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Complete Demon’s Feign, Merlin’s Pain by Nuhuh - M - Dresden Files

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Nuhuh, Apr 1, 2007.

  1. holyhastes

    holyhastes Raptured to Hell

    Good news then. So are you going to post us a tasty chapter for us to eat whyle we wait for the main meal. (in french its aperitif and I don't know the exact word in english)

    ---Lorian---
     
  2. Shezza

    Shezza Renegade 4 Life DLP Supporter

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    Like I said, this has been long overdue, and it's all cool

    :fap
     
  3. Glernaj

    Glernaj Stab Executive DLP Supporter

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    Excellent, most excellent. Only real problem I caught was that you appear to be using the TV show Bob, but that might just have been something I didn't notice in earlier chapters.
     
  4. Jon

    Jon The Demon Mayor Admin DLP Supporter

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    I ship Potter/Ferrovax's daughter.
     
  5. Sorrows

    Sorrows Queen of the Flamingos Moderator

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    Lovely been waiting for this, is Mai being half dragon cannon?

    Jon, what would you call Ferrovax's daughter?
     
  6. No Earthly Clue

    No Earthly Clue Third Year DLP Supporter

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    Excellent, loved the fact that Harry stole Dresdens client. The chapter was definitely wroth the wait.
     
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  7. Blackvoice

    Blackvoice Third Year

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    Just today I was rereading this in my grandmother's computer, thinking it was too damn good for my own health and that he should update already. Then I came home and found the alert waiting in my inbox. I may have wept in joy.
     
  8. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Haha, awesome chapter. I've been waiting for this.

    Thanks for updating! :) 5/5
     
  9. Jon

    Jon The Demon Mayor Admin DLP Supporter

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    It's TV canon.

    I would call her.. Gwen!
     
  10. Woelfle

    Woelfle Muggle

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    Great chapter, it was definitly worth the wait.
     
  11. ParseltonguePhoenix

    ParseltonguePhoenix Unspeakable

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    Very fucking nice. I like the way you keep the shit piling up on Dresden in a canon-style...not to mention the way Potter steps in it without even knowing it. 5/5 for the update.
     
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  12. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    If I could laugh without there being gratuitous pain I would have been laughing my ass off all the way through. The Rose Sprite was especially nice :p.
     
  13. Jaba

    Jaba Backtraced

    Pure excellence! Been waiting for this for a while, and you didn't disapoint at all. 5/5.:whipped:
     
  14. QuaziJoe

    QuaziJoe Dolphin Boy

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    I definetley liked the changes you made, flows much better in my opinion.

    And I was doing a little cheer in my head when you made murfy conceed that she needed harry instead of letting her manipulate him. That annoys me to hell when ever I see a character do that...

    I just remembered that this was based of the tv series more than the books after I read the dragon bit.

    Is murfy startign to see that harry may not be right in the head now... I noticed you were having her skate dangerously close to the figuring it out.
     
  15. Innomine

    Innomine Alchemist ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Myself, I am curious to roqa's reactions to his insanity. Shouldn't she be able to do something about it perhaps, or is his prolonged insanity vital to the story?
     
  16. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    LMAO. Indeed you did add it, Nuhuh. And I see no-one has even noticed it yet. Thats appreciation for you, isn't it?

    CHU <3
     
  17. Azrael's Little Helper

    Azrael's Little Helper High Inquisitor

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    If you mean the loli-pop bit, I'd say that many people have picked up on it but are too used to seeing it pop up every so often that we're "jaded".
     
  18. Dnarg

    Dnarg Squib

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    Loved the chapter. Besides some spelling, there was just this small thing I noticed:

    You have his drink taken away twice w/o any indication that he got it back. Otherwise, :fap
     
  19. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    Thank you for all the reviews. The Beta'd version is now up on PC, FF, and Dresden WBA. Tinn was nice enough to make it a lot smoother, content is largely the same though, but should make for a better read now.

    TV Bob: yes, this is first based on TV verse and then Book verse but I am integrating the two.

    Mai: It is implied that she is dragon or part dragon in the TV series, I am using that in this story.

    Roqariel and Hallucinations: This will come up soonish. Harry's reaction should be interesting to Roqariel's commentary on his invisible friends.

    Quazi's question about Murphy: Yes, she is beginning to notice that Harry is a little mad.

    I think that covers the questions and comments. Thank you all for the reviews. Glad you're enjoying the story despite the update rate.
     
  20. Water Mage

    Water Mage Denarii Host

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    Roquariel sure has a way with words. Her essay was brilliantly done. Love that innocently packedged, hardcore edge that she has about her. I'm looking forward to seeing whether Harry's guidance will have her drowning deeper in Hell or send her clawing toward Heaven.

    Harry stealing Dresden's client definitely was another favorite of mine too. I could easily visualize how that whole scene played out.

    This story continues to remain my favorite Dresden fanfiction. Vash's Winter's Night is a close second.

    Excellent update.