Hahaha, ninja violence. ^_^

 

Kekekeke. Xenon.

Now, back to this story here... sounds interesting, though everyone is saying a Mary Sue is in it, that is probably Orochimaru's daughter... that better not be true. I need something to read.

I've been wanting to read a good Mentor!Sandaime for ages now. I was close to writing one myself.

 

Actually, I found nothing wrong with this. The author has created a clan, a clan which Orochimaru has apparently come from. They are related but it hasnt said she is his daughter. Not yet, anyway. Hopefully never. I can go with this so far.

Mary Sue's are supposed to be perfect, hm? Well, making her shit at Ninjutsu was a way to make her seem more real, I think. The author is trying to give her weakness, which Mary Sue's generally dont have. They are perfect. We cant really judge until the character gets more 'screen' time.

I think the author also said something about the character actually helping the plot, which Mary Sue's definitely dont do. Since it looks like it'll be Naruto/Ino, if you believe what is in the summary, then she isnt even Naruto's romantic interest. That could change, though...

Anyway, the only thing I really disliked about this story was the huge focus on anime/manga-type actions. Sweatdrops, nosebleeds and all that stuff. I feel this stuff sucks the realism out of the story, something I dont like. It doenst mean Sexy no Jutsu couldnt still work, it just means they wont fly ten feet in the air, a huge stream of blood flooding out of their faces. They could just faint or something, which is more real.

Overall, I liked this. Especially since I havnt had anything remarkable to read lately. I'll be watching this closely.

I'm flattered you think so, but I dont feel this author has done a bad job. It's possible I may write one in the future but for now, I have another idea I've been planning. That, along with all my Harry Potter work is enough to keep me busy.

 

For son of the monkey, i didn't like it from this part.

Which he decided to voice as soon as he got to his room. “AHHHH! IT BUURNS!” he howled as he clutched his eyes and began rolling around on the floor, wondering what kind of depraved lunatic would write such smut.

He should be confused, not horrified. :\ Not to mention he shouldn't understand half the words.

That was the end of the story for me.

 

'Something to Die For' was pretty interesting. Though, I was a little worried that it was going to focus on Sakura/Sasuke romance there for awhile. It was getting a bit annoying but I fought through.

Anyway, Naruto, at first, seemed even stupider than he is in canon. I think. But then suddenly, he was only mildly slow and could actually work shit out. I liked that method of approching the ANBU building, too. Hopefully, his time being trained by a psycho, he'll mellow out and become less dense.

I didnt mind Sasuke in this story either. Actually, I seem to be disliking him less and less these days, and starting to grow even more annoyed at Sakura. She was just... plain irritating in this. If this is what the author wanted, then I give him a pat on the back for a job well done.

Anyway, another think I thought was pretty cool is this whole unit thing. How they've pretty much been drafted into that area of ANBU already, but are only trainees. They'll also be trained by more than one person, which I find interesting.

All in all, I'm going to be watching this story for updates as well. Two stories I liked in one day... this hasnt happened in awhile. Lucky me.

 

That is something that I didn't like, they ahd them amrked down as Tranies, even though it would have only just been decided, and they ahdn't even passed the test. But yeah.. it should be.. interesting.

 

Lol. You drunk?

Yeah, that was a little stupid. Them being marked down as being in the unit already, when they hadnt passed his test yet.

 

I wasn't drunk, i was just tired... yeah that's it.