Altered Histories by Acaykath
hey say that history is written by the victor. Harry finds that this is not the case, history is actually written by the manipulative old coot behind the victor, and this Harry is not going to let himself be stepped all over, unless of course Luna tells him to.
Harry Potter - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Humor - Size: 27/56,210 - Reviews: 160 - Published: 13/2/2013 - Updated: 2 days ago (daily) - Harry P. & Luna L.

A recent story I've noticed some time ago but the summary has put me off from reading it. I gave it a try and found that I liked it. Humorous adventures slightly reminiscent to Rorschach's "Make A Wish", though less heavy on the luck factor. Light and entertaining read. There's the beaten to death Independent!Harry, Evil!Dumbledore and fraudulent friends trope. Harry becomes powerful fairly quickly and with no apparent difficulty. Dumbledore is randomly evil and uncharacteristically non-persevering in his goals. Also features friendly enough Goblins, and an Anybook written by Merlin as an unlimited and conveniently available source of information. Luna's character and her relationship with Harry is slightly odd. All said and done, give it a go at your own risk.

Oh, I just re-read the introductory notes and found out the author explicitly states that he were inspired by Rorschach's Blot's story.

 

I'm sorry, that looks absolutely fucking awful in every way.

I mean even as a time waster, really?

 

Well, I were pretty frank about its downsides, weren't I? Unfortunately I'm not good at giving out praise, but I did enjoy reading it and will be following it for updates.

 

Literally the first word of the summary is a typo.

 

^There is starting with wrong foot and there is tripping over your own feet at your first step during the first moon landing right?

 

Urgh, Altered Histories. Make a Wish was great partly because Harry and everyone he met were talking past each other while Harry didn't think he was doing that much and so you had the three viewpoints of Harry, everyone around and the reader. But this is just Harry being uberpowerful just for the sake of it while bystanders wank over him.

Does noone understand dramatic irony anymore?

 

Title: Give It Your Best Shot.

Author: Zenathea.

Well, a fresh attempt at a dimensional travel story.Features a darker war against Voldemort, a powerful adult Harry and quite a few original ideas. The ending chapters were of promise. Give it a try once.

Link: Here

 

Well the grammar is okey, but the story.... meh. Also it's incredible slow - it's around 100k words and nothing happened yet.

 

Indeed it is dreadfully slow. However, things speed on once the twin souls in a body issue is resolved and Harry starts being a bad-ass he was in the future and the original dimension.

And Potters don't have a 'Lordship' or are anything special. Their only famous ancestors are the Peverells and their legacy plays a huge role in the ending chapters of the WIP.

I ran across the story and the dynamics between Harry and James are very well done. To the point of epicness. :awesome

 

I came across this story recently and Google failed to show it among the stories discussed on the site. I think it's Almost Recommended (only 20k words so far), but with potential for more, despite the slightly silly premise:

Labyrinth Author: Kroontjespen
The mind of a prodigy is a scary thing. Hermione Granger's however is downright terrifying. AU. Slytherin!Hermione, Slytherin!Harry
Rated: Fiction T - English - Hermione G. & Harry P. - Chapters: 8 - Words: 20,640 - Reviews: 157 - Favs: 321 - Follows: 547 - Updated: 02-26-13 - Published: 07-30-12 - id: 8375078

It's of the "Hermione meets Harry prior to Hogwarts" ilk. It's pretty much an AU treatment of Hermione where events from her childhood turn her into a ruthless, driven person obsessed with being at the top of the food chain (pretty much a female Tom Riddle in this regard). Though she's a fridge-horror version of her canon self, she's written interestingly here. Harry is given a somewhat less AU treatment. The story has technically adept writing and is executed competently so far, with originality (despite a tired story premise) and a muted humor running throughout, a sense of its not taking itself all that seriously, that I find enjoyable and refreshing.

On the downside, it's slow to update, at only 20k words in 9 months. It's the author's first story (under this pseudonym, at any rate) and one can spot some rookie mistakes. Also, Dumbledore is comically bad, which detracts from the story a bit.

Presently, it's hovering in the 3/5 to 4/5 range, probably closer to the former for me.

Edit: Nice catch, Imariel. (It's been awhile since I've made that stupid mistake.) Fixed.

 

Pers, link is to chapter 8. Just so anyone don't go spoiling it for themselves if they don't want it.

