Edited the post,:facepalm

 

I've not read the latest chapter but yeah, not a direction I like to see stories going. It's cheap instaconflict, a boring plot device by modern standards.

There's a bit of discussion by the author here. Relevant recent comments:

 

It's a short-cut to pairing that authors manage to bullshit themselves into thinking actually constitutes challenging and interesting drama, forcing characters into situations that're not comfortable with, making them develop and grow, creating a romance that isn't a romance but then develops into a romance.

 

I can't speak for the author, obviously, but maybe he'll do something with remnant Death Eaters? That seems to be a popular point for post-Deathly Hallows stories.

 

"Death Before Dishonour" had another good update. It includes an interesting Potions scene and a good scene with the Bloody Baron. I am, however, worried about the pacing. Either way, another couple of chapters and it could be ready for the Library.

 

It's not the only error. The content is good, but the writing is riddled with basic mistakes like apostrophe use, and stylistic problems like massive word repetition.

On top of that, the author doesn't quite know what he should write and what he should leave to the reader's imagination to fill in, so describes everything with extreme detail. Every single physical movement of Harry getting out of bed was described, as was his bathroom routine. The shaving bit works I guess, as it shows something about the character, but for the rest he could have just written "He showered and dried off before moving to the mirror to shave".

You see it again at breakfast. The end result is a lot of words but not much content, as so many of the words are "logistics" rather than plot, characterisation or worldbuilding.

 

Has he got a beta yet? These are all things that could be fixed with one.

 

No. In the A/N at the beginning of his latest chapter he said he was looking for one.

 

Hi, i'm the author of Death before Dishonour. Thank you for the helpful pointers. I'll definitely try to work on the areas that have been pointed out for improvement. I've read back through the first section of the third chapter and your right it does drag on a bit with unnecessary details. I'll try hard not to repeat it.

I'm working on getting a beta. I just want to make sure that I get one who's the right fit. There are so many advertising themselves on FF that I'm finding it hard to narrow it down to one that will be helpful to me. I don't want to end up with one who doesn't really fix the issues I have.

Thank you once again for the helpful pointers. Hopefully it'll help me improve and make this story better.

 

You can always post your new chapters in the Work by Author section of the forum. From typos to plot holes, there isn't much that escapes the people there (I know it helped me a bunch).

 

It's happened, guys - the culmination of all Indy!Harry fics. This fic is a guilty pleasure that has all those problems, the infinite money, the random powerups... in SPACE.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10784770/1/Harry-Potter-Geth

It's so cringeworthy, and it updates daily and is already finished. I'm finding a guilty little pleasure in it, though, which is surprising, and it's a good time-waster if nothing else.

 

Is it necessary to know anything about Mass Effect to enjoy this fic?

 

So far it's just a canon rehash, so I'd assume not. And you can't really say "enjoy" - I don't think it's good enough for that xD Like, almost almost reccomended.

 

Well, I'm reading a "guilty pleasure" fic now, too (Harry's Madness by SilverLocke980). Wasn't updated since more then 8 years, though

 

What I don't understand is why post it 1chapter/day if it is completed? with ~6k word chapters it will be an eternity before we can read teh full thing. Shit is not raven guys.

 

5/5. Move past go, collect $200, keep circling.