Title: Miles to Go Before I Sleep
Author: Rannaro
Rating: Fiction T
Genre: Drama/Alternate History
Chapters: 14
Words: 161,919
Updated: May 10,2012
Published: May 6, 2012
Status: Complete
Library Category: Alternate Universe
Pairings: Snape/OC
Summary:This story is AU. What would have happened if Voldemort had understood that defeat, not death, conferred mastery of the Elder Wand and did not kill Snape? And what of all the stray Death Eaters that JKR forgot to mention? Like Bella Lestrange's husband?

Link:https://www.fanfiction.net/s/8090116/1/Miles-to-Go-Before-I-Sleep
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The Alternate Universe "Sequel" I mentioned. Fairly decent.

 

So harry dies, or what?

 

For start, this story has pairing including OC and Snape. Why you consider this readable?

 

This is why, also against a potter law

 

I can't handle this. The first chapter alone is actually making me crack up... Snape is completely OOC, and while that usually wouldn't be a problem with me, the author dresses the events up as being "What if something different happened?" not "What if something different happened, and a ton of other stuff was different from before hand."

For one thing, Snape is acting nice. Not completely - the writer is attempting to keep Snape, Snape... but it isn't working.

It's the way he speaks, and the attitude he has. The writer is treating Snape as some misunderstood hero, who the whole time has been working in the self interest of others, not himself. He's also an idiot. I'd like to pull a passage straight out of the text...

Let's ignore the fact that Hagrid (the man who is horrible at keeping secrets) is one of the few people who knows that Snape is still on Dumbledore's side, and just focus on the fact that Snape had expected Mcgonagall to be told the full story by Hagrid, and never realized that she didn't know. Also, this seems to also ignores the fact that Hagrid was not, in fact, at Hogwarts for a large portion of the year, as he was on the run for hosting a "Support Harry Potter Party".

The dialogue feels forced, almost every character (specifically Snape and Harry) is OOC...

Maybe I'm being a bit harsh, but that'd be a 1.5/5, rounded up to a 2/5, only because the grammar and spelling were fine, and the writing itself, while not great, was decent enough.

 

Ι enjoyed the first few chapters of this story. Snape is not really Snape though, so what rating can I give this?

 

It's fanfiction. Who gives a fuck if the characters are the characters? Nobody throws their toys out of the pram when Joe turns Harry into an overpowered, time-cavorting, groundhog day living, suit wearing, whiskey drinking motherfucking badass, but make Snape appear even slightly different from canon and suddenly you've taken a massive dump in the Pope's stupid hat.

Potter Law? Eh. They're more what you'd call guidelines.

 

When I say that Snape is not really Snape I mean that Snape sometimes talks like he's from the 'hood, others like he's a teenage girl, and he engaged in a pillow fight that one time.

All funny things, I admit, but not positive things when one considers ratings.

 

I did enjoy it but it is not as good as "A Difference in the Family". It feels a little bit forced especially near the end as it works too hard to create a happy ending. I just can't really believe the Clearwater storyline and sometimes we can see the authors personality coming through. This can make Snape and the whole story seem snobbish about Muggle things and how everything needs reform and the like. It just does not seem to fit the world. Again it shows similar problems with "ADITF" regarding Americanisms and here they are even more blatant.

It is though well written and enjoyable especially when read with "ADITF". I think it just scrapes into being library worthy and I will give it a 4.

 

Meh true about the Muggle stuff. However, pen and paper IS blatantly superior. I understand having quills was basically flavor though.

 

If you get an auto-inking quill its pretty much a pen. The charmwork probably isn't that hard either. They don't exist in canon, but are too reasonable for me to accept the lack of existence.

 

Fred and George sell self-inking quills in HBP.

 

Also, spell checking and self-correcting quills are canon to.

 

Huh, then maybe quills are just, for some reason, easier to charm then pens, so people prefer them.

 

Or they had quills for hundreds of years and started charming them before muggle pens were invented. Plus a nice quill has much more style then a random bic pen, so there is realy no reason to change now. Well except for the poor muggleborn students who have to learn to write anew, because quills are oh so different.

 

Yeah, I'm not convinced. It really does seem like pure stubbornness. Ballpoint pens require basically no penmanship, and there should be no reason why charms wouldn't work on them, or couldn't be invented. But this is getting off-topic...