Somebody make this happen. Answer our prayers. There may or may not be cookies presented as a reward.

 

Somehow, this is really good.

It's pretty short as of now, but it's a really interesting FSN xover, or probably more of a fusion.

I know the femslash isn't for everyone, but there's just something about the way it plays out in terms of the servant summoning that makes me smile.

 

Huh... pretty cool idea. It also makes sense from a thematic point of view, with Ozpin's name coming from the Wizard of Oz. Jaune bullshitting his way through situations, using his future knowledge to his advantage, building up a reputation of being brilliant and wise, and gaining a position of power as a result - despite actually being rather weak.

While I doubt it's actually the case, it is interesting to look at some of the quotes from canon from the perspective that it's a time travelling Jaune.

"I've made more mistakes than any man, woman, and child on this planet."

"But right now they're still children, so why not let them play the part? After all, it isn't a role they'll have forever."

"It's not every day that friends are able to come together like this. Time has a way of testing our bonds, but it's nights like these that can help keep them stronger than ever. Nights like these are ones we'll never forget."

It kind of reminds me of the "Dumbledore is a time travelling Ron" theory.

 

From Beyond
by: Coeur Al'Aran
Rating: T
Description: Seeing that young man die in initiation was horrifying for her. Even with all her time in the White Fang, she hadn't expected to see such an idealistic man as Jaune Arc die like that. It should have been nothing more than a tragedy... Instead she's now stuck with the lingering spirit of this guy following her around, and no one else can hear or see him in any way. Jaune x Blake

The premise is that Jaune dies during the initiation, directly in front of Blake. He ends up sticking around as a spirit, stuck within a few feet of Blake, who incidentally is the only one who can see him. It's a bit outlandish, but it's rather enjoyable. While it's dangerously close to a canon rehash, it manages to keep just enough different to keep it interesting. The Jaune and Blake interactions are actually pretty well done. Death has also lowered Jaune's inhibitions to some degree, so he's basically full of lulz.

It's mostly a rom-com, but it has had some dramatic moments within the past few chapters that were well done. Jaune's death, despite being treated as tragic by the characters themselves, ends up coming across as rather funny (the first two chapters are filled with black humor).

Overall, a good read. 3/5-4/5, probably deserves to be put up for review at some point in the near future.

 

Maybe it's just the champagne talking, but I cracked up more than a few times at this. Episode 2 is a pretty steep improvement on Episode 1, and the first one was still fairly funny.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lSagoGV1zww

 

I'm laughing.

 

I got bored about 3 minutes into episode 1.

Also, aren't abridged versions supposed to be you know, abridged?

 

Also: here's some racism.

 

That's some quality racism.

 

Recc'ing this

https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?p=889356#post889356

 

Neo/Torchwick

Sorta

http://archiveofourown.org/works/5620564/chapters/12947554

 

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11525574/1/Dead-Man-Walking-Or-Something

Dead Man Walking (Or Something)
By: College Fool 
Jaune only had a ghost of a chance of surviving Initiation. Thus, he didn't. A little dying is no reason to give up his life's dream of becoming a Hunter, right? Even if 'life' is now a bit late... (Warning: morbid comedy. Literally.)
Rated: Fiction T - English - Supernatural/Humor - Jaune Arc, Team JNPR, Team RWBY - Chapters: 6 - Words: 34,575 - Reviews: 158 - Favs: 363 - Follows: 491 - Updated: Oct 30, 2015 - Published: Sep 25, 2015 - id: 11525574

From the same author as A common criminal or something, A farmer or something and A household macho or something, all of which were already recommended in the thread.

The premise is simple. Jaune dies at the start of the initiation. Like, in the first thirty seconds or so. He comes back as a zombie. The reactions are varied.

I laughed several times while reading it and while it only covers the initiation so far, at a little more than 30 thousands words and with a nice cutting point at the end of the last chapter it is worth a read if you wish to kill some time. If the author ended it where it is left one could consider it complete already. I highly recommend it.

 

Interlunium
By: AyutaYutyl
A Huntsman can be many things - protector, guardian, criminal, outcast, savior, destroyer. Regardless of who or what we become, the path of Hunters and Huntresses is one that crosses the lines of life and death; yours, and mine.
Rated: Fiction M - English - Adventure - [Ruby Rose, Jaune Arc] Cinder Fall - Chapters: 9 - Words: 53,013 - Reviews: 88 - Favs: 120 - Follows: 184 - Updated: Jan 17 - Published: Nov 2, 2015 - id: 11593529

This has to be one of the best in the fandom. It features a much darker world than the canon RWBY let on. Relationships are much harder to form because everyone has their own goals and baggage. Especially in a world where they are constantly surrounded by death.

 

I think this story has passed the point of 'darker' and is well into grimderp territory.

Spoiler

There are super deadly grimm everywhere, the body count is around 20 at this point (not including the plane crash at the start of the story) and a few of the characters have had their flaws/quirks turned up to 11.

Weiss is a total cunt with a massive inferiority complex because Winter has already done everything she wants to do, except better.

Jaune's internal monologue is an endless loop of "I'm so pathetic, why hasn't everyone given up on me yet????"

Yang has swapped out her supportive tendencies from the show for a mean streak.

Nora is portrayed as a simpleton with a hammer.

The writing itself is pretty good, but I can't bring myself to give this story higher than a 3/5.

 

I tried to get into it, I really did, but Jaune being such an obnoxious whiny little shit made me nope out. As Kai said, the writing seemed pretty okay otherwise.

 

I now don't feel as bad as I did passing the story up when I saw it was Ruby/Jaune.

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Anyone know of any decent Malachite twins stories?

 

Have you read Four Deadly Secrets? They're reasonably major side characters in that, and probably the best I've seen them written.

 

Halt

I was going to suggest a word count column, something I always miss when I'm not reading on fanfiction.net or a similar site but I'm assuming your doing this manually and not scraping?