I disagree. Reading about Jon trying to get Joffrey to change, about how to get his father to love him, was so fucking awful. Oh and that scene where he goes "My god, Joffrey's not his son!" was cringeworthy.

 

And the author planned to make it Jon/Robb but had to change it. So the story might wind up being slash with Jon/someone other than Robb

 

And off my reading list it goes!

 

The author said in one of the author's notes that she/he was leaning towards Jon/Dany.

 

Originally in the character tags it stated Jon/Rob.

 

That doesn't necessarily mean that was the pairing.

 

Oh, good. Then I can continue to keep reading it. It has its faults but its better than most at the very least.

 

I was tired of looking through crap to find something worth reading, so I've decided to write one myself. It might be crap, but it's my crap at least

Let me know what you guys think, would you?

https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=28877

 

Five

A one-shot that's nearly 9k words long, but still quite good.

If this has been posted before, I apologize.

 

Holy shit, that's a great story. Everyone's in character, and the ending made me laugh. Not too long and not too short. Just perfect.

5/5.

 

Fuck yes. It's been bothering me that the last couple reviews I've left on DLP have been full-on Debbie Downer "this is kind of trash," so I feel really good about being able to wholeheartedly recommend something.

Joanna Lannister is just awesome. I totally buy her POV. Present tense works really well here. Some great moments. Whoever wrote this just nailed the tone of ASOIAF.

There are a few odd lines and the occasional typo, but they only stand out because the rest of the story is so good.

5/5, put this in the library.

EDIT: I liked this so much I checked the author's A03 page to see what else she'd written. (Guessing female based on username.)

And on your head a crown

60K words, ASOIAF divergence - "What if Olenna Tyrell was there at Bitterbridge? What if Catelyn and Brienne were never in Renly's tent? What if Olenna and Catelyn brokered another marriage after Renly's death - one between Robb and Margaery?"

Anyone read it? I'll probably give it a shot just based on Five being good. A pretty interesting divergence - this would lead to, I'm guessing, the Starks and Tyrells banding together against the Lannisters? Robb being an actual interesting character? No Red Wedding?

 

I've read it before and I've grown to dislike it, because 90% of it is women scheming around and Robb suddenly thirsting desperately to rule from the Iron Throne, which completely defies his usual characterization.

I've looked around that author's other ASOIAF related works and the aforementioned "Five" is pretty much the only one I'd ever recommend.

 

Well, thanks, Deputy Downer.

 

I'm on my phone so the page is stretched a little too far to read

 

I've heard this before. It's why I never cared to read the story. There was something else about Robb not laying the pipe right, too, but I might be getting that mixed up with something else.

 

Boy, almost a shittier break for Lyanna than canon.

 

I'll disagree with Odran. There were a few cringe worthy moments, but otherwise it was an interesting read. The author's biggest problem is that she writes male characters like fools and put women on a pedestal; it reminds me a bit of what Robert Jordan was doing in the Wheel of Time for every woman.

Robb's decision to take the Iron Throne was not so much influenced by the women, he just realized he'd never be safe from Stannis who would never tolerate a king in the North or the Lannister if they won and he promised the Tyrell help in their cause which they kind of forced on him a bit there. So character wise, it made sense he'd go there now armed with the Tyrell's host.

It might not be the best piece out there, but I think it's worth a read. I despise her Jeyne Westerling/Robb interaction though. It's atrocious. Robb is relatively well characterized until you put him in the same scene as Jeyne, he just becomes an idiot when that happens (so far).

 

Just read through it, and I didn't really like it. There seemed to be a lot of changes just for the sake of changes, rather than being a part of an overarching plot.

Also, there's very little action. And all of the actual divergences are shown in retrospect. Like, you see Robb wounded at tended to Jeyne for about 2 seconds, with the Tyrells and Northmen thinking him lost, and then the next chapter, everything is fine and dandy.

The characters are all pretty much OOC, and read sort of the same. Like the author will say X and Y is cunning, but just by saying X and Y is cunning, doesn't actually make it so. And, all the political trickery and conniving is identical, in that everyone is underestimated by everyone else, just for them to be shown to not be such a fool. Bland, if you ask me, and too much simpering.

 

Yeah, I got about a quarter of the way through it and gave it up for pretty much that reason. The "all sizzle, no steak" thing (description of events, talk about events, no actual events) worked well in Five because it was so short and it kept jumping in time, but for a longer story you really need more than that style to carry it.

 

I think it was also that Five was all just plotting/scheming and dealing with family interactions; the author is quite talented at that, but stumbles when trying to progress a plot as opposed to proposing one. Works well with vignettes where plot progression is handwaved but not in a longer tale.

Five really was great though.