I don't think they care that they're self-aware and eat them anyway.

 

Alex Rider:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4201783/1/Falls-the-Shadow

Alex is sent to retrieve a computer virus from a juvenile prison, but nothing is as it seems. Between the idea and reality, between the emotion and response, between the words and the truth...

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4273471/1/Where-the-Heart-Is

Jack needs somewhere to live, and Ian needs a housekeeper who can handle his seven-year-old nephew. They all end up with something they didn't expect.

Don't know how many people on DLP have read the Alex Rider series, but the basic premise is that a fourteen year old boy is forced to work for MI6 after his uncle's death. The author, Anthony Horowitz, is great with action, but his characters feel flat sometimes. The author of these two fics really does a great job with expanding on characterization and keeping it interesting and funny.

 

I didn't want to mention that since it ties into there being OC's and the story dragging a little, especially since

Spoiler

there's an entire chapter dedicated to Gracia giving birth and Team Seven helping with that. That chapter seriously dragged for me, but it might not for others.

Also, the chapter names are even more corny than the Pokemon cartoon episode names. And that's saying something.

 

Generally accepted fanon is that Pokemon takes place in a post-apocalyptic version of our world (GoC touches briefly on this fairly often, if you pay attention when you're reading) considering the fact that Kanto and Johto are, more or less, Japan. There's thousands of map comparisons on the 'net, use your own google-fu.

In any case, what I'm getting at is that (again, generally accepted fanon) after a currently disputed disaster of some kind (top contenders are nuclear fallout or biological warfare) all animals currently living in Japan, and some things that weren't anatomical up to that point (Grimer, Muk, Koffing, Wheezing, etc.) mutated. Evolution (the Charles Darwin kind, thanks) happened, and led us to what we know and love as Pokemon.

Although I gotta ask... how shitty was the mutated fish that magikarp ultimately outlived?

Anyway, I feel that, because of the way their society works, it probably worked out to something similar to the Dothraki's practice with their horses, in that it was perceived an insult to the creature if it wasn't eaten upon its death.

 

A few chapters in although the large scale pranks, that every canon character reacts with whimsy acceptance of such pranks, the stereotypical depiction of Anko, the monthly/weekly assassination attempts on Naruto, the civilian council, Naruto being sabotaged during his stay in the academy with false books/training and whatnot and this really extreme stalker Hinata are tropes that were overused to death five years ago but I have to admit, despite all these red flags, I find myself enjoying it so far, if only because I want to see the pokemon interaction.

(But this Hinata thing is really offsetting. In this fic, Naruto should, by all means, file a restriction order against her. The Naruto plushie with whom she talks/cries into and discusses their wedding and how many children they will have is just stupid. Hinata admired Naruto's strength of character for preserving in situations that she could not. She wasn't his creepy fangirl Nr. 1 who actually stalks him and would steal hairs from his chair to masturbate to or whatever it is this Hinata does. And it doesn't seem to be portrayed negatively or in a bashing fashion. Kind of feels as if we should find the superobsessed-stalker charming.)

Also, while the author explains it in his notes, I still say that Sakura doesn't deserve her pokemon.

And Hughes appearing is just weird. If he is just going to be there so that he can have the same end as in the manga, would probably make me drop the story. Too cheap to use a really famous character like that to create an emotional effect.

 

Eh... Its okay.

On a technical note: This guy. Appears to have a love hate relationship with contractions.

Some times he uses it. But there's constant "Do nots" going around that just makes the dialogue feels stilted.

 

On the Naruto/Pokemon story:

I haven't dropped it but admittedly that's because there really is nothing of quality in the entirety of naruto fanfiction that hasn't already been mentioned on this forum.
The major issue with the story is that it's cannon recap. The premise is "what would Naruto do with a pokemon" and that's where it stays.

It seems to be doing something new around the chunin exams, but it's not terribly interesting. Also, I take issue with the choices the author makes for pokemon partners.

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Naruto gets a ralts, a stupid pokemon that evolves into a slightly less stupid pokemon. Meanwhile, Sakura gets an eevee which has 7 evolutions, all cooler than a fuckin Gardevoir. Sasuke gets a goddamn Charmander. Gaara gets a larvitar. Shikamaru gets a Metang. All these support and secondary characters get pretty cool picks that match their personalities while also not being completely useless pokemon.
Meanwhile, Naruto gets a fucking ralts because he's lonely. There's no link up between his excitability and Ralt's calmness, no match between her psychic/grass abilities and Naruto's (still canon) wind nature.
If this story gets to post-timeskip, I fear seeing how lame Gardevoir/Naruto will look compared to Sakura/Espeon (or whatever eeveelution), Shikamaru/Metagross, Sasuke/Charizard, or fucking Kazekage/Tyranitar.

