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The Potter Tradition of Red by Sree/Jolly Rancher - K

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by relas, Dec 10, 2006.

  1. Shezza

    Shezza Renegade 4 Life DLP Supporter

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    Hey, I haven't browsed the library for weeks, and when I go in today, I see a story with one or two stars. So, I have a read and give an honest review. Isn't that what this entire section is about? I didn't do it as a prank or a joke, or to be an arsehole. I was just giving a critique of why it was cliched and what was wrong- I may not have been nice, but I rarely am.


    And my story is about 2/3 done, hopefully finished by the new year (but not likely)
     
  2. Xiph0

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    Quoted for emphasis.
     
  3. Ragon

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  4. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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  5. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Rofl.

    Funniest thing on DLP ever^^

    Anyway, on a more serious note, if stories are moved to the library on the basis of the opinions of the members, and both Xiph0 and myself think that the story has merit, is that not a cause for it to be moved to the library?

    At the very least, it is enough to keep the story being reviewed.
     
  6. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    This is true indeed. Moderators?


    Edit: :cheers: BEER!
     
  7. Master Slytherin

    Master Slytherin Headmaster

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    I'm sick and tired of people whining about the story not being moved to the trash bin or deleted. If it bothers you so much, don't come into the thread. Have you not thought that there might be a reason why it's not been moved? Perhaps you haven't noticed but the wriritng style is ok and there's only been 2 small chapters... Also, there are people who want it in the library now.

    /sighs
     
  8. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    You like a few other people actually gave this thing a 'non-abusive' review in an effort to be fair. But I really think the author is just baiting us, I can not believe the author did not get the reviews and critques we left so I think they're just being a troll. Why else would you post the link to your second chapter? I mean I checked out the first chapter again to see maybe they'd taken the reviews under consideration but no. I call TROLL!!

    Xiph0 and Taure, you're just playing around right? right?
     
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  9. Xiph0

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    You can call troll if I can call someone who like's male anus.


    I add smileys to jokes, not truth.
     
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  10. Oujou Akaash

    Oujou Akaash Unspeakable

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    I actually agree with you too. It just doesn't feel right for some reason.
     
  11. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    I dunno what your on man. I'd say this fic will end up pretty awesome.

    5/5 here for now.
     
  12. Nexus

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    Okay, I am going to actually review this properly rather than just bash!troll it.
    The writing style is okay. The plot isnt revealed too much. This could be humour, like a parody of all the cliches in h/g. But even then its isn't that good.
    I am not against H/G, in fact I like it if it is written properly (see 1st post in this thread). But this fic is ridiculously boring if taken seriously. And if it is a parody it is too shortly written, too fast paced, and doesnt amuse the reader when it should. I'd give 2/5 at best if it is a parody and 0/5 if it is a serious fic.
     
  13. Xiph0

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    Wow, and here I thought DLP was suppose to be honest?
     
  14. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    A joke? A joke!

    My dear sir, I have never been quite so insulted in my life!

    A joke indeed...

    This type of attitude is just what we are trying to get rid of: this blatant prejudice, outrageous flaming, this - disgrace.

    I shall thank you to be more respectful to authors of true quality such as our friend here, who's writing standards are - I believe - second to none.
     
  15. Xiph0

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    Story Added to C2: DarkLordPotter Library: General
    <hr noshade="noshade" size="1">Story, The Potter Tradition of Red, added to C2 archive
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    Done.

    Note: This story reflects DLP's strive for excellence in fiction and Taure and myself are of the opinion - having consulted with many members - that it is worth the library & C2. Please keep your flaming to a minimum.
     
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  16. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Let's put it this way:

    Had Ginny died, this would have gotten a 5/5.

    Therefore, it gets a 4/5 DLP oriented review. This story is still good, and would make a worthy addition to the Library. I've seen worse fics get in.
     
  17. BlueMagikMarker

    BlueMagikMarker Pirate King Yarrgh's First Mate

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    I agree with Amerision, much worse fics have gotten into the library before. I think that this fic should be accepted merely because of the great potential it has. With the guidance of our community through constructive reviews, this may become a H/G fic that we can actually accept, maybe even like. We should at least give the author a chance to develop the plot before we strike it down. 4/5
     
  18. Skeletaure

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    I was so inspired by this story that I've been motivated to write a quick small fanfiction in its honour.

    .....................................

    Harry could not believe his eyes. Wandering down the dark Potions corridor after curfew, he was following Ginny, his beautiful love, gazing at her shapely arse as she swayed her hips, knowing what reaction she was provoking in him.

    Not able to contain himself any longer, he quickened his pace and caught up with her, and taking her by surprise he took her in his arms and swept his red-headed soul-mate into a deep, passionate, kiss that spoke of their endless love. Ginny gasped as she felt his lips on hers, but remembering his taste from the night before she groaned in that way Harry loved and leaned into the kiss, not caring if Snape might catch them at any time.

    As quickly as it had started, Harry pulled away and, flashing her his trademark grin walked away looking very pleased with himself.

    .....................................

    End of Part One. Part Two to follow any day now.
     
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  19. Xiph0

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    That was something else Taure, 8/10.

    Anyone else want to share an opinion?
     
  20. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Ehh.

    I take back my initial review. I must have confused this with another H/G.

    2/5

    Either that, or I hadn't read the 2nd chapter. There is no as yet undeveloped plot for this story, I just realized. The category is "Romance", meaning the plot is the romance.

    Therefore, there is nothing that is going to change. As a romance story, this is what we have been stuck with. The focus of this story is invertebrate!Harry being taken from behind by Dom!Ginny.

    For newbies, this may be a fic they will like, but for me, it's a 2/5, just for pure mechanics.

    I'm in need of some serious Harry/Luna.
     
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