Title: A Dead World
Author: Laluzi
Category: Fallout/Prototype crossover
Words: 26,074
Genre(s): Adventure/Suspense
Rating: Rated: T
Summary: He had been captured; Alex Mercer knew that much was obvious. But if that was the case, why had his captors just left him there without security? How had he ended up in a bunker buried in some kind of giant desert? Where was everyone? And when the hell did bottlecaps become currency?

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8601250/1/A-Dead-World

This has been an ok story so far with potential to be pretty good. The plot hasn't really started moving much yet, but I'm keeping my eye on it. As far as the spelling and grammar go, the author seems to do a pretty good job. As things stand, I'd give it a 3/5 with potential to go higher once the story progresses a bit more. It also helps that I love all things Alex Mercer...as long as the sequel that must not be named is completely disregarded as having never happened.

 

It's sound in both structure and style, but there's not nearly enough to give a rating. As it stands right now (6 chapters and +25k words), I'd say go for it if you're a fan of either video game, but don't expect much since it hasn't really gotten off the ground yet.

I will say this, though:

It seems a bit...boring? Lacking? I'm not really sure what to name the feeling I get from it. I liked Prototype quite a bit, but I couldn't stand anything Fallout related. The post-nuclear-holocaust environment was so damn bland that I was already sick of it after 5 minutes out of the vault. This story's good and I like reading how Alex interacts with this strange new world, but the first 4 chapters left me with the same feeling I got from the Fallout games. Chapters 5 and 6 are better since they introduce some of the human element that's been missing, but there's still this underlying feeling of graygraygray that I can't stand.

 

The Eyes Have It
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8661803/1/The-Eyes-Have-It

It's a fun, Sakura centric story where the basic premise is that she's developing a doujutsu and how that affects her life starting from before graduation. Nothing horribly overpowered or mary sue thankfully, it's a fairly solid light hearted fic. The choice of character might put some people off, hence why I'm putting it up here.

 

I'm surprised at how much I'm enjoying this. I really like the dynamic between Sakura and her team. The story as a whole has this easy-going feel to it so far, I'm on chapter twelve, that makes it perfect as a time waster.

 

It's completed too, which was a surprise and an annoyance when I finally got to the end.

Fluffy, light hearted and nice. I give it a definite 4/5.

 

I too would give it a 4/5. Solid writing, consistent tone, good stopping place.

 

Agreed. Put it up for review, it's good enough.

 

I was digging through pokemon fics about actual pokemon and stumbled upon this and kinda liked it. I've always been interested in the lore of ghost-types and this one hits the spot. It could be way better and much longer with even a smidgen of detail thrown in here and there, but it hits the spot, I find. Overall I'd give it a 3/5

A Shadow of Your Former Self Author: The Never Minder PM ...You just wanted someone to take care of you. Reborn fic.
Rated: Fiction T - English - Horror/Supernatural - Gastly/Ghos & Gengar/Gangar - Words: 2,593 - Reviews: 18 - Favs: 25 - Follows: 3 - Published: 01-11-11 - Status: Complete - id: 6646357

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6646357/1

 

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8334866/1/
I found this to be fairly entertaining. It's a cross over between fairy tale and fate/stay night, where Shirou is transported to Earthland while on the brink of death. Though it is by no means perfect, it kept me interested and was a good time waster. 3/5

 

I'm not saying this with nearly as much vitriol as it deserves:

Please link to the first chapter. Not the last.

I'll give it a read and maybe comment on it later.

 

My bad. Didn't even realize until you mentioned it.

 

It's not a big deal, but do keep it in mind.

Anyway, I sat down and read it. My first thought was that I'd read Hero's Tail before, something along the lines of "Oh, not this shit again!" I could have sworn I had, but I was wrong.

Hero's Tail is the story of Shirou Emiya dying and waking up in Earthland's Spirit Realm (you know, the place where Leo, Aries, etc. live). Apparently due to a portal and one of the Spirit King's old friends.

I think we all know who to blame.

So Shirou's introduction to Earthland is abrupt, and upon arrival he meets Natsu and Lucy, helps them out, then goes on his merry way. Pretty standard fare so far.

But then he... meets Team Shadow Gear? This is new. They never seem to get the spotlight. Okay.

For the sake of not spoiling anything, I won't go any further with that. Suffice to say that this story bounces between two distinct modes:

The first is where Shirou simply takes the place of some characters during special events (ie. canon missions, memorable moments). This is more on the 'shoehorn' side of things, where he's included just because he can be.

