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Discussion in 'Fanfic Discussion' started by Dark Minion, Feb 9, 2013.

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  1. thisperson

    thisperson Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    If you can stomach a few cliches and the author's raging hard on for the Twi'leks then this is a decent timewaster about Harry Potter landing in the Star Wars universe.

    While the author is way too focused on the H/Multi I figure we'll still learn of what interesting ripples Harry makes to events. And now that they are finally off world it's moving at a faster rate.
     
  2. Odran

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    Yeah, nah, it could be the best HP/SW crossover fic to exist (and it very well isn't since we already have "The Havoc Side of the Force") and I still wouldn't touch it.

    You say that the author is too focused on that shit, which would significantly take away any enjoyment I might otherwise gain. Lemme guess though. Harry is either thrown into the SW universe shortly before Order 66 is issued or just when the Clone Wars start. Oh and he's got a portable trunk-library, along with a time-turner and a pet Phoenix or his animagus form is a Phoenix. He probably starts teaching magic to his (future) harem and that's how they all end up with him, right?
     
  3. Republic

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    I will tentatively say that while I share your hatred of (orotagonist)/harem, I have seen stories that manage to sideline the harem aspect or actually make a believable effort of it.

    My point is, don't write off stories right away because of it. Give them a chance. Chances are they'll suck, but maybe they won't.

    No idea about this fic though.
     
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  4. thisperson

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    I didn't even catch the magic taught as pushing his harem agenda forward. but lulz. yes. how did you know?
     
  5. Odran

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    I didn't. I just thought of the most plausible thing for them to bond over. It was either Harry learning the Force or them magic, and since magic beats Force 9/10... you get the gist. Was I right about any of the silly shit I listed? The trunk, time-turner and a handy Phoenix to help him? I bet he's going to market that as the new Bacta eventually for his allies and friends.

    Yes, but apparently the author is too aggressive in forming the harem (even thisperson implies as much) as soon as he can. I just can't stand that kind of thing, and even less when it's one of the sub-plots of the fic or the driving force for the main one.

    I'd rather not give them a chance. Granted, I have plenty of time to waste, but by everything that is dear, I won't spend that time on reading fics with harem pairings.

    I got enough of that shit in Wheel of Time which I got gifted for some past birthday (nearly the whole series at that point, but not all of it) and that permanently soured me away from such matters. Granted, there's other shit in WoT which soured much worse than the multiple partner relationship the main character had going on.

    Best to err on the side of caution.
     
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  6. Photon

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    There is about one million of stories in HP fandom. Extremely strict selection is necessary.
     
  7. BadManners

    BadManners DA Member DLP Supporter

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    Last Second Savior was posted earlier ITT, it was shit then and it's shit now.
    Search the fic before posting next time.
     
  8. Aries the Dog

    Aries the Dog First Year DLP Supporter

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    Bullshit, I read fics sometimes bcause my dick is about to fall off from boredom, like yesterday. I read this entire piece of shit, and all it did in the end was piss me off. My bad, it was actually kinda decent, I'll actually post the link before I start on it.

    Bottle-Specs

    First off let me say this is basically a self-insert into the Mauraders era, I actually find this stuff intresting, despite DLP's aversion to non-Harry centric fics. But, generally, I like to read self-insert romance pieces to get a feel for writing female believable POVs. It reminded me strongly of that arguably decent Naruto self-insert as Shikamaru's sister. Shiz, let me find it... holy shit, 339k word-count, 4k+reviews now Dreaming of Sunshine

    So it went up early Jan and its up to 85k now, wow updated twice since I read it. Anyway, it follows Grfndr Effie Savage and Marlene McKinnon, they're in the year before the Marauders. Her main love intrest is Sirius and the opening portion of the story is pretty humorous. For me at least, the OC Effie Savage I found really relatable because of my highschool experience, and she kind of reminds me of myself and how I sometimes handle sitiuations. But, when i got to more recent chapters there was a bunch of troll chapter names, considering there was a development in the story. Also, since the chapters are pretty short it was particularly frustrating.

    Especially because there was a development within the story that easily pissed off at least half her reader-base. I'm more okay with the direction the story is in now, but for a while they're was misleading chapter names while she was dating and being manipulated slightly by Regulus, the other male lead like: "I was with your brother! Why are you so obssessed with me? It's been going on for months" with absolutely no confrontation.

    The drama is kinda forced but it's kinda expected, these past two chapters(in the past day since i read, latest released 2hr ago) the author has managed to masterfully make me angry as fuck, then grudgingly happy about the direction the story is headed in, but holy shit, it's like real life. Anyway big YMMV warning, if you cant handle female POVs or Marauder era you've been warned. Also if this story remains cannon complaint like it has so far it's probably going to end incredibly sad end. Apparently the epilogue is already 4x normal chapter length and its 36 out of roughly 50 chapters in.
     
