http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7140955/1/Beyond_the_Veil

There are way too many fics named Beyond the Veil. The rest of them should be renamed because this one trumps them all with the first chapter. The writing is weak for a couple of sentences and stretches, but is generally strong. I'd say it's a promising start to a necromancer!Harry.

 

I just finished reading An Inconvenient Truth by Old-Crow. I know it was mentioned earlier in the thread, but not much was said about it then and it's had a lot more progress since then. I think it fits in this thread pretty well. On the positive side its post 3rd year which I always find enjoyable. The adults in the story actually do things and don't rely on a bunch of 14 year old children, and it is somewhat more realistic. On the down side, it can be a bit repetitive at points and I don't think he does a very good job at character development. Overall I'd recommend you give it a shot if you have a few hours to kill with nothing better to do.

 

Beyond the Veil is also in the WBA (now named Across the Veil) and fits in this thread pretty well. It could be library material if the author fixes up his writing; there's missing punctuation in most of the dialogue, there are a lot of run-ons, etc.

 

Now Let the Night Be Dark, a post DH mystery fic. Fascinating and sophisticated imagination which keeps at least my attention. Worth trying out.

 

World in Pieces was updated a couple days ago. New chapter was a bit weird, honestly. Not bad, really - I like the way magic is used in this universe, honestly. But the whole bit with Voldemort just struck me as a bit off...

I rather wish that the author (he? she?) would focus more on this story and less on crappy HP/DM. But alas...

 

My bet's on a 'she'; HP/DM.

 

Yeah, I kinda doubt it's a guy. Still, you never know.

 

Title: The Family Clock
Author: Jan. McNeville
Pairing(s): Charlie Weasley/OC
Rating: M (doesn't deserve the rating so far)
Story Summary: Ever think of the Weasleys' clock? A wizarding watchmaker makes friends with our favorite twins in an answer to the Great Mary Sue Problem. Rating is upped one, just to be safe.
Status: WIP
Words: 123,122


OC-centric fic started way back in 2004 as an answer to an 'Anti-Mary Sue' challenge. Jamesina Tickes is a graduated Ravenclaw shopkeeper post-OotP whose business is clocks. She's inserted into Harry Potter canon with little fanfare as a recently made acquaintance of the Weasley family via the twins.

The early chapters are fairly rough and could use some editing. There are some minor issues with little ways the author shunted around canon to give 'Jessie' contact with canon characters, a few cultural nitpicks, and some timeline issues. The canon shunting was easily forgivable when the author began to get into Alley politics. The cultural nitpicks that bugged me are mostly American-isms, and the timeline issues are just confusing as hell. I have yet to figure out where in the HP timeline this falls, and just how AU it's supposed to be. The romance, at least, is handled well, but that's not where the story shines.

The best part of the story is the political plot. Jamesina Tickes is the latest in a series of Tickes who are the proprietors of the best clockmakers in the British Wizarding World. The author has developed an intricate history of Diagon Alley and Jamesina Tickes' family that meshes extremely well with canon politics pre-HBP. (One of the best things about the story is the explanation for 'Jessie's' embarrassing name.)

Up until chapter ten, however, the story is a weak string of somewhat related events that are mostly along the lines of romance. 2/5 at most. Chapter eleven and later picks up into some semblance of a plot, and a few wonderful bits of economic, political, and character oriented snippets that range from 3.5/5 to 4.5/5 in quality. The story could use with a good solid shredding via an editor, but has a lot of potential.

ETA: Warnings are that it is not Harry centric in the least, it starts as a romance and a good chunk of the story is dependent on it, and that there are several inconsistencies with canon. The author has notably tried to incorporate small bits of HBP canon, but it's not working out well. Also, it's chiefly from Jamesina's POV.

 

Titans has been updated. After a few more chapters, it can probably go into For Review.

 

Eh... I don't know. The writing isn't amazing, and the plot seems to be veering off into nowhere, fast. It's trying to pull of politics and is only succeeding marginally..

 

Seems to be going downhill, Titans.

'Count Dracula?' First thing that comes to mind is Count Chocula in a red cape, or a cheesy, B+ movie version/multimedia version of him.

He could of at least used Vlad Tepes the III ('Vlad the Impaler'), and a more horrific/creepy description of him.

"I vant to thuck vor blud vith chocovate, blah!"

 

Greater Than, Lesser Be by Kneazle
Harry and his friends ingested love potions; great-he could deal with that. But knowing that he found this out before and the people he trusted sent him back in time memoryless to relive his past, again and again? Not this time if he had anything to say!
Harry Potter - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Drama - Chapters: 5 - Words: 54,968 - Reviews: 203 - Updated: 7-9-11 - Published: 10-10-10 - Harry P. & Remus L. - Complete

A quick time travel fic, nothing spectacular in it. Needs some beta work.

 

If I killed people for a living my first reaction would be to kill the one trying to send me to the past again, not drawing pretty symbols on the air.

I'll try to read it later, but that start already doomed to fic in my eyes.

 

Title: Harry Potter and the Sword of Gryffindor
Author: braille12456-35
Pairing: N/A
Rating: T
Link: Fan Fiction
Story Summary: When some of the Death Eaters capture Harry, their curses go awry and instead of killing Harry they blind him. How is he going to return to Hogwarts and ultimately fight the Dark Lord? He'll have to find a new strength and cunning he didn't know he had.

Not bad. The grammar is spot on. And it tackles the whole disabled!Harry angle pretty realistically. Although it's sometimes boring as hell, and the author's obvious disregard, or ignorance, of Harry Potter's magic and the wizarding world may be grating.

Spoiler

(not to mention super accurate, werewolf slaying, blind Harry and secret agent, animagus Crookshanks)

But I found it to be a decent read. Especially if you like a differently abled Harry.

The sequel is much better, at least in character development.

 

For the spoilers contained in that tag alone, I'll avoid that story.

 

The latest chapter of All Good Things is a lot better than the one before it. The writing was improved, the character interactions were better, and several things really seemed well-done, like the fight scene and Harry's difficulty in relating to 11-year olds.

 

Soooo, it's Daredevil!Harry, where [insert inane new mentor's name here] says things like, "Magical eyes like Moody's are just really, really doggone tough to find, and he said he wouldn't loan us his, so suck it up, kiddo, use the force, *be* the spell, and let's get you trained up to face the Dark Lord, even if we have to keep taking you by the shoulders to make sure you're pointing in the right direction."

Am I about right?

This.

 

Not at all.

Harry's like a legally blind person in the regular, modern world. With similar problems and obstacles. No super mentor, no kung-fu or other shit. Just the cane and a lot of falling down and stumbling. No mage-sight. No super spatial awareness. Nothing like that.

It's really normal to say the truth. And than it goes into insane with Harry knocking down werewolves.

 

The plot thickens.

So it would seem that the point of divergence being: instead of a duel that claimed Ariana's life and changed Albus' path, Albus and Gellert ran away together when Abe couldn't stop them (or didn't get a chance to).

There's one thing I noticed upon re-reading, though. If James and Lily are of the same age as in canon, they'd be 31 now while Harry is 11. On the other hand Sirius, who should be the same age as the Potters (31), has a son in fifth year, i.e. at least 15. So he became a father at 16?