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New and Almost Recommended Harry Potter Fanfiction

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Dark Minion, Sep 20, 2014.

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  1. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Court?

    I thought you said Goblins were good lawyers.
     
  2. Gengar

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    Hah.

    Think about it. You'll pay your legal fees with what money?
     
  3. golan

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    Is there an "Almost recommended"-thread for other fandoms? If not, why not create one (if you do, please leave a link here somewhere)?

    Amen to that. Good riddance to bad rubbish.
     
  4. Radmar

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    Is it really that difficult to look for it? Here it is. It is also linked in the first post in this thread.
     
  5. golan

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    Sorry. :eek: OTL
     
  6. Spyder

    Spyder Third Year

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    Overall I'd agree with your assessment. The cliches didn't bother me as much the 'Queenie' thing annoyed me - but I'll probably still follow the story to see where it goes.

    As an aside, some of my banks regularly offer me legal services - of course, for a "small" fee. One even sends me a notice in Q3 of each year, offering me their in-house services on preparing/updating my will. :rolleyes:

    That's probably why the idea of goblins being involved in legal matters (especially related to inheritances) doesn't seem that incomprehensible - to me, at least.
     
  7. The Iron Rose

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    Most fanfiction writers aren't old enough to drink, let alone retain legal counsel themselves.
     
  8. Alexeyy

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    The Soul Within By: TheFlowerOfTheCourt
    The blood protection inside of Harry blocked His killing curse and burned His host body to ashes, yet failed to stop His soul from entering his body? Oh wait, it didn't! Harry's blood protection fights against Voldemort's soul and something new is created...a new soul and companion. Harry thinks it is unfair that she doesn't have a body of her own...well he is going to change that!
    Rated: Fiction T - English - Adventure/Romance - [Harry P., Daphne G., OC] - Chapters: 20 - Words: 135,094 - Reviews: 756 - Favs: 1,311 - Follows: 1,707 - Updated: Oct 13 - Published: Apr 2 - id: 10236556

    It's a story of Harry Potter becoming a dark wizard. WIP, starts from Year one, through Year two, and the last chapter marks the beginning of the Third year. It's neither a canon re-hash, nor a re-do dedicated to bashing.

    Technically, it's told from the first person POV, in slightly above average quality. Through the first year at Hogwarts you will have to bear with the childish behaviours that I'm sure Taure will tear into with abandon, so I leave critique to him. I will just say that I felt, well- squicky reading about children, and leave it at that. It wasn't terribly off-putting. That was the down-side, the upside is, the narration is very clear about the goals toward which it's going, so, strong goals is what kept me very interested while reading it.

    Second year, the author got better at writing. Forget squicky, the story becomes quite disturbing for altogether different reasons, that is, for what Harry does, and for what choices he makes. What the writing lacked at that point (I think) was that Harry wasn't having many moral compunctions for things he did, if any. The second year culminated in some very dark, disturbing themes, to me.

    Also, you will notice that as the story progresses through the first and the second years, it gives off many The Santi vibes, Harry trains, reads books, plots, and, well, does other stuff that I won't mention to not spoil the fun. The story definitely doesn't turn into a God!Harry type, but, well- on the other hand he's too damn smart to take it at face value! To illustrate the story's structure: we move on to a new scene, where Harry faces an obstacle to his goals. Harry works very hard to surpass it, he works and he plots and does some unsavory things that young dark wizards do, and he finally climbs over that obstacle without a scratch on him, only to face a new obstacle ahead. Then the whole theme repeats. See: without a scratch on him. The author needs to take a few lessons from Jim Butcher and read his notes on writing sequels. In short, this version of Harry Potter doesn't take as much punishment as he reasonably should.

    With the fracas at the end of the second year, the first big arc has ended. We've seen Harry entering the new world, learning, tackling obstacles, we've seen him dealing out punishment, meeting friends, being childish and cute - peaceful themes overall. So, by the chapters 19 and 20, the story transitions, well- into the real stuff. The story changed drastically: we see some moral turmoils (finally!), more challenging obstacles, more characters being involved into the story and being better fleshed out, and most importantly, we get the notion that things are not so easy as they seemed to be to young Harry.