And Naruto is incapable of saying 'and' because he always has to say "an'" like he's fucking Hagrid or some shit. It's so incredibly annoying after a while that I want to put the story down, even though I can read garbage like sealed kunai on slow days.

It's interesting, but I can easily see why it's in almost recommendable.

 

Churchey, I was just running on the assumption that the ralts will evolve into a gallade. Also, gardevoirs don't suck. Kirlia and ralts do, but not gardevoirs.

 

Gardevoirs not only suck big ones, the ralts in the story doesn't match Naruto's canon personality at all, and the author has a pretty canon Naruto. Speaking from a pokemon perspective, Gardevoir isn't fast and doesn't have amazing special attack or anything. It's not horrid, but it wouldn't be in my top 5 for a psychic pokemon choice. Speaking from a Naruto perspective, it's a stupid pokemon that looks stupid and can't begin to compare to most of the starters the other genin received. If Sakura's eevee becomes an espeon, it will literally be a more effective pokemon in every way. The author's reasons for picking the ralts line is so that naruto can have companionship, nothing more, nothing less. Ralts is basically his child/little sister. If he didn't include the disclaimer saying there would be no furry pokemon fucking, I would assume that was where he was going with it instead.

But, in exchange for being shitty pokemon, it also somehow has an amazing capability of shutting down the Kyuubi from taking over Naruto, because it understands emotions. Because some shitty third-rate psychic pokemon is stronger than the most powerful tailed beast.

Also,

Ralts-chan (which sounds ridiculous to me) can't evolve into gallade, as those are male only.

 

Cannon?

XD

Seriously though look at it this way at least he's not saying Believe It every three words(Seriously I've seen it in fanfiction. Oh god why.)

Or the phrase "precious people" every other fucking sentence.

 

Oh come on I used the word canon 4 times in 2 posts and had 1 typo.
And I'd rather Naruto use retarded phrases rather than be incapable of speaking words properly.
And while he doesn't use precious people that often, he does try to make peace with Kin and Orochimaru. Not diplomatically, retardedly and with the power of friendship.

 

On the Naruto Pokemon thing. At least it wasn't as cliche as giving him a Ninetales. Though if you really wanted to give him a Pokemon that matches his disposition, it would be Bidoof all up in that shit. Would you rather read that?

 

Yes. Are you kidding? Bidoof!Naruto would be AMAZING.

 

It would certainly be nutritious and trollicious. I would read it too.

 

I'm pretty okay with the present Pokemon, but that's because most of them are actually ones I've used in teams before. Aggron, Gardevoir/Gallade, Metagross, Charizard, Froslass, and Espeon/Umbreon are all my bro's.

 

I liked the concept, and the way it handled the pokemon being added to the Naruto universe, however like as it has been said before, hated Ralts as Naruto's partner. It felt forced and the two don't really make sense compared to others you know?

 

Am I the only one who hates the mid-chapter author notes? At first I thought they were the just written to tell us the moves, but then the author started explaining the moves itself...

 

Last chapter has been updated. It's a continuous of the WH40k/Naruto from the second to last chapter, and as usual, its a monster of a chapter, at 95k+ words.

It's still not worthy of Library, but hell, decent WH40k/Naruto crossover? Yes, please.

 

No. Just no. Mid chapter author notes are just No. I dont. Thats not good writing.

Put a footnote. Then add your note at the bottom.

I read it. Eh. I think its certainly different than what would be the typical Wh40k cross.

 

Dont Look
Author: gabriel blessing
'No no no no no no'. 'Can't run'. 'Always watches, no eyes'. 'Leave me alone'. 'Don't look... or it takes you'. 'Help me.' Shinji already knew all that. He knew it all too well. But there was never anyone there to help. Misato intends to change that. If she can.
Rated: Fiction M - English - Horror - Misato K. & Shinji I. - Chapters: 6 - Words: 51,016 - Reviews: 335 - Favs: 304 - Follows: 146 - Updated: 10-31-12 - Published: 10-23-12 - Status: Complete - id: 8637502

I suppose this might as well be a good enough first post for a long time lurker, but since I didnt see this on DLP I thought I might as well post this.

Since the Description isnt exactly informative, this fic is a Evangelion/Slenderman crossover that follows the basic pattern's of both settings, i.e depressed broken people and minor eldritch abominations and the clusterfuck that involves such things.

While the writing is rather good and descriptions rather chilling, the formatting was rather annoying with the '*Scene Break*' every half page. The characters and relationships build up rather convincingly considering the setting and I suppose it is generally unnerving enough to keep you looking over your shoulder.