Title: Nymph in servitude
Author: Hawk
Rating: M
Genre: General
DLP Category: Restricted Section (later)
Pairing: H/T
Status: WIP
Summary: Hawk's response to the CJ Cold Tonks Slave Challenge on the PP3 Yahoo Group.
Tonks, through a deal gone bad on her mother's part, is forced to become the lifetime servant of Lord Black: Harry Potter.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3287159/1/


While there are a few clichès: The whole Lord Black scenario, Manipulative!Dumbledore, foresight!Sirius, and a will.:|

Harry is cannon!Harry.:?

It doesn't bog the fic down too badly, plus there is smut to look forward to.

The author gets points likewise. for ignoring HBP.

I'd rate it as above average.

 

This story is just a relly bad reason to get Harry in bed with tonks. I havent read a lot but what I have is just not good.

I'll give it a 2/5.

I'll edit this post if the story actually starts shapes up better in the next chapters.

 

Wow - original, good flow, HONKS

I like it 4.5/5

 

Hawk takes retarded concepts and writes them into stories that tend to be readable if not enjoyable. Too bad his updates are few and far between, plus he has a crap-load of stories.

You'll find chapter 2 unedited by searching the homepage link in his author profile (requires registration) and chapter 3 by searching PP3. I can't be assed to do that at the moment.

As for the story itself, yeah it's cliché. Yeah, it's outlandish. But yeah, it's enjoyable for what it is.

3.5/5

 

Firstly:

This almost put me off reading it in the first place, especially the soundeffect/radio etc one, why can't the author write this information into the fic somehow?

Regarding the actual content of the fic, it's not badly written, if a little cliched, so I'll give it 3/5

 

the story is average at best.
just a load of clichées put together to get into a smutty scene with tonks (at least the smut is decent).
Frankly there are way better one-shots around.
If it was supposed to be a full story then it might evolve into something decent, but he hardly updates his stories at a consistent rate

 

I didn't really like this. The premise was contrived, and it had nothing really to draw you in except the promise of some Honks action.

Stutter anyone?

 

I'd like it if the Harry was like the one from L'Esprit de Hadrian
2.5 - 3 / 5

 

Well... it was a little extreme in a few major aspects.

1) The amount of Info Tonks was willing to give harry for no reason other than that he asked
2) The amount of trouble Harry went though
3) The people harry contacted for 'help'
4) The speed at which harry excepted the circumstances.

The Cliche' were just that, and as they mentioned before it was fairly contrived reasoning aimed specifically at making Tonks a slave...

Overall 3-3.5

 

I agree ,WHY in G.O.D is he asking Malfoy and whoever for help?

There is no possiblity that harry(outside of those disgusting H/D fics) would ever ask Malfoy for help with anything,besides isn't harry supposed to have a shit load of money anyway.

 

I did not like it all that much. I will settle with a 2.5 possibly 3/5.

 

yes but if you think about it he is not going to have it all in his trust vault and he probably cant access it until he is of age, like the black money.

otherwise all in all a okay read if you are looking for somthing to pass the time.
3/5

 

This story sucks. Nothing really new about it. It's full of cliches and what the hell was up with stuttering Tonks? I'll give .5 for the effort. 1 if Tonks gets a lot of bed action in the next few chapter.

 

I may be a fan of Honks, but this was entirely too cliched... the smut scenes need a great deal of work done on them, and the plot desperately needs a breath of fresh air. 2/5 for effort, however big a failure in execution.

 

this fic is not worth reading

 

I actually enjoyed this, though there are certainly better McGuffins out there. Harry is very much in character and the logic hangs together surprisingly well. Harry being incredibly rich is fanon and nothing more - he's comfortably-off and the Blacks were seriously rich three generations back, but that's all we know. I think asking Malfoy was actually a good call on the writer's part. Harry doesn't *have* anyone else who can give him an outside perspective on pureblood High Society, and Malfoy is in no position to argue. As for Tonks being free with information, what has she got to lose? It's not as if Harry's going to be worse than Malferret or death.
I'll give it 3.5/5 so far.