It was dumb. Voldermort had a baby with Harry.

It is dumb.

 

Title: Baby Bella
Author: Livingintheclouds
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6396016/1/Baby-Bella
Summary: What if Bellatrix Lestrange had run through a different door? Through to the room with the Bell Jar? What if she became a child? How would Harry deal with being the guardian of his Godfather's three-year-old murderer?

I don't know what to think about this fic, on one hand I found it to be hilarious when they tried three year old Bellatrix's POV, but on the other hand, I found it to be too silly and too bland, added with the fact that the update rate is atrocious: The author updates once every year. Mind you the story itself is funny, but not good quality. I think the idea itself is good and unique and the humor is good, but to me that humor is all it has going for it.

 

This is kind of stupid. It is kind of a crack fic, but I didn't find it that funny. The stated author is also wrong, Sereven did not write this. Here is a quote from the story: "After taking a moment to tame her shrieks of laughter, Luna responded, "Well, I think Bella was trying to be sneaky and et some more candy. It actually worked, but I think the Nargles warned Ronald in some way, because he looked up from his Quidditch book and got mad at her, with her face so covered in candy." " Nothing interesting seems to happen here.

 

Title: Envenomed
Author: Master Procrastinator
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9127544/1/Envenomed
Summary: Cast through the Veil in the moment of victory and into another world, Harry is immediately set upon by some sparkly abomination that apparently thinks he looks rather tasty. Well, he never did have the best of luck. Vampire!Harry. Still-A-Wizard!Harry. Pairing (if any) undecided. No Slash. Unbeta'd.

Never thought to post this, but - Twilight crossover without slash (!), written by a guy(!) who dislikes Twilight (but finds setting itself promising) and needs practice writing on something he doesn't give a damn about (in his words). 3 chapters so far.

 

Sorry I fixed it.

 

The writing is pretty good, I'll give you that, but magical reserves? Wolves being able to headbutt spells aside without any effort? Vampirism leading to overcharged spells? His wand breaking within the third chapter because he put too much energy into it?

I liked it up until the end of chapter three, at which point I began to get a bad feeling, something that still hasn't gone away.

 

Magical reserves - granted. Wolves - thought he simply dodged spells? Twilight vampirism canonically increases exponentially all supernatural abilities. And I thought wand cracked because he gripped it to tightly.

 

that's why you need lubrication.

 

Yeah, I misread the part where it says: "a dip of the head sent the binding spell careening off to the side" As the Wolf had Literally hit the spell with its face and knocked it away. The wand however could seemingly go both ways, hopefully that'll be cleared up in the next chapter.

 

I read it, and was pleasantly surprised.
I mean, sure it doesent have anything groundbreaking in there, but there is none of the stuff that I hate in a fanfic.

Its a bit slow moving and I found myself skimming over some parts, but on the whole its nicely written. The main thing I like is, that the characters dont give off the vibe of being stupid, which quite a lot of ff.net stories usually do. There is no bashing, and so far everything indicates to it only improving plot wise.

If it was just me, I would say its Library worthy, but even if some might not like it, I`m sure it would be at least worth a read.

 

^^

"Give it your best shot" is not worthy of the DLP library, because the technical writing is annoyingly weak at times (chapter six!) and the pace is much too lame. The whole "Lord Peverell" arc is too convoluted and has the added problem of being a variation of the "Lord Potter" cliche. It's a lazy way to give Harry more "importance" using formal titles never really established in canon.

Also: Lily Potter comes of as weak minded housewife. BS!

2.5/5 rounded up to 3/5 for some interesting ideas and the description of Harry's very dark universe of origin.

 

It's an interesting take on time/dimension travel that I haven't seen before.

But the author really has an awkward way of writing in some spots. For instance, he uses "the man" about thirty times nearly every chapter. Chapter one has 17 uses, chapters 2-4 have 30+ each. Chapters 5-8 are better, but then chapter 9 uses it 30 times again. It's something I didn't notice until I came across reaaaally obnoxious paragraphs like

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He loved and sympathized with his old mentor, but at the same time, he hated the man for what the man had put him through and the secrets the man had kept from him all in the name of 'The Greater Good', or whatever the hell the man's philosophy had been, as well as for what the man had had planned for him.