    Okay, I've tried my best to present this story, which I think may be even library-worthy, without giving out all of the juicy details in order to not spoil the fun. Also, forgive me for my bad grammar, and also spell check doesn't seem to work for me for some reason.

    Edit: Oh, I forgot to mention, the premise, what Dumbledore did at the very beginning of the story - was total idiocy, breaks any suspension of disbelief. It's hard to ignore.
     
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  9. Download

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    I read that story to the end of year two and then stopped.

    Basically throughout the story Harry is someone whos willing to do some nasty stuff to give Violet a body, but he never harms truly innocent people and at several points Violet tells Harry he doesn't need to do all this for her. Then he kills Ginny Weasley, in cold blood, all while admiring her naked eleven year old body so he had a live horcrux to examine all while Violet remains silent.

    The author was fucking creepy there

    Harry then hardly bats an eyelid at his cold blooded murder and then he completely changes his mind and hands the horcrux back off to Lucius Malfoy.

    I'm curious why you point out gaping flaws in the story then say the story is library worthy.
     
  10. Joe's Nemesis

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    I started laughing out loud. God, that's the last thing we need . . . true justification for the Dances With Goblins trope.
     
  11. Alexeyy

    Alexeyy Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Yep, creepy.

    Due to the strong main line, and because it kept me reading.
     
  12. Nerox

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    What You Leave Behind by Lane Anasazi

    When Albus, Aberforth, and Grindelwald crossed wands, Ariana Dumbledore lived, and the ripples in the pond linger even today. An epic love story, new friends, old enemies, a deep exploration of the mysteries of Hogwarts, and a Harry Potter who is fundamentally unwilling to let others set the direction of his life.

    Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 8,033 - Reviews: 7 - Favs: 34 - Follows: 87 - Published: Oct 15 - Harry P., Fleur D.


    https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10758358/1/What-You-Leave-Behind

    Too short to really recommend anything yet, but reading through the stuff in the profile, I thought this could be a good one.

    Also, it's Harry/Fleur.
     
  13. Tenages

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    The random OC who'd moved from Australia whose sole purpose so far has been to be an author mouthpiece to express "LOL you Brits are all stupid for believing that baby Harry defeated the Dark Lord" was annoying as shit. My guess is the OC will continue to show up every time the author needs a mouthpiece to criticize what she doesn't like about canon.

    It's the same awful role Hermione fills in thousands of stories, except that since Harry is a year older, and thus no Hermione, the author chose to go the even more irritating route of inserting a foreign OC to fill her slot.

    I liked the first chapter. It piqued my interest. The second chapter bored me to tears. Hopefully we get more of the latter than the former going forward, but I wouldn't bet on it.
     
  14. Nerox

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    It must have been updated since I posted this, didn't see or read the second chapter yet.
     
  15. Tenages

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    Well it's got a fast update rate going for it then. :)
     
  16. Nerox

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    Just finished the chapter and I agree with you about the OC. Completely unnecessary. It also feels very disjointed from the first chapter. No information about any events that might have happened happened in the last 11 years that the author alluded to in the first chapter (Like if Dumbledore is still Headmaster).

    Also the bit about someone tampering with Harry's memories and the Erised part felt a bit random. Probably a plot device to introduce Sirius and/or someone else.

    Edit: I also hope the pace picks up a bit...I loathe first year stories. I would have preferred a bigger time skip with flashbacks of important events.
     
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  17. nahbutualright

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    I was expecting this story to stumble into bashing, instead its a shitty OC ruining things.

    Oh well, the first chapter was pretty cool.
     
  18. Fatality

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    First chapter was decent, but I'd have to agree that the second chapter was pretty lacklustre. I'm not really a fan of fics that feature first year anymore, and the OC was straight up terrible.

    As an Australian, this line made me physically cringe. Can't wait for the scene where the OC is amazing at Care of Magical Creatures because of his experience wrestling crocodiles and dodging dropbears.
     
  19. nahbutualright

    nahbutualright Slug Club Member

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    I think I was skimming by that point, I missed that part. Christ, other than politicians trying to sound folksy I don't think I've ever heard fair dinkum said unironically.
     
  20. TheWiseTomato

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    Author can't possibly be Aussie...unless they're one of those twats who turn the Ockerness up to 11 whenever they're in a foreign country. And this is coming from someone who has and does use the phrase 'fair dinkum' unironically.
     
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