ~ Prestige ~

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    Apr 15, 2011 #19
    For those of you that were annoyed by my lazy ass four chapters in one bullshit, I broke them up and added the latest update to the fourth chapter. Thus the chapters are staying around the 3000-4000 range. Hopefully things are a bit more clean now... Keep in mind it could take a little bit for Fanfiction.net to update it...

    It's my friggin' birthday and I'm working on Fanfucktion...
     
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  20. Gulliver

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    Apr 18, 2011 #20
    Quite obviously library worthy. 5/5
     
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