The other mode involves Shirou in refreshingly original scenes. For example, his character interactions aren't reenactments out of canon, he goes on original missions...things like that.

And then in the most recent chapter (#11), the author decides to kick canon's teeth in. My first thought during that: "No way, I can't believe the author did that!"

Now, Hero's Tail is by no means 'great'. It's a good story that could use a fair bit of polish in a fair number of areas, but it is a good story. If I had to pick out the biggest, most glaring issue, I'd say 'the author's propensity to tell (at length) and then show'. During Shirou's fights, the author goes into painstakingly detailed descriptions of his Noble Phantasms and all their powers and histories, and then proceeds to write an action scene in which he uses them and all their powers. It's only happened a handfull of times so far, but it's annoyingly repetitive, and Shirou's got a lot of them to use.

Maybe it's an effort to make it easier for less Nasuverse educated people to understand what's going on, but to me it's just annoying.


TL;DR
So as it stands, it falls somewhere between 2/5 - 3.5/5. It's a good read, but not library worth. It fits in quite well in this thread.

EDIT: Okay, my bad. I got the thing about him being betrayed wrong because I read another story immediately after where he is in fact betrayed, and got their beginnings confused in my head. Again, sorry.

 

I read the first chapter, but I got the feel that you need to be familiar with Fairy Tale to really appreciate it. Would that be correct?

 

As with any crossover, it is easier to understand what's happening if you are familiar with both series, but I have only the most basic knowledge of Fairy Tale and I was entertained.

 

http://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/star-wars-broken-empire-story-thread.221585/

Star Wars: Broken Empire

It's a story about how one competent Imperial manage to crave out a small empire amid the chaos after the Imperial defeat at Endor.

There are some structural issues with the story and the writing, but it is still a fairly enjoyable story.

 

Right I put this up here a couple of months back, but its finished now so I figured it was worth bringing up again.

The Cost of Living

So it's one of those Akatsuki trained Naruto stories that pop up from time to time. The diference is this one is complete. It is fairly well written, enough that it is worth being put in here, and is easy enough to read.

As far as the story it does have some weak points, although no more than any of the other half decent, non DLP/ similar site esk stories tend to have. My main issue with this is actually that it feels like the author lost interest in it towards the end. It doesn't retract from the story too much and there is enough there to keep someone occupied for a while, but coming away from it the story is at it's best during the middle.

Still it gets points for having a rather gritty ninja world and one where no one thinks that a Jesus message is going to solve any of the problems their society has.

I'd give it a 3.5 rounding up to a 4. It isn't the best thing out there, but it is something I have enjoyed and it's head and shoulders above the slash and NaruHina shipping fics that dominate the fandom currently.

 

Ah the ol' Villagers call him a demon to his face cliche.

Just for that I'm sticking with a 3.5



Okay. I know you gotta get him out of the village some how but goddamn its not even at the end of the first chapter its literally like 4 real paragraphs in. I say real because with out those line breaks it rapidly becomes a wall of text.


Honestly I'd just skip the first chapter and go straight for second.


Edit: I take it back. My interests rapidly fell through at the end of the second chapter.

 

Yeah like I said it has it's weak spots and a lot of it upon reflection possibly isn't anywhere near the quality of the better stuff that's coming out these days. Despite that I found it worth reading just because there isn't any assassination attempts or a lot of the other dumbassery that dominates most Naruto stories.

The high point is from about 14 to 17 or so. after that it losses a lot of what made it stand out for me. Still it managed to avoid making Naruto come across as too god like which made a nice change. Alternatively I've reached the point where anything that has half decent grammar and doesn't feature Naruto taking it up the stink rates much higher than it actually is.

 

This is great military SF, I enjoyed it. You should put it up for review in my opinion!

4/5

 

The Gangsta Hobbit » by AuraWarrior reviews Thanks to the magic of Gizoogle, read The Hobbit like you have never read it before!Rated: M - English - Adventure/Fantasy - Chapters: 8 - Words: 63,208 - Reviews: 4 - Favs: 3 - Follows: 3 - Updated: 1-4-13 - Published: 12-1-12 - Bilbo B. & Gandalf

I found this butchery of Tolkiens work today, and it´s good for a cheap laugh. A good fitt for this thread, I would say.