Edited spoiler after a readthrough.

Spoiler

Whilst it might be Almost Recommendable material, I disagree that it might have potential for anything further. You point out that Dumbledores characterization is horrible, which is correct, but none of the others are portrayed with any kind of depth either.

You have annoying cliché thoughts from all of the adults in the story, and the children form a 'Slytherin first year council'. One could live with the predictability from the elders if you'd get something more out of their character. Basically and for lack of a better term the whole story seems flat, Pers mentions that the story is technically sound and there are some errors here and there but it's not just up to the quality I'd expect from a story that'd be entering For Review.

The characterization of Harry and Hermione is supposedly a main point in the story, and there you have 11 year olds plotting to take over the world and manipulating their environment from an even younger age.

I can't really specify why I don't like the story further than this. It's flat, it doesn't engage me emotionally and the people in it are moronic or excessively portrayed in one direction.

 

Fair enough. My sense upon reading was that this aspect you point out was a bit tongue-in-cheek, but perhaps I'm reading more into the text than I should.

My "potential for more" remark was contingent on something actually happening in the story (we're still in the setup phases) that sends it in an interesting direction. It's not close to being Library-worthy yet, though.

 

Yes, I can see it being intended as such aswell, I merely think that the author lacks the skill to pull it off.

 

The premise of Labyrinth could be interesting. Unfortunately, it's filled with terrible cliches and horrible characters.

Harry and Hermione act closer to 50 than 11. Though if they were supposed to be 50, it still wouldn't be good. They're super intelligent and notice everything. Hermione instantly catches on to there being something wrong with Dumbledore when his eyes flash with insane anger when Harry gets sorted into Slytherin. Dumbledore is so badly characterized it's ridiculous. If you replaced his name with Voldemort, it'd still be bad, but it wouldn't be as out of place as it is now.

Some authors have difficulty with decent characterization, but rarely do I see a story like this, where nearly every single character is badly written.

 

I enjoy the story, in that guilty-pleasure sort of way. It clearly doesn't take itself seriously, and that as much as anything else made it an entertaining read. I doubt it will ever be anything more than an average sort of guilty pleasure though.

 

I would probably love something along the lines of Labyrinth by a talented author, but unfortunately Kroontjespen is not that author.

 

Already mentioned by klackerz a couple of years ago. There isn't another mention wich I could find.

Title: Harry Potter and the Elemental's Power
Status: In progress
Chapters: 50
Words: 334,658
Pairing: HP/OC

Summary: A story about Harry in Slytherin house wielding the elder wand and the powers of an elemental. Features annoying Weasley's, an OFC, a flawed but good Dumbledore, an indifferent Snape and lots and lots of twists. Read and review.

My summary: The story starts with an 11 years old Harry. He has a conflictive personality and is always confronting other people. From the start, as the original summary says, he wields the Elder Wand. It chose him at Ollivander’s. The OC appears from the start as well, she’s interesting enough I’ll tell you that.
It begins being canon rehearsal with some changes here and there, but by 3rd year it really changes a lot. We have a dimension-travel in said year adding some training to prepare the couple for war. The characterizations of the other characters are standard, if not cliché, but they really add to the story. The author tried a personality twist with Lord Voldemort, I know I read it in other fic but I don’t remember where. It’s bland but it has a plot behind it. The author reached 5th year in the last updates and I don’t see an ending near, so he may write a lot more.

There are plot holes and common structural errors, but I liked it. Perhaps because is one of the few straight Slytherin!Harry in all fanfiction. What I think commendable is the author’s effort to make an epic story; he still makes me want to read the updates. The downside, he’s not skilled enough and there’re a lot of WTF moments.
Harry here is powerful, skilled and ruthless. Characteristics I enjoy. So I recommend it. Definitely not Library material, but it serves to waste some hours.

 

I liked it as a nice screwball comedy until they meet the Flamels as the story spins somehow into the Wheels Of Time concept which never ever worked in HP. Afterwards it gets really convoluted.
His Firefly crossover Stepping-Into-The-Sky is the more interesting story concept imho.

 

I stopped this story when it turned into the whole nuclear war clusterfuck. It was alright before that and I still can't see an end to the war.

I also didn't like the destruction of Voldemort's personality.:fire

 

Story is okay. I gave up on it once they stopped doing all the hogwarts stuff. Plus OC's are always freaking lame.