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  9. thisperson

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    This story features an extremely fast pace with the author basically doing anything they want to even the playing field between Harry Potter and the Empire. It's kind of unbelievable how much Harry is able to do, but I found it entertaining. Some of you may as well. Not too terribly written.

    This one shows more promise in my opinion. The concept is that the destruction of the death star was so powerful, the explosion opened a rift in time/space and sent Palpatine's force presence to the park at Privet Drive. Once there he searches for the most powerful force user to merge with and dun dun dun, it's Harry. The story takes off from there and is worth a read.

    This one is more on the terrible side and features unbelievable romance that is too fast paced. Read with caution.
     
  10. Spyder

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    I stumbled across these two earlier today, both by zArkham. The oneshot has a interesting underlying premise, and the resolution is memorable. Somebody, somewhere recommended the second - its off to an interesting start. Hopefully it keeps heading in that direction. Make what you will of them.

    Title: Harry Potter and the Price of Victory
    Author: zArkham
    Rating: M
    Summary: ONESHOT. The real world has consequences. The real world does not have a Disney ending. Real horrors live on after the quest is completed, the villain defeated and one has ridden off into the sunset. With these horrors comes nightmares and paranoia which can lead to the unthinkable. The Wizarding world has a habit of ignoring problems. This habit leads to tragedy.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10200326/1/Harry-Potter-and-the-Price-of-Victory

    Title: Harry Potter and Hogwarts U
    Author: zArkham
    Rating: M
    Summary: What if Hogwarts had to wait to start till student's were 18 when their magical cores matured? With magicals going to the Saint Schools for primary/secondary, they have a big lead on the Muggleborn in everything but magic. Follow Harry as he leaves Stonewall behind to enter into Magic where the rules seems stacked against the Muggleborn/raised. AU with alternative sortings. Harry/?
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10186996/1/Harry-Potter-and-Hogwarts-U
     
  11. The Iron Rose

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    Everytime I see Stonewall in relationship to... anything really I can't help but think of something radically different.
     
  12. Absolutista

    Absolutista Fifth Year

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    stonewall celebration?
     
  13. Photon

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    Weasley bashing really should be mentioned in description of this story.
     
  14. Jeram

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    Agreed, made the whole thing stupid, especially with the veela nonsense.
     
  15. thisperson

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    I saw it was an angst fest and avoided it all together.

    Hogwarts U entertained for a bit though, especially Justin.
     
  16. Skeletaure

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    To return to a topic that has already been beaten to death: Jesus Christ The Legacy is frustrating.

    I think the main reason why it's so frustrating is that you can see the potential there. The author updates regularly with substantial chapters and the writing is technically sound. Further, the author seems to understand the principle of moderation and avoids absurdity or excess in characterisation or plot.

    But at the same time, the author seems completely unable to grow as a writer. Or advance the story. They're still making the same mistakes as they were in chapter one, endlessly retreading the same topics with minor variations from different points of view for thousands upon thousands of words.

    The last 7 or so chapters, in tens of thousands of words, we have essentially achieved this: Harry, Ron, Hermione and Daphne are in Grimmauld place. They're doing not much other than a nebulous "preparing". They have trust issues with Daphne. It has been recognised that those trust issues should be resolved, but still no one trusts each other.

    THAT'S IT.

    The author is chronically unable to move with any kind of decisiveness. A better author could have covered all of that in a single chapter by forcing confrontation between people and making it resolve. Instead we just have endless chapters of conversations that go nowhere and people brooding.

    Take this chapter. The main sticking point seems to be that Daphne can't place trust in Harry because she thinks he is incompetent compared to Voldemort and can't win. The direction the author should take is obvious: make Harry take decisive action there and then to resolve the issue. Either obliviate Daphne so trust is no longer an issue, or have him demonstrate his competence by decimating the over-confident Daphne in a mock duel with his hands tied behind his back.

    Instead the author makes Harry dither and puts off the resolution for another chapter. Again.

    It's exactly the same as the early part of the fic, where we had endless retreading of marriage contract mechanics. And it's so frustrating because we had a brief glimpse of action with Voldemort's attack on Harry's wedding, and it was actually really good.

    And that's not even mentioning the retarded mental mechanics the author is using with Harry's absorption of Voldemort's knowledge. They've done this typical thing where Harry understands the theory but not the practice. BUT HE ALSO HAS ALL THE MEMORIES OF PRACTICING AS IF THEY WERE HIS OWN MEMORIES. It just artificially slows down the fic even further when slowing down is the last thing the fic needs.
     
  17. Baradine

    Baradine Seventh Year

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    Yeah... the pacing isn't particularly good.

    I still personally enjoy it however, as I like the interactions that happen, even if those interactions mean fuck all.
     
  18. Odran

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    So do you think it's going to take another 40-50 chapters before the author gets halfway done with the fic?
     
  19. Gengar

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    With the arc, maybe.
     
  20. Odran

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    We're being terrible, though honest, now.

    I just don't get it why he likes to drag out things so much.
     
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