I really do like the characterization of this Harry though. It's a little over the top with the titles

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Grey Lord and Porteur Demort or w/e

but he really does work as that in-between. He isn't just a cop playing by his own rules and doing whatever it takes to get the job done, which is what a lot of these !greyharry stories turn into. I think that this characterization is most prevalent in chapter 9 where

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Harry is torn between wanting to die and still having his saving people complex. Still a good guy, but jaded enough to actually consider abandoning the retard harry

I think that this is one of the better stories to come through almost recommended for awhile. I would put it at 4/5 if it wasn't for the iffy technical quality of the writing. 3/5.

 

Title: Look! Up In The Sky!
Author: Belcris
Pairing: Harry/Kara
Rating: M (Don't know why, no bad language and only suggestions at sexual situations)
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9134569/1/Look-Up-In-The-Sky
Story Summary: On a world facing inevitable death, a group of heroes makes the ultimate sacrifice to save the life of a child. That sacrifice triggers a change in the multiverse that no one could have ever expected and now Harry Potter will become the hero the world needs. With his friends at his side, Justice will prevail! Harry/Kara. AU. Based on the DC Crisis on Infinite Earths series.


A little different twist on the HP/JL crossover. All in HP universe.

Pros: This author has an unusual habit of completing his stories.
He is not just rehashing the books, time skip from when he is 7 to 14 over the first 4 chapters (yes, he has a thing for the TWT.)

Cosn: A few spelling and grammar errors here and there
HP with also having Superman's can go scarily into the super-duper-hary if not done right.

I'm sure you guys will find more of both it you read it.

 

The characterisations and dialogue are terrible. The story is excessively melodramatic. Character bashing. The author's never broken a bone in their life, doesn't drink, and is scared of alcohol.

Why didn't the heroes jump aboard the shuttle and live? How is one girl child supposed to not go mad from loneliness, or ever repopulate anything? Immaculate conception?

I don't know whether Aunt Marge was incredibly naive, or the author is.

I wanted to at least get up to the Kara scenes to see how the author wrote her, but I didn't finish the first chapter. 1/5

 

I feel like destroying the entire DC universe as a Deus Ex to start a story happened somewhere else too, and it annoyed there too. Less, because it wasn't quite as fucking stupid, but still.

I had a passing thought that Kara could have had some kind of creepy passive mind control power to explain all the weirdass behavior, but whatever it was would have to be strong enough to fry Monitor's brain too, so that's sadly unlikely.

 

"Give it your best shot" certainly has some novel ideas and had an oddly captivating feel for me. Yet the writing style does get awkward at times (there are also some easily avoidable typos and language issues). The author would benefit hugely from a good Beta or some proper reviews from DLP.

It is tempting to say that the story could be much better without all the Lord Porteur and Lord Peverell nonsense, but then again the author seems to be intending to build the story around that. Plus, I can't see her pulling off a 14-year old Political!Harry without it looking decidedly cheesy.

3/5. The story does lie more towards the "Almost Recommendable" end of the spectrum, but I don't think this will have a place in the library.

 

The Last Son of Tomorrow, by Ryuugi, starts with the DC Universe being destroyed.

 

The Last Son of Tomorrow is a good read.

 

I actually enjoyed this fic, and felt it was very well done. There are few nitpicks I have with this fic, most of which is that the author hasn't updated in a while, at least not on Fanfiction.net.

 

Rebuilding Nobility: The House of Potter
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9251056/1/Rebuilding-Nobility-The-House-of-Potter
Author: ThrashtillDeath
In the Summer following his second year, the escape of the dangerous Sirius Black, combined a very unexpected visitor to Harry's room in Privet Drive set off a chain of events that may reshape the wizarding world as we know it. Discovering the Potter family's glorious past and downfall, Harry Potter sets out to rebuild his family name to it's past glories and build higher still...
Rated: Fiction T - English - Adventure - Harry P. - Chapters: 2 - Words: 17,762 - Reviews: 23 - Favs: 85 - Follows: 126 - Updated: 05-18-13 - Published: 04-30-13 - id: 9251056

I was very surprised at the quality of this fic. While it has a few grammatical errors, the plot is refreshingly original. It uses a few common plot devices and turns them into something different. Harry is determined to become the greatest wizard he can become when he learns about his family's beginnings and the respect they once had. Dumbledore is well-written and is a supportive mentor for Harry.

If this continues (and the author gets a beta-reader), I believe this could make it into the library.

4/5